Weather— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is understandable but contains some grammatical errors and unclear phrases like 'thorai reason'. Try to use clearer and more natural expressions, and avoid redundancy. For example, you can say 'I live in Virat Nagar, which is in the Terai region of Nepal. The weather there is mostly hot and warm, and I often feel sweaty.'

例: I live in Virat Nagar, which is in the Terai region of Nepal. The weather there is mostly hot and warm, and I often feel sweaty during the day.

提案: Your answer has good ideas but some sentences are unclear and contain errors like 'such reason' and 'Winter cave'. Try to organize your answer with clear topic sentences and supporting details, and use linking words to connect ideas. For example, 'I prefer cold weather because I live in a hot region where summer makes me feel sluggish. In winter, I enjoy the chill and pleasant atmosphere, and I like having barbecues and eating hot spicy noodles.'

例: I prefer cold weather because I live in a hot region where summer makes me feel sluggish. In winter, I enjoy the chill and pleasant atmosphere, and I like having barbecues and eating hot spicy noodles.

提案: Your answer is descriptive and mostly clear, but try to use more precise vocabulary and linking words to improve coherence. For example, 'I love the rainy season, but I prefer light rain rather than heavy downpours. When it rains gently, I can enjoy watching the raindrops and the greenery around me. The air feels fresh and I can smell the soil, which is very pleasant.'

例: I love the rainy season, but I prefer light rain rather than heavy downpours. When it rains gently, I can enjoy watching the raindrops and the greenery around me. The air feels fresh and I can smell the soil, which is very pleasant.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but has some grammatical mistakes and unclear phrases. Try to use clearer sentence structures and linking words. For example, 'It depends on my situation. If I stay at home, I usually don't check the weather. However, if I plan to go outside, I always check the forecast to adjust my plans, especially to see if it will rain.'

例: It depends on my situation. If I stay at home, I usually don't check the weather. However, if I plan to go outside, I always check the forecast to adjust my plans, especially to see if it will rain.

提案: Your answer shows understanding but contains grammatical errors and unclear expressions like 'population pollution' and 'chaos among the public'. Try to use more accurate vocabulary and organize your ideas clearly. For example, 'I think climate change has caused hotter days and milder winters recently. Pollution has increased, which affects people's health, and this has caused some social problems.'

例: I think climate change has caused hotter days and milder winters recently. Pollution has increased, which affects people's health, and this has caused some social problems.

提案: Your answer is clear but can be improved by using better linking words and more natural phrasing. For example, 'Yes, I would definitely like to visit cities that have clean air, less pollution, and more greenery. I prefer places that are cooler than where I live.'

例: Yes, I would definitely like to visit cities that have clean air, less pollution, and more greenery. I prefer places that are cooler than where I live.

× Well, I live in Virat Nagar, it's the thorai reason of Nepal.

✓ Well, I live in Virat Nagar, it's the Thori region of Nepal.

The word 'reason' is incorrect here; the intended word is 'region' which is singular and refers to an area. 'Thorai' seems to be a misspelling of 'Thori', a place name. This correction clarifies the meaning and fixes the singular/plural confusion.

× It's mostly hot and warm in nature and sweating all the time.

✓ It's mostly hot and warm in nature, and I sweat all the time.

The phrase 'sweating all the time' lacks a subject. Adding 'I' clarifies who is sweating. Also, 'in nature' is acceptable but could be omitted for clarity. The correction improves sentence structure and clarity.

× I definitely prefer the cold weather because I'm from such reason that is hot most of the month so I'm quite sluggish and lazy during those heat waves of summer.

✓ I definitely prefer cold weather because I'm from a region that is hot most of the month, so I'm quite sluggish and lazy during the heat waves of summer.

The phrase 'such reason' is incorrect; 'region' fits better. Also, 'the cold weather' should be 'cold weather' as a general preference. 'Those heat waves' is better as 'the heat waves' for general reference. Prepositions and article usage are corrected for natural English.

× So I like chill and pleasant vibe.

✓ So I like a chill and pleasant vibe.

The sentence is missing the article 'a' before 'chill and pleasant vibe' because 'vibe' is a singular countable noun. Adding 'a' corrects the sentence structure.

× Winter cave and I also would like to have a barbecue and hot spicy noodles.

✓ In winter, I would also like to have a barbecue and hot spicy noodles.

'Winter cave' is incorrect; likely intended 'In winter'. The phrase is corrected to proper prepositional phrase 'In winter'. Also, the sentence structure is improved for clarity.

× Well, I love rainy season and it should not be a heavy rain.

✓ Well, I love the rainy season and it should not be heavy rain.

'Rainy season' is a specific season and requires the definite article 'the'. Also, 'a heavy rain' is incorrect; 'heavy rain' is uncountable and does not need 'a'.

× It should be a slow rain where I can see outside and the rains are dropping slowly and there are all greeneries all around.

✓ It should be a light rain where I can see outside, and the raindrops fall slowly with greenery all around.

'Slow rain' is unnatural; 'light rain' or 'gentle rain' is better. 'Rains are dropping' is incorrect; 'raindrops fall' is correct. 'Greeneries' is incorrect; 'greenery' is uncountable. The sentence is corrected for natural expression and preposition use.

× The place is very chill and we can smell the soil, so that's nice.

✓ The place is very cool and we can smell the soil, so that's nice.

'Chill' as an adjective is informal and usually describes temperature; 'cool' is more appropriate here. The sentence is corrected for natural adjective use.

× When it generally depends, if I am in my home all the time, I don't have to check it.

✓ It generally depends; if I am at home all the time, I don't have to check it.

The original sentence has awkward structure. 'When it generally depends' is incorrect; 'It generally depends' is correct. Also, 'in my home' is better as 'at home'. The sentence is restructured for clarity.

× But if I'm going outside, so I will definitely check the weather forecast because I have to change my plan and work on my plan according to the weather.

✓ But if I'm going outside, I will definitely check the weather forecast because I have to change and adjust my plans according to the weather.

The word 'so' is unnecessary after 'if' clause. 'Work on my plan' is better as 'adjust my plans'. The sentence is corrected for natural flow and preposition use.

× Because if it is going to rain, I have to see if I can go to work or not.

✓ Because if it is going to rain, I have to see whether I can go to work or not.

'See if' is informal; 'see whether' is more appropriate in formal speech. The sentence is corrected for formality and clarity.

× So it depends upon when I where I am in.

✓ So it depends on where I am.

The phrase 'depends upon when I where I am in' is ungrammatical and confusing. Correct phrase is 'depends on where I am'. The sentence is simplified and corrected for clarity.

× I think there are a lot of changes of climate change as the day has been more hotter and winter season are not much cold as previous it would be.

✓ I think there have been a lot of changes due to climate change as the days have become hotter and the winter seasons are not as cold as they used to be.

'Changes of climate change' is incorrect; 'changes due to climate change' is correct. 'Day' should be plural 'days'. 'More hotter' is incorrect; 'hotter' suffices. 'Winter season are' should be 'winter seasons are'. The sentence is corrected for plural forms and comparative structures.

× There are a lot of population pollution going on, people are becoming more sick day by day and there are lot of chaos among the public.

✓ There is a lot of pollution due to population growth; people are becoming sicker day by day, and there is a lot of chaos among the public.

'Population pollution' is unclear; 'pollution due to population growth' is clearer. 'More sick' should be 'sicker' (comparative adjective). 'There are lot of chaos' is incorrect; 'there is a lot of chaos' is correct. The sentence is corrected for adjective use and subject-verb agreement.

× Yes, I would definitely like to visit the cities which have clear air and with no pollution, greener cities and where the place is not warm and heat as I live in.

✓ Yes, I would definitely like to visit cities that have clear air with no pollution, greener areas, and where the place is not as warm and hot as where I live.

'The cities which have' is acceptable but 'cities that have' is more natural. 'Greener cities' is fine but 'greener areas' fits better with the context. 'Not warm and heat' is incorrect; should be 'not as warm and hot'. The sentence is corrected for plural and adjective use.