Weather— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer lacks clarity and contains unclear or incorrect phrases, which affects naturalness and effectiveness. Try to use clear, simple sentences and avoid redundancy. Also, keep your answer within 5 sentences and ensure it directly answers the question with supporting details.

例: I live in Guangzhou, a coastal city in China. The weather here is usually very hot and humid, especially in summer. Sometimes, the heat can be quite uncomfortable for me. Because of this, I don't really enjoy the summer weather here.

提案: Your answer has some grammar and vocabulary errors and lacks coherence. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific examples. Also, avoid redundancy and keep sentences clear and concise.

例: I prefer hot weather because I grew up in a warm city in China, so I feel more comfortable in such conditions. Also, during summer, I enjoy going to beautiful outdoor places and spending time with my friends. In contrast, cold weather is too harsh and limits outdoor activities.

提案: Your answer contains unclear phrases and grammar mistakes. Try to use correct vocabulary and sentence structures. Provide specific examples and use linking words to make your answer coherent.

例: I prefer dry weather because it allows me to enjoy outdoor activities without worrying about rain. For example, I can go hiking or have a picnic with my friends comfortably. On the other hand, wet weather can be inconvenient because it makes the ground muddy and limits what I can do outside.

提案: Your answer has some pronunciation and word choice errors. Use correct vocabulary and sentence structures. Also, be clear and concise, and use linking words to connect ideas logically.

例: Yes, I have the habit of checking the weather forecast every day before going to bed because the weather in my city changes frequently. For example, if I don't check it, I might wear clothes that are too hot or too cold for the next day, which can be uncomfortable. Therefore, checking the forecast helps me prepare better.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains many grammar and vocabulary errors. Try to organize your ideas clearly, use correct grammar, and provide specific examples. Avoid incomplete sentences and unclear phrases.

例: I think the weather has become more extreme in recent years. For example, summers are getting hotter and winters are becoming colder and windier. Rainfall is also heavier. These changes have a significant impact on our daily lives, making it less comfortable.

提案: Your answer is generally clear but contains some pronunciation and word choice errors. Use correct vocabulary and sentence structures. Provide specific comparisons and use linking words to improve coherence.

例: Yes, I would love to visit cities with different climates. For example, last year I traveled to Guizhou, a mountainous city in central China. Unlike Guangzhou, where temperatures often exceed 35°C, Guizhou is much cooler, usually around 30°C, which makes daily life more comfortable.

× I live in Guangzhou, a coastal city in China, so the weather is usually very hard and *****.

✓ I live in Guangzhou, a coastal city in China, so the weather is usually very hot and humid.

The original sentence uses 'hard and *****', which is incorrect and unclear. The correct adjectives to describe weather in Guangzhou are 'hot and humid'. Using appropriate adjectives improves clarity and correctness.

× In response to hire him, managed to make it through even hotter.

✓ In summer, it can get even hotter.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. Simplifying the sentence to 'In summer, it can get even hotter' corrects the structure and conveys the intended meaning clearly.

× Which can be quite uncomfortable for me.

✓ This can be quite uncomfortable for me.

Starting a sentence with 'Which' as a relative pronoun without a main clause is incorrect. Replacing 'Which' with 'This' forms a complete sentence.

× Because of this, I don't really like the summer weather here.

✓ Because of this, I don't really like the summer weather here.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no correction needed.

× I prefer hot about it because I grew up in a city in China where the timer is usually warm, so I feel more comfortable in such condition.

✓ I prefer hot weather because I grew up in a city in China where the temperature is usually warm, so I feel more comfortable in such conditions.

The phrase 'hot about it' is incorrect; it should be 'hot weather'. 'Timer' is a typo for 'temperature'. 'Condition' should be plural 'conditions' to match the context.

× Also during the summer I enjoyed go to the beautiful outdoor places an just an beautiful codes with my friend in contrast to Weatherfield too harsh and limit outdoor activity.

✓ Also, during the summer I enjoy going to beautiful outdoor places and just enjoying beautiful cool weather with my friends, in contrast to weather that is too harsh and limits outdoor activity.

The original sentence has multiple errors: 'enjoyed go' should be 'enjoy going'; 'an just an beautiful codes' is unclear and corrected to 'just enjoying beautiful cool weather'; 'friend' should be plural 'friends'; 'Weatherfield' is likely a typo for 'weather'; 'limit' should be 'limits' to agree with singular subject 'weather'.

× I prefer dry weather because it allows me to enjoy outdoor or ticketed without worrying about ring.

✓ I prefer dry weather because it allows me to enjoy outdoor activities without worrying about rain.

'Outdoor or ticketed' is incorrect; it should be 'outdoor activities'. 'Ring' is a typo for 'rain'.

× For example, I can go hiking or place part with my friend comfortable.

✓ For example, I can go hiking or play sports with my friends comfortably.

'Place part' is incorrect; it should be 'play sports'. 'Friend' should be plural 'friends'. 'Comfortable' should be the adverb 'comfortably' to modify the verb.

× For the other hand, wet weather can be inconvenient since it make the group madi and they made what I can do outside.

✓ On the other hand, wet weather can be inconvenient since it makes the ground muddy and limits what I can do outside.

'For the other hand' should be 'On the other hand'. 'Make' should be 'makes' to agree with singular subject 'it'. 'Group madi' is a typo for 'ground muddy'. 'They made what I can do' is incorrect; corrected to 'limits what I can do'.

× Yes, I have the habit of checking whether focused every day before going to bed because the weather in my city change food frequently.

✓ Yes, I have the habit of checking the weather forecast every day before going to bed because the weather in my city changes quite frequently.

'Whether focused' is a typo for 'weather forecast'. 'Change food' is a typo for 'changes quite'. Subject-verb agreement corrected with 'weather changes'.

× For example, if I don't check it, I may wear something too hot or too cold for the next day, which can be uncomfortable.

✓ For example, if I don't check it, I may wear something too hot or too cold for the next day, which can be uncomfortable.

This sentence is correct; no correction needed.

× Therefore, tricking A focused help me prepare better.

✓ Therefore, checking the forecast helps me prepare better.

'Tricking A focused' is a typo for 'checking the forecast'. 'Help' should be 'helps' to agree with singular subject 'checking the forecast'.

× I think the weather change more extremely, for example, the summer become more and more hott and windier become more and more code.

✓ I think the weather changes more extremely; for example, the summer becomes hotter and the windier seasons become colder.

'Change' should be 'changes' for subject-verb agreement. 'Become' should be 'becomes'. 'Hott' is a typo for 'hot'. 'Code' is a typo for 'cold'. The sentence is restructured for clarity.

× The rain will be more and more big.

✓ The rain will become heavier and heavier.

'More and more big' is incorrect; 'heavier and heavier' is the correct comparative form for rain.

× It will influence our daily life remarkable.

✓ It will remarkably influence our daily life.

'Remarkable' is an adjective; the adverb 'remarkably' is needed to modify the verb 'influence'.

× So we didn't have a comfortable. Iran men to leave?

✓ So we don't have comfortable weather. Do people need to leave?

The original sentence is unclear and ungrammatical. It is corrected to a clear question about comfort and possible relocation.

× Yes, I would love to visit cities with different climate.

✓ Yes, I would love to visit cities with different climates.

'Climate' should be plural 'climates' to match 'cities'.

× For example, last year I traveled to Guizhou, a monitor, a city in central China.

✓ For example, last year I traveled to Guizhou, a mountainous city in central China.

'Monitor' is a typo for 'mountainous', which correctly describes Guizhou.

× Unlike Guangzhou, where the temperature often exceed 35°C, what great Joe is much cooler, usually around 30°, which make it comfortable for daily life.

✓ Unlike Guangzhou, where the temperature often exceeds 35°C, Guizhou is much cooler, usually around 30°C, which makes it comfortable for daily life.

'Exceed' should be 'exceeds' for subject-verb agreement. 'What great Joe' is a typo for 'Guizhou'. 'Make' should be 'makes' to agree with singular subject 'which'.