Weather— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 答えは直接的で簡潔ですが、もう少し具体的な詳細や理由を加えるとより自然で効果的になります。例えば、どのくらい寒いのか、季節による違いなどを述べると良いでしょう。

例: I live near a mountain, so the weather is usually cooler than in the city, especially during the winter when temperatures can drop below freezing.

提案: 答えが少し不自然で意味が伝わりにくい部分があります。理由を明確にし、文法的にも正しい表現を使うことが大切です。具体的な理由や感情を述べると良いでしょう。

例: I definitely prefer cold weather because I enjoy wearing layers of clothes, which I find comfortable, whereas hot weather makes me feel sticky and uncomfortable.

提案: 答えに繰り返しや曖昧な表現があり、文法的な誤りも見られます。理由を明確にし、簡潔で自然な表現を心がけましょう。

例: I prefer dry weather because I have curly hair, and when it's wet, my hair becomes even curlier, but I like it to be straighter.

提案: 答えは意味が伝わりますが、文法の誤りや不自然な表現があります。より自然な英語表現を使い、理由を具体的に述べると良いでしょう。

例: I usually check the weather forecast every morning before leaving the house because it helps me decide what to wear and plan my day.

提案: 答えに繰り返しや文法の誤りがあり、内容もやや曖昧です。具体的な影響を述べ、文法的に正しい表現を使うことが重要です。

例: I think increased CO2 emissions have caused global temperatures to rise, leading to more extreme weather events. Therefore, reducing emissions is essential to slow down climate change.

提案: 答えは明確ですが、繰り返しや文法の誤りがあります。より自然で流暢な表現を使い、理由や期待を具体的に述べると良いでしょう。

例: Of course, I'd love to visit cities with different climates. For example, I want to go to Australia because its weather and seasons are very different from Japan's, which would be an exciting experience.

× My living area is nearby a mountain so it's a little colder than the town.

✓ My living area is near a mountain, so it's a little colder than the town.

The preposition 'nearby' is an adverb meaning 'close by' and is not used directly before a noun. The correct preposition to use before a noun is 'near'. Also, a comma is needed before 'so' to separate the clauses.

× Definitely cold weather because in hot weather I can't take off any clothes when I naked, but in cold I can get more and more clothes.

✓ Definitely cold weather because in hot weather I can't take off any clothes when I am naked, but in cold weather I can wear more and more clothes.

The pronoun 'I' needs a verb to form a correct clause; 'when I naked' is incorrect and should be 'when I am naked'. Also, 'get more and more clothes' is awkward; 'wear more and more clothes' is more appropriate.

× I prefer dry weather because umm I have Curry hair and when it is wet weather it become more curly so and I prefer in a straight hair so I really prefer dry hair dry weather.

✓ I prefer dry weather because I have curly hair and when it is wet, it becomes curlier. I prefer straight hair, so I really prefer dry weather.

The adjective 'Curry' is incorrect; it should be 'curly'. The verb 'become' needs to be in third person singular 'becomes' to agree with 'it'. The phrase 'prefer in a straight hair' is incorrect; it should be 'prefer straight hair'. Also, repetition of 'dry hair dry weather' is redundant.

× I have a habit of checking the weather when I before I leave the house.

✓ I have a habit of checking the weather before I leave the house.

The phrase 'when I before I leave the house' is redundant and incorrect. The correct phrase is 'before I leave the house'.

× Umm like CO2 emissions, it will become more hotter and hotter.

✓ Umm, like CO2 emissions, it will become hotter and hotter.

The phrase 'more hotter' is incorrect because 'hotter' is already the comparative form of 'hot'. Using 'more' with a comparative adjective is redundant.

× So I think reducing CO2 emissions is very helpful to refrain the climate change to like.

✓ So I think reducing CO2 emissions is very helpful to prevent climate change.

The verb 'refrain' is incorrectly used here; 'prevent' is the correct verb to use with 'climate change'. Also, 'to like' at the end is unnecessary and incorrect.

× Of course I'd like to visit. For instance, I I want to visit Australia that has a completely different from Japan's weather or Japan's seasons.

✓ Of course I'd like to visit. For instance, I want to visit Australia, which has a climate completely different from Japan's weather or seasons.

The phrase 'has a completely different from' is incorrect; it should be 'has a climate completely different from'. Also, 'which' is needed to introduce the relative clause.