Weather— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có một số lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác, làm giảm tính tự nhiên và hiệu quả của câu trả lời. Bạn nên chú ý sử dụng cấu trúc câu đúng và từ vựng phù hợp hơn, đồng thời tránh lỗi chính tả và ngữ pháp để câu trả lời trở nên rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn.

例: The weather where I live is quite mild throughout the year. For instance, summers are warm but not too hot, which makes outdoor activities very enjoyable. Additionally, we have moderate rainfall in spring that helps keep the environment fresh.

提案: Bạn nên chú ý đến ngữ pháp số nhiều và số ít (ví dụ: 'clothes like Hollis' có thể là lỗi đánh máy hoặc từ không phù hợp). Ngoài ra, câu trả lời cần rõ ràng hơn và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như 'cold weather allow' nên là 'allows'. Hãy sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: I prefer cold weather because I enjoy wearing warm clothes like hoodies and jackets. I find them comfortable and cozy, especially when the temperature drops. Moreover, cold weather allows me to enjoy outdoor activities such as working in the fresh air.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tốt về mặt nội dung và cấu trúc, tuy nhiên bạn có thể thêm một số liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn và sử dụng từ vựng phong phú hơn để tăng điểm số.

例: I prefer dry weather because I find it much more comfortable than humid conditions. When the weather is dry, I don't have to worry about feeling sweaty or sticky, which can be quite unpleasant. Therefore, I enjoy going for walks and other outdoor activities more when it's dry.

提案: Bạn cần chú ý ngữ pháp và cấu trúc câu, ví dụ 'it had me decide' nên là 'it helps me decide', và câu cuối chưa hoàn chỉnh. Hãy luyện tập để trả lời rõ ràng, đầy đủ và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp để câu trả lời tự nhiên và hiệu quả hơn.

例: I usually check the weather forecast every morning because it helps me decide what clothes to wear and plan my day better. For example, if it's going to rain, I always bring an umbrella to avoid getting wet. This habit makes me feel more prepared and comfortable throughout the day.

提案: Bạn nên sử dụng từ vựng chính xác hơn (ví dụ 'drops' có thể là lỗi đánh máy của 'droughts'), và câu trả lời cần rõ ràng hơn. Hãy thêm liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc và sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp để tăng tính thuyết phục.

例: I think climate change has caused many serious effects in recent years. For example, global warming has led to more extreme weather events like floods and droughts, which affect people's lives and the environment. I feel quite worried about these changes.

提案: Bạn nên chú ý phát âm và từ vựng chính xác (ví dụ 'dining person' có thể là lỗi của 'dynamic person'), đồng thời sử dụng cấu trúc câu rõ ràng hơn và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như 'visit city' nên là 'visit cities'. Hãy luyện tập để câu trả lời tự nhiên và mạch lạc hơn.

例: Absolutely. I'm a dynamic person who loves exploring new places. I would like to visit cities with different climates, such as snowy northern cities, to experience new environments and cultures. This would give me a chance to learn more about how people live in different weather conditions.

× Well, the weather where live Internet is generally might impasse throughout the years.

✓ Well, the weather where I live is generally mild throughout the years.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and unclear wording ('live Internet' and 'might impasse'). The correct sentence should have a clear subject and verb structure: 'the weather where I live is generally mild throughout the years.' This improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× For example, summers are warm but not excessively hot which make outdoor activities very enjoyable.

✓ For example, summers are warm but not excessively hot, which makes outdoor activities very enjoyable.

The relative clause 'which make' refers to 'summers' or 'weather' and should agree in number. Since 'which' refers to 'summers' (plural), but the clause is about 'weather' (singular), the verb should be singular 'makes'. Also, a comma is needed before 'which' to separate the clauses.

× Ad additionally we experience moderate rainfall during spring which helps keep the environment and fresh.

✓ Additionally, we experience moderate rainfall during spring, which helps keep the environment fresh.

The phrase 'Ad additionally' is incorrect; it should be 'Additionally'. Also, 'environment and fresh' is incorrect; it should be 'environment fresh'. A comma is needed before 'which' to introduce the relative clause.

× Oh, from my perspective, I prefer cold weather because I enjoy wearing warm clothes like Hollis and jackets.

✓ Oh, from my perspective, I prefer cold weather because I enjoy wearing warm clothes like hoodies and jackets.

The word 'Hollis' is likely a typo or incorrect noun. The correct word is 'hoodies', which are warm clothes. This correction improves clarity and correctness.

× I find the comfortable and cosy especially when the temperature drops.

✓ I find them comfortable and cosy especially when the temperature drops.

The pronoun 'the' is incorrect here; it should be 'them' referring to the warm clothes mentioned earlier. This correction ensures proper pronoun reference.

× Also, cold weather allow me to enjoy outdoor activities like work, working in the fresh air.

✓ Also, cold weather allows me to enjoy outdoor activities like working in the fresh air.

The subject 'cold weather' is singular, so the verb should be 'allows' not 'allow'. Also, 'like work, working' is redundant; 'like working' is correct.

× Oh, just check the weather forecast every morning because it had me decide what clothes to wear and plan my day better.

✓ Oh, I just check the weather forecast every morning because it helps me decide what clothes to wear and plan my day better.

The original sentence lacks the subject 'I' and uses 'had' incorrectly. The correct verb is 'helps' to indicate present habitual action.

× This habit to make me feel more prepared and comfortable throughout the.

✓ This habit makes me feel more prepared and comfortable throughout the day.

The original sentence is incomplete and incorrectly structured. 'This habit to make me' should be 'This habit makes me'. Also, 'throughout the' is incomplete; it should be 'throughout the day'.

× I think climate change has caused many serious effects in recent years.

✓ I think climate change has caused many serious effects in recent years.

This sentence is correct; no correction needed.

× For example, global warming has led to more extreme weather events like floods and drops, which affect people lives in the environment.

✓ For example, global warming has led to more extreme weather events like floods and droughts, which affect people's lives and the environment.

The word 'drops' is incorrect; it should be 'droughts'. Also, 'people lives' should be 'people's lives' to show possession. 'In the environment' is better as 'and the environment'.

× Just absolutely. I'm a dining person who loves exploring new places.

✓ Just absolutely. I'm a dining person who loves exploring new places.

The phrase 'a dining person' is unclear; possibly 'a daring person' or 'an adventurous person' is intended. However, since it is not a grammar problem from the list, no correction is made.

× I would like to visit city with different climates such as snowy northern cities to experience new environments and cultures.

✓ I would like to visit cities with different climates such as snowy northern cities to experience new environments and cultures.

The word 'city' should be plural 'cities' to agree with 'different climates' and the plural 'snowy northern cities'.