Weather— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more concise and avoid redundancy. Also, improve sentence structure for clarity and naturalness. For example, avoid repeating similar ideas and use linking words to connect your points logically.

例: I live in Hong Kong, and the weather is extremely hot at the moment because a typhoon might be approaching. As a result, I often sweat and need to use the air conditioner when I'm at home.

提案: Your answer is clear but could be improved by using more varied vocabulary and linking words to make it more coherent. Also, avoid repeating similar words like 'sunny' twice in one sentence.

例: I prefer hot weather, but not as scorching as it is now. I enjoy sunny and breezy days because they are perfect for activities like picnicking or hiking without feeling uncomfortably hot.

提案: Try to improve sentence structure and grammar for clarity. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly and avoid incomplete sentences.

例: I prefer dry weather to wet weather because my skin is quite sensitive. When the humidity is high, I often experience breakouts, and humid conditions also make my makeup look messy.

提案: Focus on improving grammar and sentence flow. Use linking words to connect your ideas and avoid repetition of words like 'whether'.

例: I usually check the weather forecast on my mobile app every day before going out because I want to know if it will rain. If rain is expected, I always bring an umbrella with me.

提案: Your answer is good but could be enhanced by adding linking words and more specific details or examples to support your points.

例: In recent years, I have noticed that climate change has significantly affected us, especially with Hong Kong experiencing much hotter weather. For instance, summers used to reach a maximum of around 30°C when I was a child, but now temperatures can rise to 35°C or higher.

提案: Try to improve sentence structure and avoid repetition. Use linking words to make your answer more coherent and natural. Also, be confident in your statements rather than using uncertain phrases like 'I think'.

例: Yes, I would love to visit cities with climates different from Hong Kong because it would allow me to experience diverse landscapes. For example, in cold countries like the United Kingdom, I could see and touch snow, which is something I have never experienced before.

× the weather is just very it's like an oven here

✓ the weather is just very hot; it's like an oven here

The original sentence incorrectly combines 'very' with 'it's' without a proper adjective. The phrase 'very it's like an oven' is grammatically incorrect. The correction separates the ideas and adds the adjective 'hot' to complete the phrase 'very hot'. This improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I love sunny days because I can go picnicking or hiking in a sunny and windy day without feeling extremely hot.

✓ I love sunny days because I can go picnicking or hiking on a sunny and windy day without feeling extremely hot.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect when referring to specific days. The correct preposition is 'on' when talking about days or dates. Therefore, 'in a sunny and windy day' should be 'on a sunny and windy day'.

× If I have to do makeup in humid weather will make my makeup look messy.

✓ If I have to do makeup in humid weather, it will make my makeup look messy.

The original sentence lacks a subject for the second clause, causing confusion. Adding the pronoun 'it' clarifies the subject of the verb 'will make', making the sentence grammatically correct.

× I have a habit of checking whether every day before going out because I want to know whether it will rain.

✓ I have a habit of checking the weather every day before going out because I want to know whether it will rain.

The word 'whether' is incorrectly used instead of 'weather'. 'Weather' refers to atmospheric conditions, while 'whether' is a conjunction used to introduce alternatives. The correction replaces 'whether' with 'weather'.

× If I know it will rain then I will bring an umbrella with me.

✓ If I know it will rain, then I will bring an umbrella.

The phrase 'bring an umbrella with me' is redundant because 'bring' already implies carrying something with oneself. Removing 'with me' makes the sentence more concise and natural.

× When I was a kid, I remembered the temperature in summer was like 30°C at most, but nowadays it can go up to 35.

✓ When I was a kid, I remember the temperature in summer was about 30°C at most, but nowadays it can go up to 35°C.

The verb 'remembered' is incorrectly used in the past tense here; 'remember' is a stative verb and is usually used in the present tense to express recollection. Also, 'like' is informal and should be replaced with 'about' for clarity. Additionally, the unit '°C' is added after 35 for consistency.

× Yes, I would love to visit other cities which have different climates as Hong Kong because I can see different views under different weather conditions.

✓ Yes, I would love to visit other cities which have different climates from Hong Kong because I can see different views under different weather conditions.

The correct preposition to compare differences is 'from', not 'as'. Therefore, 'different climates as Hong Kong' should be 'different climates from Hong Kong'.

× For example, in cold countries like the United Kingdom, I can see the snows and touch the snows, I think.

✓ For example, in cold countries like the United Kingdom, I can see the snow and touch the snow, I think.

The noun 'snow' is an uncountable noun and should not be pluralised as 'snows'. Using 'snow' in singular form is correct when referring to the substance in general.