Weather— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 문법 오류와 발음 오류를 줄이고, 문장을 더 자연스럽고 명확하게 구성하는 연습이 필요합니다. 예를 들어, 'I live in a place with a temperate climate, experiencing all four seasons. Spring and autumn are mild and beautiful, winters are cold and snowy, and summers are sunny.'와 같이 말할 수 있습니다.

例: I live in a place with a temperate climate, experiencing all four seasons. Spring and autumn are mild and beautiful, winters are cold and snowy, and summers are sunny.

提案: 문장을 더 자연스럽게 연결하고, 어휘 선택을 개선할 필요가 있습니다. 예를 들어, 'It depends on my plans. In hot weather, I like going to the beach, while in cold weather, I enjoy winter sports. So, I enjoy both types of weather.'와 같이 말할 수 있습니다.

例: It depends on my plans. In hot weather, I like going to the beach, while in cold weather, I enjoy winter sports. So, I enjoy both types of weather.

提案: 문법과 어휘를 더 정확하게 사용하고, 문장 연결을 자연스럽게 해야 합니다. 예를 들어, 'I prefer wet weather to dry weather because I like the sound of rain. Listening to rain makes me feel relaxed and calm. Also, I enjoy staying indoors with a book.'라고 말할 수 있습니다.

例: I prefer wet weather to dry weather because I like the sound of rain. Listening to rain makes me feel relaxed and calm. Also, I enjoy staying indoors with a book.

提案: 문법 오류를 줄이고, 문장을 더 명확하고 자연스럽게 만들어야 합니다. 예를 들어, 'Yes, I check the weather forecast every morning before leaving the house. I use a weather app on my phone to decide whether to bring an umbrella or wear a jacket. It's part of my daily routine.'라고 말할 수 있습니다.

例: Yes, I check the weather forecast every morning before leaving the house. I use a weather app on my phone to decide whether to bring an umbrella or wear a jacket. It's part of my daily routine.

提案: 문법과 어휘 사용에 주의하고, 문장을 더 명확하고 논리적으로 구성해야 합니다. 예를 들어, 'In recent years, climate change has caused heat waves and unpredictable events like hurricanes and floods. Also, ice caps are melting and sea levels are rising, which affects many ecosystems.'라고 말할 수 있습니다.

例: In recent years, climate change has caused heat waves and unpredictable events like hurricanes and floods. Also, ice caps are melting and sea levels are rising, which affects many ecosystems.

提案: 문장을 더 자연스럽고 명확하게 만들고, 어휘 선택을 개선해야 합니다. 예를 들어, 'Yes, I would like to visit cities with different climates because I find it interesting to see how people adapt their lives to the changing weather.'라고 말할 수 있습니다.

例: Yes, I would like to visit cities with different climates because I find it interesting to see how people adapt their lives to the changing weather.

× The weather I leave is temperate, we have all Four Seasons, springs and autumns, are mild and have a beautiful surroundings.

✓ The weather I live in is temperate; we have all four seasons. Spring and autumn are mild and have beautiful surroundings.

'Leave' is a typo and should be 'live'. 'Four Seasons' should be lowercase 'four seasons' as it is not a proper noun here. 'Springs' and 'autumns' are uncountable in this context, so singular 'spring' and 'autumn' are correct. 'Surroundings' is plural, so 'a beautiful surroundings' is incorrect; remove 'a'.

× Also, winters are cold and snowing summers are sunny.

✓ Also, winters are cold and snowy, and summers are sunny.

'Snowing' is a present participle used incorrectly here; the adjective 'snowy' should be used to describe winters. Also, the sentence needs a conjunction 'and' to connect the two clauses properly.

× In hot weather I want to go to beach.

✓ In hot weather, I want to go to the beach.

The phrase 'go to beach' is missing the definite article 'the' before 'beach'. Also, a comma after 'In hot weather' improves readability.

× And. In cold weather, I like to enjoy the winter sports.

✓ In cold weather, I like to enjoy winter sports.

Starting a sentence with 'And.' is incorrect punctuation and unnecessary. Also, 'the winter sports' should be 'winter sports' as a general activity.

× I enjoy both of weather.

✓ I enjoy both kinds of weather.

'Both of weather' is incorrect; 'weather' is uncountable. Use 'both kinds of weather' to express enjoyment of two types.

× I prefer wet weather than dry weather because I like sound of the rain.

✓ I prefer wet weather to dry weather because I like the sound of the rain.

The correct preposition after 'prefer' is 'to', not 'than'. Also, 'sound' needs the definite article 'the' here.

× When I listen the rain sounds I feel relaxing and calm.

✓ When I listen to the sound of rain, I feel relaxed and calm.

The verb 'listen' requires the preposition 'to'. 'Rain sounds' should be 'the sound of rain' for natural expression. 'Relaxing' is an adjective describing something that causes relaxation; here, the speaker feels 'relaxed'.

× Also I like to stay inside with book.

✓ Also, I like to stay inside with a book.

'With book' is missing the indefinite article 'a'. Also, a comma after 'Also' improves sentence flow.

× Yes, I actually checking the weather forecast every morning before I leave the house.

✓ Yes, I actually check the weather forecast every morning before I leave the house.

'Checking' is a present participle and incorrect here; the simple present 'check' is needed to express habitual action.

× I can check with weather app on my phone so I can bring umbrella or where. Jacket.

✓ I can check the weather app on my phone so I can bring an umbrella or wear a jacket.

'Check with weather app' should be 'check the weather app'. 'Bring umbrella' needs the article 'an'. 'Where' is a typo for 'wear'.

× It's my daily routine.

✓ This is my daily routine.

While 'It's my daily routine' is not incorrect, 'This is my daily routine' is more natural in this context.

× In recent years, the climate change cause hit waves and unpredictable like hurricanes an floats.

✓ In recent years, climate change has caused heat waves and unpredictable events like hurricanes and floods.

'The climate change' should be 'climate change' without 'the'. 'Cause' should be in present perfect 'has caused' to indicate recent effects. 'Hit waves' is incorrect; 'heat waves' is correct. 'Unpredictable like hurricanes an floats' is incomplete; 'unpredictable events like hurricanes and floods' is correct.

× Also ice caps melting and sea levels are rising, so it affects a lot of. Ecosystems.

✓ Also, ice caps are melting and sea levels are rising, so it affects a lot of ecosystems.

'Ice caps melting' needs auxiliary verb 'are' for present continuous. The period after 'a lot of' is incorrect; it should continue with 'ecosystems'.

× Yes, I would like to visit other cities that have different climates from where I live because I think it is fun to see how many people weather changing their life.

✓ Yes, I would like to visit other cities that have different climates from where I live because I think it is fun to see how many people’s weather changes their lives.

'Many people weather changing their life' is incorrect. It should be 'many people’s weather changes their lives' to show possession and subject-verb agreement.