Weather— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答が不自然で文法的な誤りがあります。"magically"の使い方が不適切で、意味が伝わりにくいです。より自然な表現を使い、文を簡潔にまとめることを意識しましょう。

例: The weather in Japan is usually mild, but recently it has become harsher due to climate change and global warming.

提案: 理由の説明はありますが、文が少し冗長で繰り返しがあります。より簡潔にし、接続詞を使って論理的に繋げると良いでしょう。

例: I prefer hot weather because I was born in a warm area of Japan, so I feel more energetic during the hot midsummer days.

提案: "vulnerable to the wet condition"の表現が不自然です。より適切な語彙を使い、理由を具体的に説明すると良いです。

例: I prefer dry weather, so in the future I want to live on the US West Coast because I don't like humid and rainy conditions.

提案: 内容は良いですが、文法的な誤りがあります。"newspaper"は単数形でなく複数形や"the"を付けると自然です。また、接続詞を使い文を繋げると良いです。

例: Yes, I usually check the weather forecast in the newspaper every day so that I can choose suitable clothes. Also, as a journalist, I need to stay informed.

提案: 文法と語彙の誤りが多く、意味が分かりにくいです。よりシンプルで正確な表現を使い、具体的な影響を説明しましょう。

例: The effects of climate change have become more serious than 10 years ago, such as more frequent heatwaves around the world.

提案: "spend on different atmosphere"は不自然な表現です。より適切な語彙を使い、理由を明確に述べると良いでしょう。

例: Yes, I want to visit places with different climates because I enjoy experiencing new environments. For example, I hope to visit Pacific islands in the future.

× In Japan, the climate condition is modest.

✓ In Japan, the climate conditions are moderate.

'Modest' is not the correct adjective to describe climate; 'moderate' is appropriate. Also, 'climate condition' should be plural 'climate conditions' to refer generally to weather patterns. This improves clarity and correctness.

× But recently, influences of climate change and global warming have changed the condition to a magically it's very harsh.

✓ But recently, the influences of climate change and global warming have made the conditions very harsh.

The original sentence is awkward and contains a misplaced phrase 'to a magically it's very harsh'. The correction simplifies and clarifies the meaning, removing unnecessary words and fixing sentence structure.

× I prefer hot weather because I was born in quite a warm area in Japan, so in the Midsummer I'm very motivated because I like to spend hot days.

✓ I prefer hot weather because I was born in a quite warm area in Japan, so in midsummer I'm very motivated because I like to spend hot days.

'Midsummer' should not be capitalized unless it starts a sentence. Also, 'a quite warm area' is more natural than 'quite a warm area'. The rest is acceptable.

× I prefer dry weather, so in the future I want to live in in the US West Coast because I'm very vulnerable to the wet condition.

✓ I prefer dry weather, so in the future I want to live on the US West Coast because I'm very vulnerable to wet conditions.

The preposition for regions like 'West Coast' is 'on', not 'in'. Also, 'wet condition' should be plural 'wet conditions' to generalize the idea. The repeated 'in' is a typo.

× Yes, I usually check the weather conditions on newspaper so that I can choose the correct clothes which is suitable for the condition every day.

✓ Yes, I usually check the weather conditions in the newspaper so that I can choose the correct clothes which are suitable for the conditions every day.

The correct preposition is 'in' for newspapers. Also, 'clothes' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' not 'is'. 'Condition' should be plural 'conditions' to match 'weather conditions'.

× It seems that effects of climate change has been much more bigger than 10 years ago because making case of heat related, this has occurred all over the world.

✓ It seems that the effects of climate change have been much bigger than 10 years ago because, in the case of heat-related issues, this has occurred all over the world.

'Effects' is plural, so the verb should be 'have' not 'has'. 'Much more bigger' is incorrect; 'much bigger' suffices. The phrase 'making case of heat related' is unclear and corrected to 'in the case of heat-related issues' for clarity.

× Yes, I want to visit other climate areas because I like to spend on different atmosphere.

✓ Yes, I want to visit other climate areas because I like to experience different atmospheres.

The verb 'spend' is incorrectly used with 'on different atmosphere'. The correct verb is 'experience' and 'atmosphere' should be plural 'atmospheres' to indicate variety.