Weather— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to avoid repeating the examiner's question in your answer and correct minor grammar errors. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly, for example, 'Currently, it is the rainy season, so we experience frequent showers and cooler temperatures.' This will make your answer more natural and coherent.

例: I live in a tropical country where the weather is usually hot and humid throughout the year. Currently, it is the rainy season, so we experience frequent showers and cooler temperatures.

提案: Focus on correcting grammar mistakes such as 'it's feels' to 'it feels' and avoid sentence fragments like 'Which make cold days quiet blessing.' Use linking words to connect your ideas clearly, for example, 'This makes cold days quite a blessing.'

例: I prefer cold weather because it feels refreshing and energizing, especially after spending time indoors. For example, I enjoy wearing cozy clothes and drinking hot beverages, which makes cold days quite a blessing.

提案: Be careful with word choice; 'convertible' should be 'comfortable' or 'convenient.' Also, clarify your examples and complete your sentences. For instance, 'I can easily do laundry and hang clothes outside to dry quickly.' Use linking words like 'also' to connect ideas smoothly.

例: I prefer dry weather because it is generally more comfortable and convenient for daily activities. For example, I can easily do laundry and hang clothes outside to dry quickly. Also, dry weather makes it easier to go outside and enjoy outdoor activities.

提案: Avoid starting with incomplete words like 'Forecast.' Use correct verb tenses consistently, for example, 'I check the forecast more often when I am abroad.' Also, clarify 'make sure it won't drain' to 'make sure it won't rain.' Use linking words to improve flow.

例: I don't usually check the weather forecast regularly, but I always do it before I do my laundry to make sure it won't rain. Also, when I am abroad and unfamiliar with the climate, I check the forecast more often so I can dress appropriately and plan my day better.

提案: Combine short sentences for better flow and correct grammar, for example, 'In recent years, climate change has had profound effects on both the environment and society.' Use plural form 'ecosystems' and linking words like 'for example' to introduce details.

例: In recent years, climate change has had profound effects on both the environment and society. For example, we have seen more frequent and devastating weather events such as hurricanes, floods, and droughts, which have caused significant damage to communities and ecosystems.

提案: Correct minor grammar errors such as 'specially' to 'especially' and 'at tropical climate' to 'a tropical climate.' Use linking words to connect ideas, for example, 'because my country has a tropical climate, so it is always hot.' Also, use plural form 'conditions.'

例: Yes, I would love to visit cities with different climates, especially those that are colder and have snow. Experiencing snow would be very exciting because my country has a tropical climate, so it is always hot. It would be very interesting to see how people live in such different weather conditions.

× However, right now in June it is the rainy season to experience a frequent showers and cooler temperature.

✓ However, right now in June it is the rainy season with frequent showers and cooler temperatures.

The phrase 'to experience a frequent showers' is incorrect because 'to experience' should be followed by a noun or gerund without an article mismatch. Also, 'a frequent showers' mixes singular article 'a' with plural noun 'showers'. Correct usage is 'with frequent showers'. Additionally, 'temperature' should be plural 'temperatures' to match the context of varying cooler temperatures.

× I prefer cold weather because it's feels refreshing and energizing, especially after spending time indoors.

✓ I prefer cold weather because it feels refreshing and energizing, especially after spending time indoors.

The phrase 'it's feels' incorrectly combines 'it is' and the verb 'feels'. The correct form is 'it feels' to agree with the third person singular subject 'it'.

× Which make cold days quiet blessing.

✓ Which makes cold days quite a blessing.

The sentence fragment 'Which make cold days quiet blessing' lacks a subject-verb agreement and proper article usage. 'Which' refers to a singular subject, so the verb should be 'makes'. Also, 'quiet' should be 'quite' (meaning very), and 'blessing' needs an article 'a' before it.

× Which make cold days quiet blessing.

✓ Which makes cold days quite a blessing.

The word 'quiet' is an adjective meaning silent, but the intended meaning is 'quite' as an adverb meaning very. Also, 'blessing' requires the article 'a' to be grammatically correct.

× I prefer dry weather because it's generally more convertible and convenient for daily activities.

✓ I prefer dry weather because it's generally more comfortable and convenient for daily activities.

The word 'convertible' is incorrect in this context; the intended adjective is 'comfortable' to describe favorable weather conditions.

× For example, I can easily do laundry and have McDonald's outside and they will dry quickly within an hour.

✓ For example, I can easily do laundry and hang it outside, and it will dry quickly within an hour.

The phrase 'have McDonald's outside' is incorrect and unclear. The intended meaning is likely 'hang clothes outside'. Also, 'they' should be 'it' referring to 'laundry' as a singular noun in this context.

× Also, dry weather makes it easier to go outside and enjoy outdoor.

✓ Also, dry weather makes it easier to go outside and enjoy the outdoors.

The phrase 'enjoy outdoor' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'enjoy the outdoors' where 'outdoors' is a noun and requires the definite article 'the'.

× Also, when I am abroad and unfamiliar with the climate, I checked the forecast more often so I can dress appropriately and plan my day better.

✓ Also, when I am abroad and unfamiliar with the climate, I check the forecast more often so I can dress appropriately and plan my day better.

The sentence mixes past tense 'checked' with present tense 'am' and modal 'can'. To maintain consistency, 'checked' should be in present tense 'check' to match the habitual action.

× In recent years, the climate changes. Has had profound effects on both the environment and society.

✓ In recent years, the climate has changed and has had profound effects on both the environment and society.

The phrase 'the climate changes' is incorrect in present simple for a recent trend; present perfect 'has changed' is appropriate. Also, the second sentence is a fragment missing a subject; combining both into one sentence improves clarity.

× For example, we have seen more frequent and devastating weather events such as hurricanes, floods and droughts, which have caused significant damage to communities and ecosystem.

✓ For example, we have seen more frequent and devastating weather events such as hurricanes, floods, and droughts, which have caused significant damage to communities and ecosystems.

The word 'ecosystem' should be plural 'ecosystems' to match the plural 'communities' and the context of multiple affected systems.

× Yes, I would love to visit cities with different climates, specially those that are colder and have snow.

✓ Yes, I would love to visit cities with different climates, especially those that are colder and have snow.

The word 'specially' means 'in a special manner' but the correct word here is 'especially' meaning 'particularly'.

× Experiencing snow would be very exciting because my country has at tropical climate and it is always hot.

✓ Experiencing snow would be very exciting because my country has a tropical climate and it is always hot.

The phrase 'has at tropical climate' is incorrect; it should be 'has a tropical climate' with the indefinite article 'a' before the singular noun 'climate'.

× It will be very interesting to see how people live in such different weather condition.

✓ It will be very interesting to see how people live in such different weather conditions.

The noun 'condition' should be plural 'conditions' to match the plural adjective 'different' and the context of various weather types.