Weather— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer lacks clarity and coherence. Try to respond directly to the question with a clear topic sentence, followed by specific supporting details. Avoid redundancy and ensure your sentences are grammatically correct and natural.

例: The weather where I live is generally warm and sunny, especially during spring. Winters are short, lasting only about two months, and are usually mild.

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and repetitive. Provide a clear preference with a topic sentence and explain your choice using linking words to make your response coherent.

例: I prefer warm weather because it is neither too hot nor too cold, which makes it comfortable for me to enjoy outdoor activities.

提案: You did not provide an answer to this question. Remember to respond directly to each question with a clear opinion or description, supported by specific details if possible.

例: I prefer dry weather because it is easier to plan outdoor activities and I find wet weather can be inconvenient.

提案: Your answer is repetitive and somewhat confusing. Try to structure your response with a clear topic sentence and use linking words to explain why and how often you check the weather forecast.

例: Yes, I check the weather forecast every day before leaving home because it helps me decide what to wear and plan my activities accordingly.

提案: Your answer is vague and contains grammatical errors. Provide a clear opinion with specific reasons or examples, and use linking words to make your answer coherent.

例: I believe climate change is caused by harmful human activities, such as pollution, and it leads to serious problems like global warming, which worries me a lot.

提案: Your answer is repetitive and could be more concise. Use a clear topic sentence and support it with specific reasons or examples, using linking words to improve coherence.

例: Yes, I would love to visit cities with different climates because it would be a unique experience and help me learn more about diverse environments.

× Find what is general.

✓ I will describe what is general.

The original sentence lacks a clear subject and verb, making it incomplete and unclear. Adding 'I will describe' provides a subject and verb, forming a complete sentence.

× Sleep warm and the cozy weather, more sunshine and hot weather and the spring.

✓ It is warm and cozy, with more sunshine and hot weather in spring.

The original sentence uses 'Sleep warm' incorrectly and has awkward phrasing. Rephrasing to 'It is warm and cozy' correctly uses adjectives and improves clarity.

× The winter last just for two months.

✓ The winter lasts just for two months.

The subject 'winter' is singular, so the verb should be 'lasts' to agree in number.

× Weather but but actually I prefer not hot and not cold.

✓ Actually, I prefer weather that is neither hot nor cold.

The original sentence is fragmented and repetitive. Rephrasing provides a clear subject and verb, improving sentence structure.

× Something between them.

✓ Something in between.

'Between them' is unnecessary and awkward here; 'in between' is the correct phrase to express a middle state.

× Maybe it's warm weather because it's both of them it's I don't like.

✓ Maybe warm weather, because I don't like either extreme.

The original sentence is confusing and uses pronouns incorrectly. Simplifying clarifies the meaning and corrects pronoun use.

× Yes, that's my daily habit.

✓ Yes, checking the weather forecast is my daily habit.

The original sentence lacks a verb related to the habit. Adding 'checking the weather forecast is' completes the sentence.

× Before I left in, before I left home, I always check the weather forecast because in and the also I checked weather forecast and I opened the window and I see what's people wearing and in order to what I wear to the site.

✓ Before I leave home, I always check the weather forecast. I also open the window to see what people are wearing so I know what to wear outside.

The original sentence mixes past and present tenses incorrectly and is confusing. Using present tense for habitual actions and correcting verb forms improves clarity and grammar.

× Yes, I heard about climate change recent years and I think the people making bad habits in there because of this climate is changing more than I heard about global warming.

✓ Yes, I have heard about climate change in recent years, and I think people are developing bad habits because the climate is changing. I have also heard about global warming.

The original sentence incorrectly uses past tense and lacks auxiliary verbs. Using present perfect and present continuous forms correctly reflects ongoing relevance.

× It's can affect a lot of facts and I'm worrying about it.

✓ It can affect many aspects, and I am worried about it.

'It's can' is incorrect; 'can' should be used alone as a modal verb. Also, 'worrying' should be 'worried' to express emotion.

× Yes, it it would be very interesting visiting other cities, places or countries where climate is very different and it would be a very interesting experience I would ever gain.

✓ Yes, it would be very interesting to visit other cities, places, or countries where the climate is very different, and it would be a very interesting experience for me.

After 'would be interesting,' the infinitive form 'to visit' is correct rather than the gerund 'visiting.' Also, the sentence is restructured for clarity and correctness.