Weather— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to avoid redundancy and filler words like 'uh'. Make your answer more concise and structured by directly stating the weather and then giving a reason or feeling about it. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: The weather where I live is generally cool throughout the year, although it gets a bit warmer in summer. I find it very comfortable, which is why I enjoy living here.

提案: Your answer is good but can be improved by using more varied vocabulary and clearer linking words. Also, avoid repeating 'in summers' twice. Try to combine ideas for better flow.

例: I prefer cold weather because I enjoy winters. Unlike the hot summers, which make me sweat a lot and feel uncomfortable, winter allows me to wear colourful clothes and travel easily.

提案: Avoid repetition of words like 'moreover' and incomplete sentences. Make your points clear and complete. Use linking words like 'because' and 'so' appropriately to connect ideas logically.

例: I prefer dry weather because travelling is difficult in the rain. Also, as I come from a farming background, dry conditions make it easier to work and carry out daily activities.

提案: Try to avoid filler words like 'ah' and be more concise. Use linking words to connect your ideas and avoid repeating the same information. Also, correct 'whether' to 'weather'.

例: Yes, I check the weather forecast several times a day, especially because I live in a rural area where summer brings frequent rain. I always check before going out to plan accordingly.

提案: Improve sentence structure and grammar for clarity. Use linking words like 'because' and 'therefore' to connect ideas. Avoid vague phrases like 'very worst and bad' and use precise vocabulary.

例: In my opinion, global warming has significantly changed weather patterns in recent years. Because of pollution, temperatures are rising, which is expected to worsen in the future, causing many difficulties for people.

提案: Avoid repeating the same idea and use more precise vocabulary. Combine sentences for better flow and correct grammar mistakes such as 'there were very snow' and 'The temperature was in Canada is'.

例: Yes, I would love to visit cities with different climates. For example, I recently visited Canada during winter, where it was very cold with heavy snowfall and temperatures around -30°C.

× The weather is very good where I am currently living and the weather is uh, cool every time.

✓ The weather is very good where I currently live and the weather is, uh, cool all the time.

The phrase 'where I am currently living' uses the present continuous tense unnecessarily. For habitual or general facts, the simple present tense 'where I currently live' is more appropriate. Also, 'every time' is better expressed as 'all the time' to indicate consistent weather conditions.

× But in the summers it will increase little bit, but it is very good here and I am very comfortable.

✓ But in the summers, it increases a little bit, but it is very good here and I am very comfortable.

Using 'will' to describe habitual or general facts about summers is incorrect. The simple present tense 'it increases' is appropriate for regular occurrences. Also, 'little bit' should be 'a little bit' to be grammatically correct.

× I love to live here because of the good weather conditions.

✓ I love living here because of the good weather conditions.

The phrase 'love to live' is less natural than 'love living' when expressing enjoyment of a place. Using the gerund form 'living' is preferred after verbs like 'love' when talking about general preferences.

× In summers the temperature is very high, which is very uncomfortable for me because I sweat a lot in summers.

✓ In summer, the temperature is very high, which is very uncomfortable for me because I sweat a lot in summer.

The word 'summer' is generally used without 's' when referring to the season in general. Also, 'in summer' is the correct prepositional phrase rather than 'in summers'.

× But in the winters I like to wear different kind of clothes, like colorful clothes.

✓ But in winter, I like to wear different kinds of clothes, like colorful clothes.

Similar to 'summer', 'winter' is used without 's' when referring to the season generally. Also, 'different kind of clothes' should be 'different kinds of clothes' to agree in number.

× So I like winter in which we can easily travel.

✓ So I like winter because we can easily travel then.

The phrase 'winter in which we can easily travel' is awkward. Using 'because' to explain the reason and 'then' to indicate the time is clearer and more natural.

× I prefer dry weather because I think in wet conditions I'm not able to travel one plus to another like in the rain.

✓ I prefer dry weather because I think in wet conditions I'm not able to travel from one place to another, like in the rain.

The phrase 'one plus to another' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'from one place to another' to indicate movement between locations.

× Moreover, I would like to choose dry because in this we can easily do anything whatever we want.

✓ Moreover, I would like to choose dry weather because in it we can easily do anything we want.

The phrase 'in this' is vague and awkward. Replacing it with 'in it' referring to dry weather is clearer. Also, 'anything whatever we want' is redundant; 'anything we want' suffices.

× Moreover, I belong to a farmer farmer life so it would be easy for us to.

✓ Moreover, I belong to a farming family, so it would be easy for us.

The phrase 'belong to a farmer farmer life' is incorrect and unclear. The correct expression is 'belong to a farming family' to indicate a family involved in farming. The sentence was incomplete and is corrected accordingly.

× Ah yes, I love to check whether a lot of times in a day, like I live in a rural area and in the day I check four to five times on a daily basis because whenever I want to go out first I check the weather because in the summer mostly there is a rainy season in my town.

✓ Ah yes, I love to check the weather many times a day. I live in a rural area and during the day I check four to five times because whenever I want to go out, I first check the weather since summer is mostly the rainy season in my town.

The phrase 'check whether a lot of times' is incorrect; it should be 'check the weather many times'. 'In the day' is better expressed as 'during the day'. Also, sentence structure is improved for clarity and flow.

× In my point of view, due to the global warming, the weather conditions were changed very much in recent years, but it is predicted that in the future life, the weather condition would be very worst and bad because of pollution and temperatures will increase in the future.

✓ In my point of view, due to global warming, the weather conditions have changed a lot in recent years, but it is predicted that in the future, the weather conditions will be very bad and worse because of pollution, and temperatures will increase.

The phrase 'were changed' is incorrect; the present perfect 'have changed' is appropriate for recent changes. 'Very worst and bad' is redundant; 'very bad and worse' is better. 'Would be' is replaced with 'will be' to match the prediction context. Also, 'in the future life' is incorrect; 'in the future' suffices.

× Moreover, people face a lot of difficulties.

✓ Moreover, people face a lot of difficulties.

This sentence is correct and needs no correction.

× Recently I went to Canada on a visitor visa.

✓ Recently, I went to Canada on a visitor visa.

The sentence is correct; only a comma is added after 'Recently' for better punctuation.

× So the climate in Canada was very cold and chilled.

✓ So the climate in Canada was very cold and chilly.

The adjective 'chilled' is incorrect here; 'chilly' is the correct adjective to describe cold weather.

× Like I went in winters and there were very snow there and it is quite cold.

✓ I went in winter, and there was a lot of snow there, and it was quite cold.

'In winters' should be 'in winter' for general seasonal reference. 'There were very snow' is incorrect; it should be 'there was a lot of snow'. Also, tense consistency is maintained by changing 'it is' to 'it was'.

× The temperature was in Canada is -30°.

✓ The temperature in Canada was -30°.

The sentence structure is incorrect. The correct order is 'The temperature in Canada was -30°.' to maintain subject-verb-object order and tense consistency.