Weather— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more natural and grammatically correct by using proper tenses and sentence structures. Also, avoid redundancy and be more specific about the weather conditions.

例: Currently, the weather in Canada is mostly rainy and cloudy. During winter, it usually snows and the temperature is quite cold.

提案: Focus on giving a clear topic sentence and support it with specific reasons. Use linking words to connect your ideas and avoid repetition.

例: I prefer hot weather because cold weather in Canada often restricts outdoor activities and work. In hot weather, I feel more energetic and can enjoy being outside.

提案: Make your ideas clearer and more coherent by using correct grammar and linking words. Provide specific reasons and avoid incomplete sentences.

例: I prefer dry weather because it motivates me and helps me feel stronger both physically and mentally. In contrast, wet or cold weather often makes me feel gloomy and less productive.

提案: Complete your sentences and organise your answer logically. Explain when and how often you check the forecast with clear reasons.

例: Yes, I regularly check the weather forecast, especially before going to my clinic. Since the weather in Canada can be rainy and cold, I check it daily to plan my day accordingly.

提案: Try to answer all questions by giving your opinion or knowledge, even if limited. Avoid skipping questions and use simple sentences to express your thoughts.

例: I think climate change has caused more extreme weather, like heavier rain and hotter summers, which affects people's lives and the environment.

提案: Make your answer more structured and clear. Use linking words and provide specific details about why you want to visit those places.

例: Yes, I would like to visit cities with different climates. For example, India has diverse weather with distinct seasons, and I find that very interesting and refreshing.

× Well I'm leaving Canada so currently weather will be rainy and very cloudy mostly in Canada.

✓ Well, I live in Canada, so currently the weather is mostly rainy and very cloudy in Canada.

The student incorrectly used 'I'm leaving' (present continuous) instead of 'I live' (present simple) to describe a habitual state. Also, 'weather will be rainy' is incorrect for current conditions; present simple 'is' should be used. Adding 'the' before 'weather' is necessary as it is a specific noun here.

× Winter will be snow and cold weather is mostly.

✓ Winter is mostly snowy and cold.

The phrase 'Winter will be snow' is incorrect; 'snow' is a noun and cannot be used as a verb here. 'Snowy' (adjective) should be used to describe winter. Also, 'cold weather is mostly' is awkward; rephrasing to 'Winter is mostly snowy and cold' is clearer.

× Well, as I mentioned earlier, I am living in Canada, so mostly weather here, cold weather.

✓ Well, as I mentioned earlier, I live in Canada, so the weather here is mostly cold.

Use present simple 'I live' for habitual action instead of present continuous 'I am living'. Also, 'mostly weather here, cold weather' is incomplete; it should be 'the weather here is mostly cold'.

× And because of cold weather we can't do proper work and we can't go outside.

✓ Because of the cold weather, we can't do proper work and can't go outside.

Starting a sentence with 'And' is informal and unnecessary. Also, 'because of cold weather' needs 'the' before 'cold weather'. The sentence is better structured without 'And' and with proper article usage.

× So that's why I prefer hot weather because of I most like hot weather and in hot hot weather.

✓ So that's why I prefer hot weather because I mostly like hot weather, especially hot weather.

'Because of I most like' is incorrect; 'because I mostly like' is correct. Also, repetition of 'hot hot weather' is redundant; 'especially hot weather' is clearer.

× I mostly prefer dry weather because I think dry weather will be motivates ourselves and it helps to overgrown and strength as well as our thinking.

✓ I mostly prefer dry weather because I think dry weather motivates us and helps us grow stronger, as well as improves our thinking.

'Will be motivates' is incorrect; 'motivates' is correct. 'Overgrown' is incorrect; 'grow' is correct. 'Strength' should be 'grow stronger'. Also, 'ourselves' should be 'us' for object pronoun. The sentence is rephrased for clarity and correctness.

× But compared to cold weather or wet weather, we have lots of negative thinking and.

✓ But compared to cold or wet weather, we tend to have a lot of negative thoughts.

The original sentence ends abruptly and is incomplete. 'Negative thinking and' is incomplete; it should be 'negative thoughts'. Also, 'lots of' is informal; 'a lot of' is better here. The sentence is completed for clarity.

× Yes Sir, I am in the habit of checking in the weather forecast because I have lots of work of my clinic and because of weather because of Canada weather, too much rainy and too much cold outside the house.

✓ Yes Sir, I am in the habit of checking the weather forecast because I have a lot of work at my clinic, and because of the weather in Canada, it is very rainy and very cold outside the house.

'Checking in the weather forecast' should be 'checking the weather forecast'. 'Lots of work of my clinic' should be 'a lot of work at my clinic'. 'Because of weather because of Canada weather' is repetitive; rephrased for clarity. 'Too much rainy' and 'too much cold' are incorrect; 'very rainy' and 'very cold' are correct.

× So I use the.

✓ So I use the weather forecast regularly.

The sentence is incomplete and unclear. Completing it clarifies the meaning.

× Uh, I don't think, uh, because of, uh, I'm not that type of person and I don't have things like that, so I skip this question.

✓ Uh, I don't think about it because I'm not that type of person and I don't have such concerns, so I will skip this question.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. Rephrasing improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Yes, I would like to visit other cities that have a different climates from my live because I I mostly live in India because India's weather are very umm interesting and very energetic as well as they have three divide 4 divided parts, four months, some are four months winter and.

✓ Yes, I would like to visit other cities that have different climates from where I live because I mostly live in India, and India's weather is very interesting and energetic. It is divided into three or four parts, with some parts having four months of winter.

'A different climates' is incorrect; should be 'different climates'. 'My live' should be 'where I live'. 'India's weather are' should be 'India's weather is' (singular). 'They have three divide 4 divided parts' is unclear; rephrased for clarity. The sentence is completed for coherence.