Weather— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时语言不够自然，有语法和表达错误，如“the wet like”不清晰，且内容有些冗长。建议简化句子结构，避免重复，使用更准确的表达。

例: The weather in Guangzhou is usually hot and humid. The average temperature is about 25°C, but sometimes it can reach up to 40°C, which makes it very uncomfortable.

提案: 回答结构混乱，表达不连贯，存在语法错误和口语填充词。建议使用清晰的主题句，避免重复和无意义的词汇，使用连接词使表达更流畅。

例: Personally, I prefer hot weather because I am used to it. When I visit cold places, I feel excited since I don't have to deal with the humidity and heat, and I don't sweat as much.

提案: 回答内容具体，但表达稍显重复且有语法错误。建议简化句子，使用更准确的词汇，并用连接词使内容更连贯。

例: I definitely prefer dry weather. Although some people think dry weather makes skin itchy, I find humid weather makes my face oily, which is uncomfortable and bothersome.

提案: 回答不够简洁，存在语法错误和口语填充词，句子结构不完整。建议直接回答问题，避免重复，使用完整句子表达观点。

例: Yes, I check the weather forecast every day because the weather in Guangzhou changes quickly. It helps me decide what to wear.

提案: 回答不完整且表达混乱，缺乏具体细节和连贯性。建议提前准备相关话题，使用完整句子，提供具体例子和原因。

例: Although I don't know much about climate change, I think it causes extreme weather like floods and heatwaves, which I have noticed recently.

提案: 回答表达有重复和语法错误，句子不够流畅。建议简化句子，避免重复，使用连接词使表达更自然。

例: Of course, I love traveling. When I visit cold places like Harbin in northern China, I feel excited because I can touch the snow and experience a different climate.

× Personal speaking, I prefer hot weather, as I mentioned before, the area I live is pretty hot, so every time when I go to somewhere it's very cold it just makes me feel excited 'cause I know I don't need to bear the humid and hot weather animals cause umm as I won't swear that much in the cold weather and.

✓ Personally speaking, I prefer hot weather. As I mentioned before, the area I live in is pretty hot, so every time I go somewhere very cold, it just makes me feel excited because I know I don't need to bear the humid and hot weather, and I won't sweat that much in the cold weather.

句首的“Personal speaking”应为副词形式“Personally speaking”，表示“就个人而言”。此外，句子中“go to somewhere”应简化为“go somewhere”，因为“go”后直接加地点副词即可。句中“sweat”拼写错误为“swear”，应改正。句子结构混乱，需拆分为多个句子以增强清晰度。

× Personal speaking, I prefer hot weather, as I mentioned before, the area I live is pretty hot, so every time when I go to somewhere it's very cold it just makes me feel excited 'cause I know I don't need to bear the humid and hot weather animals cause umm as I won't swear that much in the cold weather and.

✓ Personally speaking, I prefer hot weather. As I mentioned before, the area I live in is pretty hot, so every time I go somewhere very cold, it just makes me feel excited because I know I don't need to bear the humid and hot weather, and I won't sweat that much in the cold weather.

“the area I live”缺少介词，应为“the area I live in”，表示“我居住的地区”。“go to somewhere”中“to”多余，应直接用“go somewhere”。这些介词使用错误影响句子表达的准确性。

× So basically you can experience four season in just one day.

✓ So basically you can experience four seasons in just one day.

“season”应为复数形式“seasons”，因为表示“一天中经历四个季节”，数量大于1。

× So basically you can experience four season in just one day.

✓ So basically you can experience four seasons in just one day.

“season”应使用复数形式“seasons”，因为前面有数量词“four”，表示多个季节。

× Well, 'cause I have very less knowledge about this view, but I think like for the climate change it, it really brings many extreme weather such as floods and extremely hot weather.

✓ Well, because I have very little knowledge about this topic, but I think climate change really brings many extreme weather events such as floods and extremely hot weather.

“very less”应改为“very little”，表示“很少的”。“this view”用词不当，应为“this topic”或“this issue”。“it, it”重复，应去掉。代词使用不准确导致表达不清。

× Well, 'cause I have very less knowledge about this view, but I think like for the climate change it, it really brings many extreme weather such as floods and extremely hot weather.

✓ Well, because I have very little knowledge about this topic, but I think climate change really brings many extreme weather events such as floods and extremely hot weather.

“very less”是错误搭配，应使用“very little”表示“很少的”。“extreme weather”前应加“events”使表达更准确。

× I'm a travel lovers so every time when I go to the the areas are are like in cold weather such as Harbin, which is the northern part in China.

✓ I'm a travel lover, so every time I go to areas with cold weather such as Harbin, which is in the northern part of China.

“a travel lovers”中“lovers”应为单数“lover”，因为前面有不定冠词“a”。“the the areas are are like in cold weather”结构混乱，应简化为“areas with cold weather”。

× I'm a travel lovers so every time when I go to the the areas are are like in cold weather such as Harbin, which is the northern part in China.

✓ I'm a travel lover, so every time I go to areas with cold weather such as Harbin, which is in the northern part of China.

“the northern part in China”应为“the northern part of China”，介词“of”表示所属关系。

× It's very humid and hot, which I really hate a lot 'cause I live in Guangzhou and it's in the southern part of China.

✓ It's very humid and hot, which I really hate a lot because I live in Guangzhou, and it's in the southern part of China.

句中“'cause”应正式写作“because”，并且“and”前应加逗号分隔两个独立分句，使句子结构更清晰。

× The wet like the average temperature in my hometown is around 25° and sometimes it can reach to 40° so it can actually kill you.

✓ The weather, like the average temperature in my hometown, is around 25°, and sometimes it can reach 40°, so it can actually kill you.

“reach to 40°”中“to”多余，应为“reach 40°”。“wet”应为“weather”，拼写错误。句中缺少逗号，影响句意表达。

× So I really want to clean them and it's always like increasing the burden for me.

✓ So I really want to clean it, and it always feels like increasing the burden for me.

“clean them”中的“them”指代不明，应为“it”指代“oil”。“it's always like increasing the burden”表达不自然，改为“it always feels like increasing the burden”更通顺。

× So weather forecast is very important for me to uh, decide my outfit and what to.

✓ So the weather forecast is very important for me to decide my outfit and what to wear.

“weather forecast”前应加定冠词“the”。句尾“what to”不完整，应补充“wear”使句子完整。

× I'm very excited for that 'cause I know I can touch the snow and feel how and feel it on my hands.

✓ I'm very excited about that because I know I can touch the snow and feel it on my hands.

“excited for”应为“excited about”。“feel how and feel it”重复且不通顺，应简化为“feel it”。