Weather— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and could be more concise. Try to directly state the weather type and then add a specific reason why you enjoy it, avoiding vague phrases like 'not hurting you'.

例: I live in a hot and dry climate, which I enjoy because it feels comfortable and allows me to spend time outdoors without getting cold.

提案: Your answer has grammatical errors and unclear phrasing. Use correct sentence structures and provide clear reasons with linking words to improve coherence.

例: I prefer cold weather to hot weather because hot weather is unbearable; for example, you often have to stay indoors and rely on air conditioning.

提案: Your answer is confusing and contains incorrect word choices like 'assaulted' and unclear descriptions. Use precise vocabulary and organize your answer with linking words to explain your preference clearly.

例: I definitely prefer dry weather. Last week, I visited northern Iran where it was very humid and uncomfortable, almost like being in a sauna, which made me dislike the wet climate.

提案: Your answer is understandable but has some grammar mistakes and could be more specific about frequency. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: I used to check the weather forecast on my phone for cities like Sydney, Los Angeles, and Toronto. However, nowadays I don't check it often because I find it less important.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but could be clearer and more structured. Use linking words and specific examples to explain the effects and necessary actions.

例: I believe the most significant effect of climate change is water scarcity, which we are currently facing in Iran. Therefore, we need to be cautious and take actions to prevent further problems.

提案: Your answer is repetitive and contains grammatical errors. Try to express your opinion clearly and provide reasons with linking words to improve coherence.

例: I don't feel motivated to visit cities with different climates, such as northern Iran, because I am accustomed to my own city's weather and find other climates uncomfortable.

× The type of weather that I live in is probably hot and dry and I really enjoy living in this weather because it's not hurting you and it's not harmful a lot at all.

✓ The type of weather where I live is probably hot and dry, and I really enjoy living in this weather because it doesn't hurt you and it's not very harmful at all.

The phrase 'the type of weather that I live in' is awkward; 'where I live' is more natural. Also, 'it's not hurting you' should be 'it doesn't hurt you' to express a general truth. 'Not harmful a lot' is incorrect; 'not very harmful' is the correct adverb placement.

× In my opinion, I would rather to live in a cold weather comparing to hot weather, because hot weather is not standable at all because you can't do anything except turning on air conditioners and etcetera however you can.

✓ In my opinion, I would rather live in cold weather compared to hot weather, because hot weather is unbearable since you can't do anything except turn on air conditioners and so on.

The modal verb 'would rather' should be followed by the base form of the verb without 'to'. 'Comparing to' should be 'compared to'. 'Standable' is incorrect; the correct word is 'unbearable'. 'Except turning' should be 'except turn' because after 'except' the base form is used.

× I would definitely prefer dry weather because last week I was in the northern of Iran and I was very assaulted or I was very sad of being in a wet weather because it was like boiling and I couldn't even stand there and it wasn't good at all.

✓ I would definitely prefer dry weather because last week I was in northern Iran and I was very upset about being in wet weather because it was like boiling and I couldn't even stand it; it wasn't good at all.

'In the northern of Iran' should be 'in northern Iran' without 'the'. 'Assaulted' is incorrect in this context; 'upset' or 'sad' is appropriate. 'Sad of being' should be 'upset about being'. 'A wet weather' is incorrect; 'wet weather' is uncountable and does not need an article.

× Actually, I used to do it in my mobile phone by checking whether of several cities located around the world like Sydney, Los Angeles and Toronto.

✓ Actually, I used to do it on my mobile phone by checking the weather of several cities around the world like Sydney, Los Angeles, and Toronto.

'Do it in my mobile phone' should be 'do it on my mobile phone' because we use 'on' for devices. 'Whether' is a homophone error; the correct word is 'weather'. 'Located around the world' is redundant; 'around the world' suffices.

× Well, I think the most significant change that can we have is lack of water as we're experiencing that in our own country named Iran.

✓ Well, I think the most significant change we can have is a lack of water, as we're experiencing in our own country, Iran.

The word order 'can we have' is incorrect; it should be 'we can have'. 'Lack of water' needs an article 'a' before it. 'Named Iran' is better expressed as ', Iran' for clarity.

× Actually I don't have the motivation to travel to another cities like northern of Iran and experience that because it is not comfortable.

✓ Actually, I don't have the motivation to travel to other cities like northern Iran and experience that because it is not comfortable.

'Another cities' is incorrect; 'another' is used with singular nouns, so 'other cities' is correct. 'Northern of Iran' should be 'northern Iran' without 'of'.