Weather— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời cần tự nhiên hơn và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi với câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó cung cấp chi tiết cụ thể. Ví dụ, thay vì nói 'The where we live', bạn nên nói 'The weather where I live'.

例: The weather where I live is usually hot and humid throughout the year. For instance, it often rains heavily during the summer months, making it quite uncomfortable.

提案: Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không phù hợp. Bạn nên sử dụng liên từ để kết nối ý và cung cấp ví dụ cụ thể, dễ hiểu.

例: I prefer cold weather because it is mild and pleasant. For example, I can exercise all day without feeling tired, and I enjoy spending time outdoors with my friends.

提案: Câu trả lời khá tốt nhưng bạn có thể thêm liên từ để câu mạch lạc hơn và sử dụng từ vựng phong phú hơn để làm câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn.

例: I prefer dry weather because it is more comfortable and convenient for daily activities. Moreover, I can do outdoor workouts and plan events without worrying about rain.

提案: Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi và giải thích ngắn gọn, sử dụng liên từ để câu mạch lạc.

例: I don't usually check the weather forecast because my parents often do it for me. However, I sometimes check it when I plan to go out.

提案: Câu trả lời cần chính xác hơn về nội dung và ngữ pháp. Bạn nên giải thích rõ hơn về tác động của biến đổi khí hậu và dùng từ vựng phù hợp.

例: In my opinion, climate change has caused deforestation in recent years. For example, many trees have been cut down, which affects the environment and wildlife.

提案: Câu trả lời cần tự nhiên hơn và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi và cung cấp lý do hoặc ví dụ cụ thể.

例: Yes, I would like to visit cities with different climates. For example, I want to experience the cold weather in northern countries because I usually live in a hot climate.

× The where we live is extremely uncomfortable throughout the year.

✓ The place where we live is extremely uncomfortable throughout the year.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'The where we live' which is not grammatically correct. 'There be issue' applies because the sentence lacks a proper subject. Replacing it with 'The place where we live' provides a clear subject and corrects the sentence structure.

× For example, the weather is hot and wet for the whole Four Seasons.

✓ For example, the weather is hot and wet throughout the whole year.

'Four Seasons' is a plural noun and does not fit well in this context. The phrase 'for the whole Four Seasons' is awkward. Changing it to 'throughout the whole year' is more natural and grammatically correct.

× In my viewpoint, I would prefer cold weather because it's kind of mild and pleasant.

✓ From my viewpoint, I would prefer cold weather because it's kind of mild and pleasant.

The phrase 'In my viewpoint' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'From' when expressing an opinion or viewpoint.

× For example, I can work out a whole day and not getting tired sometime like like in the window I could play with no having fun with my friend.

✓ For example, I can work out the whole day and not get tired sometimes. For instance, I could play indoors and have fun with my friend.

The original sentence misuses verb forms: 'not getting tired' should be 'not get tired' after 'can'; 'sometime' should be 'sometimes'; 'like like in the window' is unclear and likely meant 'indoors'; 'no having fun' should be 'have fun'. Correcting verb forms and sentence structure improves clarity.

× I'm not in a habit of checking weather forecast.

✓ I'm not in the habit of checking the weather forecast.

The phrase 'in a habit' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'in the habit'. Also, 'weather forecast' needs the definite article 'the'.

× In my opinion, deforestation are the effects of climate change in the recent years.

✓ In my opinion, deforestation is one of the effects of climate change in recent years.

'Deforestation' is a singular noun, so the verb should be 'is' not 'are'. Also, 'the recent years' should be 'recent years' without 'the'.

× people cracking down those trees like millions and for years.

✓ people cutting down millions of trees over the years.

The phrase 'cracking down those trees like millions' is incorrect. The correct phrase is 'cutting down millions of trees'. Also, 'for years' is better expressed as 'over the years'.

× I'm a kind of people that love free and adventuring visiting other countries.

✓ I'm the kind of person who loves freedom and adventurous visits to other countries.

'I'm a kind of people' is incorrect; it should be 'I'm the kind of person'. Also, 'love free and adventuring visiting' is ungrammatical; it should be 'loves freedom and adventurous visits'. The relative pronoun 'that' is better replaced with 'who' when referring to people.