Weather— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is a bit unclear and contains some redundancy. Try to give a clear and concise description of the weather, avoiding repeated words and unnecessary details. Also, ensure your sentences are grammatically correct and natural.

例: I live in Pune, which is known for its greenery and pleasant weather. It is not exactly a hill station, but the climate is generally mild and comfortable throughout the year.

提案: Your answer is understandable but could be more natural and fluent. Avoid filler words like 'all like' and try to connect your ideas smoothly using linking words.

例: I usually prefer cold weather because I enjoy the fresh and chilly climate, especially during winters.

提案: Your answer repeats some points and has filler sounds like 'Uh'. Try to avoid repetition and use linking words to make your answer coherent. Also, be careful with pronunciation and fluency.

例: I prefer dry weather because it feels refreshing and allows me to go outside anytime, unlike wet weather which can be inconvenient.

提案: Your answer is quite repetitive and unclear. Try to answer directly and avoid repeating the same idea. Use simple and clear sentences to express your habits.

例: No, I don't usually check the weather forecast. Instead, I look at the sky before going out to see if the weather is good.

提案: Your answer is confusing and contains grammatical errors. Try to organize your ideas clearly, use correct grammar, and provide specific effects of climate change.

例: Climate change has caused drastic changes in seasons recently. It has worsened global warming and negatively affected the climate worldwide.

提案: Your answer is too long and repetitive. Try to be concise and use linking words to connect your ideas logically. Also, pay attention to grammar and sentence structure.

例: Yes, I would like to visit cities with different climates because it would be a great experience. I could learn how people adapt to various conditions, including their habits and food.

× I live in Pune which is known as one of the greenest and really cold and hill station like city in our in our state.

✓ I live in Pune which is known as one of the greenest, coldest, and hill station-like cities in our state.

The sentence has singular and plural inconsistency. 'City' should be plural 'cities' because it refers to one among many. Also, 'really cold and hill station like city' needs parallel adjective forms and proper hyphenation for 'hill station-like'. Use plural 'cities' to match 'one of the'.

× I live in Pune which is known as one of the greenest and really cold and hill station like city in our in our state.

✓ I live in Pune which is known as one of the greenest, coldest, and hill station-like cities in our state.

The phrase 'really cold and hill station like city' is awkward. Use comparative adjectives in parallel form: 'greenest, coldest, and hill station-like'. Also, 'hill station-like' should be hyphenated as a compound adjective.

× I usually prefer cold weather, I love the fresh and chill climate all like it is in winters.

✓ I usually prefer cold weather; I love the fresh and chilly climate, just like it is in winters.

'Chill' is a noun or verb; the adjective form is 'chilly'. Also, the sentence is a run-on; use a semicolon or period. 'All like' is incorrect; 'just like' is appropriate here.

× I usually prefer dry weather as it is really refreshing and you can go out at any time as compared to Wet Wet weather.

✓ I usually prefer dry weather as it is really refreshing and you can go out at any time compared to wet weather.

'Wet Wet weather' is a repetition error; only one 'wet' is needed. Also, 'as compared to' can be simplified to 'compared to'. 'Wet' should be lowercase unless starting a sentence.

× No, I don't usually check whether forecast.

✓ No, I don't usually check the weather forecast.

'Whether' is incorrect; the correct word is 'weather' when referring to meteorological conditions. Also, 'the' is needed before 'weather forecast' as it is a specific noun phrase.

× I usually actually don't check any at any time, but I usually. But I usually make sure the weather is good before going out by looking at the sky.

✓ I usually don't check the weather forecast at any time, but I make sure the weather is good before going out by looking at the sky.

The sentence is fragmented and repetitive. Remove redundant phrases and combine for clarity and correct sentence structure.

× There has been a really bad effect of climate change in recent years.

✓ There have been really bad effects of climate change in recent years.

'Effect' should be plural 'effects' because multiple impacts are implied. Also, 'There has been' changes to 'There have been' to agree with plural 'effects'.

× These seasons are really changing drastically and it hasn't really bad effect on our global warming and the whole climate and it is not going well.

✓ These seasons are really changing drastically and it has a really bad effect on global warming and the whole climate, and things are not going well.

'It hasn't really bad effect' is incorrect; correct form is 'it has a really bad effect'. Also, 'our global warming' is incorrect; 'global warming' is general. The sentence is long and needs commas and conjunctions for clarity.

× Yes, I would prefer to visit different cities which has different climates, because it will give an really good experience us for to live in every condition and it is also an really good experience and to go to different cities, see how people survive in that climate and what are their habits, the food they eat and everything which changes.

✓ Yes, I would prefer to visit different cities which have different climates, because it will give us a really good experience of living in every condition. It is also a great opportunity to go to different cities, see how people survive in that climate, and learn about their habits, the food they eat, and everything that changes.

'Cities which has' should be 'cities which have' to agree in number. 'An really good experience us for to live' is ungrammatical; correct to 'give us a really good experience of living'. The sentence is long and needs to be split for clarity and correct preposition use.