Weather— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to use more natural expressions and correct grammar. Instead of 'various of weather' say 'various types of weather' or 'different kinds of weather'. Also, avoid redundancy by not repeating 'weathers' and 'Four Seasons' unnecessarily. Use linking words to make your answer coherent.

例: I live in Georgia, where we experience four distinct seasons. Each season brings different weather, which makes living here quite enjoyable.

提案: Reduce the use of filler words like 'uh' to make your answer sound more fluent. Also, try to combine your ideas into fewer sentences using linking words like 'because' and 'and'.

例: I prefer hot weather because it allows me to do many outdoor activities, and I don't have to wear many layers of clothing.

提案: Avoid filler words and repetitive phrases like 'I think'. Use more precise vocabulary and combine your ideas smoothly with linking words.

例: I prefer dry weather because rain makes me wet and uncomfortable, which I don't enjoy.

提案: Try to avoid filler words and be more specific. Instead of saying 'like every day', say 'every day'. Also, explain why you consider it a bad habit with more detail.

例: Yes, I check the weather forecast every day because I want to plan my activities, but sometimes I think I check it too often and become a bit addicted.

提案: Your answer is unclear and grammatically incorrect. Try to express your opinion clearly and provide reasons or examples. Use correct subject-verb agreement and avoid vague statements.

例: I believe climate change has affected the environment in recent years, causing more extreme weather events like storms and heatwaves.

提案: Avoid repetition and incomplete sentences. Use linking words to connect your ideas and be more specific about what you find interesting.

例: Yes, I would like to visit cities with different climates because I enjoy traveling and find it fascinating to experience new environments and cultures.

× I live in Georgia and here we have various of weather, like in Four Seasons we have different weathers, so it's very satisfying.

✓ I live in Georgia and here we have various kinds of weather, like in the four seasons we have different weather, so it's very satisfying.

The phrase 'various of weather' is incorrect; 'various' should be followed by a plural noun without 'of' or by 'kinds of'. Also, 'weathers' is incorrect because 'weather' is an uncountable noun. Use 'different weather' instead. Additionally, 'Four Seasons' should be 'the four seasons' as it refers to the general seasons.

× I prefer, uh, hot weather, uh, because I think, uh, that, uh, you can, uh, do many things when it's hot.

✓ I prefer hot weather because I think that you can do many things when it's hot.

The sentence contains unnecessary filler words 'uh' which should be omitted for clarity. The phrase 'do many things' is correct here; no quantifier error, but removing fillers improves grammar and fluency.

× Uh, and I don't like to, uh, wear many things.

✓ And I don't like to wear many clothes.

The phrase 'wear many things' is vague and ungrammatical; 'clothes' is the correct plural noun to use here. 'Many' is correctly used with countable nouns like 'clothes'.

× I prefer dry weather because I don't like rain. I get, uh, wet.

✓ I prefer dry weather because I don't like rain. I get wet.

The sentence is mostly correct; removing filler 'uh' improves clarity. No preposition error here.

× I think, uh, it's very uncomfortable. So I think like that.

✓ I think it's very uncomfortable. So I think that way.

The phrase 'I think like that' is unnatural; 'I think that way' is the correct expression. Removing filler 'uh' improves clarity.

× Ah yes, I am in the habit of checking the weather forecast. I uh, do it like every day and uh, I think it is umm, the bad habit because uh, I am addicted to it.

✓ Ah yes, I am in the habit of checking the weather forecast. I do it every day and I think it is a bad habit because I am addicted to it.

The phrase 'like every day' should be 'every day' for correct adverbial usage. 'The bad habit' should be 'a bad habit' because it is not a specific habit previously mentioned. Removing fillers improves clarity.

× No, I don't think climate change in recent years are affected. It's same like last year.

✓ No, I don't think climate change in recent years has been affected. It's the same as last year.

'Climate change' is singular, so the verb should be 'has been' not 'are'. 'It's same like last year' is incorrect; correct form is 'It's the same as last year.'

× Yes, I would like to visit other cities that have different climates from where I live now because I like traveling I and I think it's interesting to see other.

✓ Yes, I would like to visit other cities that have different climates from where I live now because I like traveling and I think it's interesting to see others.

The phrase 'traveling I' is incorrect; 'and' should connect the clauses properly. 'See other' is incomplete; it should be 'see others' to refer to other places or people.