Weather— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains some errors and incomplete sentences, which affects naturalness and effectiveness. Try to give a clear topic sentence and support it with specific details using correct grammar and vocabulary. Avoid redundancy and incomplete thoughts.

例: I live in Guangzhou, a coastal city in China, where the weather is usually very hot and humid. Summers can be especially uncomfortable because of the high temperatures and humidity. Because of this, I don't really enjoy the summer weather here.

提案: Your answer has some grammar and vocabulary mistakes and lacks coherence. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific examples. Also, check your sentence structure to make your answer clearer and more natural.

例: I prefer hot weather because I grew up in a city in China where the climate is usually warm. Therefore, I feel more comfortable in such conditions. For example, during summer, I enjoy going to beautiful outdoor places and spending time with my friends, unlike cold weather which can be too harsh and limit outdoor activities.

提案: Your answer contains unclear phrases and grammar errors. Try to use correct vocabulary and sentence structures. Provide clear examples and use linking words to make your answer coherent and natural.

例: I prefer dry weather because it allows me to enjoy outdoor activities without worrying about rain. For example, I can go hiking or have a picnic with my friends comfortably. On the other hand, wet weather can be inconvenient since it makes the ground muddy and limits what I can do outside.

提案: Your answer has some pronunciation and grammar mistakes, and some words are unclear. Use correct vocabulary and sentence structures. Also, explain your habit clearly and give specific reasons with linking words.

例: Yes, I have the habit of checking the weather forecast every day before going to bed because the weather in my city changes frequently. For example, if I don't check it, I might wear clothes that are too hot or too cold for the next day, which can be uncomfortable. Therefore, checking the forecast helps me prepare better.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains many grammar and vocabulary errors. Try to organize your ideas logically, use correct grammar, and provide specific examples. Avoid incomplete sentences and unclear phrases.

例: I think the weather has become more extreme in recent years. For example, summers are getting hotter and winters are becoming colder and windier. Rainfall is also increasing, which affects our daily lives significantly. These changes make it harder for people to live comfortably.

提案: Your answer is generally clear but contains some pronunciation and vocabulary errors. Try to use correct names and provide more specific details. Use linking words to compare climates clearly.

例: Yes, I would love to visit cities with different climates. For example, last year I traveled to Guizhou, a mountainous city in central China. Unlike Guangzhou, where temperatures often exceed 35°C, Guizhou is much cooler, usually around 30°C, which makes daily life more comfortable.

× I live in Guangzhou, a coastal city in China, so the weather is usually very hard and *****.

✓ I live in Guangzhou, a coastal city in China, so the weather is usually very hot and humid.

The original sentence uses 'hard and *****', which is incorrect and unclear. The correct adjectives to describe weather in Guangzhou are 'hot and humid'. Using appropriate adjectives improves clarity and correctness.

× In response to hire him, managed to make it through even hotter.

✓ In summer, it can get even hotter.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. It lacks a subject and proper structure. Rewriting it as 'In summer, it can get even hotter' provides a clear and grammatically correct sentence.

× Which can be quite uncomfortable for me.

✓ This can be quite uncomfortable for me.

Starting a sentence with 'Which' without a clear antecedent creates a fragment. Replacing 'Which' with 'This' connects the sentence properly to the previous context.

× Because of this, I don't really like the summer weather here.

✓ Because of this, I don't really like the summer weather here.

This sentence is grammatically correct and needs no correction.

× I prefer hot about it because I grew up in a city in China where the timer is usually warm, so I feel more comfortable in such condition.

✓ I prefer hot weather because I grew up in a city in China where the temperature is usually warm, so I feel more comfortable in such conditions.

The phrase 'hot about it' is incorrect; it should be 'hot weather'. 'Timer' is a typo for 'temperature'. Also, 'condition' should be plural 'conditions' to match the context.

× Also during the summer I enjoyed go to the beautiful outdoor places an just an beautiful codes with my friend in contrast to Weatherfield too harsh and limit outdoor activity.

✓ Also, during the summer I enjoy going to beautiful outdoor places and just enjoying beautiful cools with my friends, in contrast to weather that is too harsh and limits outdoor activity.

The original sentence has multiple errors: 'enjoyed go' should be 'enjoy going'; 'an just an beautiful codes' is unclear and likely 'just enjoying beautiful cools'; 'friend' should be plural 'friends'; 'Weatherfield' is likely 'weather that is'; 'limit' should be 'limits' to agree with singular subject.

× I prefer dry weather because it allows me to enjoy outdoor or ticketed without worrying about ring.

✓ I prefer dry weather because it allows me to enjoy outdoor activities without worrying about rain.

'Outdoor or ticketed' is incorrect; it should be 'outdoor activities'. 'Ring' is a typo for 'rain'.

× For example, I can go hiking or place part with my friend comfortable.

✓ For example, I can go hiking or play sports with my friends comfortably.

'Place part' is incorrect; it should be 'play sports'. 'Friend' should be plural 'friends'. 'Comfortable' should be the adverb 'comfortably' to modify the verb.

× For the other hand, wet weather can be inconvenient since it make the group madi and they made what I can do outside.

✓ On the other hand, wet weather can be inconvenient since it makes the ground muddy and limits what I can do outside.

'For the other hand' should be 'On the other hand'. 'Make' should be 'makes' to agree with singular subject 'it'. 'Group madi' is a typo for 'ground muddy'. 'They made what I can do' is incorrect; it should be 'limits what I can do'.

× Yes, I have the habit of checking whether focused every day before going to bed because the weather in my city change food frequently.

✓ Yes, I have the habit of checking the weather forecast every day before going to bed because the weather in my city changes quite frequently.

'Whether focused' is a typo for 'weather forecast'. 'Change food' is incorrect; it should be 'changes quite'. Subject-verb agreement requires 'changes' for singular 'weather'.

× For example, if I don't check it, I may wear something too hot or too cold for the next day, which can be uncomfortable.

✓ For example, if I don't check it, I may wear something too hot or too cold for the next day, which can be uncomfortable.

This sentence is correct and needs no correction.

× Therefore, tricking A focused help me prepare better.

✓ Therefore, checking the forecast helps me prepare better.

'Tricking A focused' is a typo for 'checking the forecast'. 'Help' should be 'helps' to agree with singular subject.

× I think the weather change more extremely, for example, the summer become more and more hott and windier become more and more code.

✓ I think the weather changes more extremely; for example, the summer becomes hotter and the windier becomes colder.

'Change' should be 'changes' for subject-verb agreement. 'Become' should be 'becomes'. 'Hott' is a typo for 'hot'. 'Code' is a typo for 'cold'. The sentence structure is improved for clarity.

× The rain will be more and more big.

✓ The rain will become heavier and heavier.

'More and more big' is incorrect; the correct comparative form is 'heavier and heavier' when describing rain.

× It will influence our daily life remarkable.

✓ It will remarkably influence our daily life.

'Remarkable' is an adjective; the adverb 'remarkably' is needed to modify the verb 'influence'.

× So we didn't have a comfortable. Iran men to leave?

✓ So we don't have a comfortable life anymore.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. It likely means 'So we don't have a comfortable life anymore.' The phrase 'Iran men to leave?' is unclear and omitted.

× Yes, I would love to visit cities with different climate.

✓ Yes, I would love to visit cities with different climates.

'Climate' should be plural 'climates' to agree with plural 'cities'.

× For example, last year I traveled to Guizhou, a monitor, a city in central China.

✓ For example, last year I traveled to Guizhou, a mountainous city in central China.

'Monitor' is a typo for 'mountainous', which correctly describes the city.

× Unlike Guangzhou, where the temperature often exceed 35°C, what great Joe is much cooler, usually around 30°, which make it comfortable for daily life.

✓ Unlike Guangzhou, where the temperature often exceeds 35°C, Guizhou is much cooler, usually around 30°C, which makes it comfortable for daily life.

'Exceed' should be 'exceeds' for subject-verb agreement. 'What great Joe' is a typo for 'Guizhou'. 'Make' should be 'makes' to agree with singular subject 'which'.