Weather— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，建议简化句子结构，避免使用不恰当的词汇，如“leaving”应为“living”，并且注意句子连贯性。可以用更自然的表达描述天气特点。

例: I live in Shenzhen, which has a subtropical climate. In summer, the temperature often reaches 28 degrees Celsius, so people usually stay indoors with air conditioning. It also rains quite frequently here.

提案: 回答表达基本清楚，但语法和用词有待改进，如“play in the outside”应为“play outside”，并且句子结构可以更自然流畅。建议使用连接词使表达更连贯。

例: I prefer cold weather to hot weather because I enjoy playing outside when it's cold. Since I live in Shenzhen and have never seen snow, I really want to experience snowy weather.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，如“a dried weather”应为“dry weather”，句子结构混乱。建议简化句子，明确表达观点，并避免重复。

例: I prefer dry weather because when it's wet, the floor gets dirty easily, which I don't like.

提案: 回答表达不自然且有语法错误，如“don't have the hobby to solve the weather forecast”应改为“不习惯查看天气预报”。建议用简洁明了的句子表达习惯和频率。

例: I don't usually check the weather forecast myself, but my phone sends me notifications about the air quality once a day.

提案: 回答中有严重语法和词汇错误，如“camera train”应为“climate change”，“heat Weld”应为“heat waves”，表达不清晰。建议学习相关词汇并用简单句表达观点。

例: Climate change is causing temperatures to rise everywhere. In my city, we often experience unusual heat waves and typhoons, which affect industries like agriculture.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不连贯，如“thought not”应为“though not”，时态使用不当。建议使用正确时态和连词，使表达更自然。

例: Yes, I would like to visit cities with different climates. For example, I visited Heilongjiang province with my mother during summer holidays because the weather there is very cold and comfortable.

× Well, you know, now I'm leaving the Shenzhen city, which is a subtropical city.

✓ Well, you know, now I'm living in Shenzhen city, which is a subtropical city.

这里用现在进行时表示“居住”，应使用动词live的现在进行时living，而不是leave（离开）。另外，城市名称前不需要冠词the。

× now I'm leaving the Shenzhen city

✓ now I'm living in Shenzhen city

地名前一般不加定冠词the，除非是特定的地理名称。这里应去掉the。

× The average temperature in summer can reach the 28°

✓ The average temperature in summer can reach 28°

温度前不需要加定冠词the，直接说reach 28°即可。

× so people always stayed in the air conditioning homes.

✓ so people always stay in air-conditioned homes.

描述习惯动作应使用一般现在时，且air conditioning homes应改为air-conditioned homes。

× What mode? There is always a rainy day.

✓ What about the weather? There are always rainy days.

原句结构混乱，疑问句不完整，应改为完整疑问句。且“a rainy day”应改为复数形式“rainy days”，表示经常有雨天。

× I can play in the outside.

✓ I can play outside.

outside前不需要加介词in。

× now I'm living in the Shenzhen city and I never saw the snow

✓ now I'm living in Shenzhen city and I have never seen snow

描述经历时应使用现在完成时have never seen，而不是一般过去时never saw。

× so I really want to play it in the cold weather.

✓ so I really want to play in the cold weather.

play后不需要it，去掉it更符合英语表达习惯。

× I will choose a dried weather

✓ I will choose dry weather

weather是不可数名词，前面不加冠词a，且形容词用dry而非dried。

× if in the wet weather if you sweep the floor it will be so dirty

✓ if in wet weather you sweep the floor, it will be very dirty

去掉多余的if，wet weather前不加the，且用very dirty更自然。

× and I can stand it.

✓ and I can't stand it.

根据语境，应表达“我受不了”，应使用否定形式can't stand。

× I think I don't have the hobby to solve the weather forecast

✓ I think I don't have the habit of checking the weather forecast

hobby和solve用法错误，应使用habit of checking。

× my phone will recommend the notification about the air weather to me maybe once one day, one things a day.

✓ my phone will send me notifications about the air quality maybe once a day, one thing a day.

recommend the notification用法错误，应改为send notifications；once one day应为once a day；things改为thing。

× camera train is definitely did not doubt that temperatures are rising everywhere.

✓ Climate change is definitely without doubt causing temperatures to rise everywhere.

camera train应为climate change；句子结构错误，改为正确表达。

× we usually suffered unusual heat Weld and typhoons

✓ we usually suffer unusual heat waves and typhoons

描述经常发生的事情应使用一般现在时suffer；heat Weld应为heat waves。

× not to mentioned what it's doing to all kinds of the industries like agriculture.

✓ not to mention what it's doing to all kinds of industries like agriculture.

not to mentioned应为not to mention；the industries前不加the。

× Yes, of course, thought not.

✓ Yes, of course, though not.

thought应为though，表示转折。

× In the summer day summer holidays, I visit the Heilongjiang province with my mother

✓ In the summer holidays, I visited Heilongjiang province with my mother

描述过去的动作应使用过去时visited；summer day summer holidays表达重复，应简化为summer holidays。

× because in there the weather is so cold.

✓ because the weather there is so cold.

in there表达不自然，应改为there；the weather前加the正确。