Weather— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答が断片的で文法的に不自然な部分が多いです。季節や天気の特徴を一文でまとめ、具体的な説明を加えると良いでしょう。例えば、季節ごとの特徴や雨季がもたらす影響について明確に述べることが大切です。

例: I live in Japan, which has four distinct seasons: spring, summer, autumn, and winter. We also experience a rainy season in early summer, which helps crops grow and contributes to delicious seasonal foods.

提案: 回答が不明瞭で文法的な誤りが多いです。好みをはっきり述べ、その理由と具体的な対策を簡潔に説明しましょう。接続詞を使って論理的に話をつなげることも重要です。

例: I prefer hot weather to cold weather because I can cool down by using ice or fans. Also, I enjoy outdoor activities more when it's warm.

提案: 内容が不明瞭で、文法や語彙の誤りが多いです。乾燥した天気が好きな理由を明確に述べ、具体的な説明を加えましょう。

例: I prefer dry weather because wet weather in early summer makes my house damp and uncomfortable. Dry days are better for my health and daily activities.

提案: 基本的な内容は伝わりますが、最後の部分が不明瞭です。習慣や頻度を明確に述べ、どのように情報を得ているかを簡潔に説明しましょう。

例: Yes, I check the weather forecast every day before leaving the house. I usually watch the news on TV to decide what to wear or bring.

提案: 文法や語彙の誤りが多く、意味が伝わりにくいです。気候変動の影響を具体的に述べ、例を明確に説明しましょう。

例: I think climate change has affected the weather in Japan. For example, there are more hot days, which damage plants and crops.

提案: 理由は述べられていますが、文法や語彙の誤りが多いです。異なる気候の都市に行きたくない理由を明確にし、簡潔に説明しましょう。

例: No, I don't want to visit cities with different climates because sudden temperature changes can stress my body and affect my health.

× I live in Japan, and in Japan we have Four Seasons. Spring. Summer, autumn and winter.

✓ I live in Japan, and in Japan we have four seasons: spring, summer, autumn, and winter.

The word 'Seasons' should not be capitalized unless it is a proper noun. Also, 'Four Seasons' should be 'four seasons' and the seasons should be listed in lowercase with commas and a colon for clarity.

× And we have some rainy seasons in Georgia.

✓ And we have some rainy seasons in Japan.

The student likely meant 'Japan' instead of 'Georgia' as the context is about Japan. Also, 'rainy seasons' is plural and correct here.

× It enables us to have.

✓ It enables us to have rain during those seasons.

The sentence is incomplete and unclear. Adding 'rain during those seasons' clarifies the meaning.

× And I thought, good foods.

✓ And I thought, we have good foods.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks a subject and verb. Adding 'we have' completes the sentence.

× I prefer hot weather then court Wizards.

✓ I prefer hot weather rather than cold weather.

The phrase 'then court Wizards' is incorrect. It should be 'rather than cold weather' to express preference correctly.

× Becauses.

✓ Because.

The word 'Becauses' is a misspelling of 'Because'.

× I can do some. ******* to prevent Hott.

✓ I can do some things to prevent heat.

The sentence is incomplete and contains unclear words. Replacing '*******' with 'things' and correcting 'Hott' to 'heat' clarifies the meaning.

× For example using ice or crew crossed.

✓ For example, using ice or cross-ventilation.

The phrase 'crew crossed' is incorrect. It likely means 'cross-ventilation'. Also, a comma after 'For example' is needed.

× I prefer drivers are in Japan we have very great visits especially in early summer and it makes my house like not a good step stool Asians so I prefer drive Wizards.

✓ I prefer dry weather. In Japan, we have very heavy rains especially in early summer, and it makes my house feel uncomfortable, so I prefer dry weather.

The original sentence is confusing and contains many errors. 'Drivers' should be 'dry weather', 'visits' should be 'rains', and the sentence structure needs correction for clarity.

× Before I leave house, I always check the weather forecast by watching news TV programs and I will, I decide.

✓ Before I leave the house, I always check the weather forecast by watching news TV programs and then I decide.

The phrase 'leave house' needs the definite article 'the'. Also, 'and I will, I decide' is awkward; 'and then I decide' is clearer.

× I think the climate change is definitely affects the wither in Japan.

✓ I think climate change definitely affects the weather in Japan.

'Is definitely affects' is incorrect; it should be 'definitely affects'. Also, 'wither' should be 'weather'.

× For example, there are more and more hot dates in Japan.

✓ For example, there are more and more hot days in Japan.

'Hot dates' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'hot days'.

× Put.

The word 'Put.' is incomplete and unclear; it should be removed.

× And it damages the. Paste the verse and crops.

✓ And it damages the pastures and crops.

The phrase 'Paste the verse' is incorrect; it should be 'pastures'. The sentence is corrected for clarity.

× No, I don't like to go to the cities which have the different Wizards. Play from where I lived becauses the suddenly change of the temperature or Wizards stressed my view, stress my body and health.

✓ No, I don't like to go to cities which have different weather from where I live because the sudden change of temperature or weather stresses my mind, body, and health.

'Wizards' should be 'weather'. 'Play' is unnecessary. 'Lived' should be 'live' to match present tense. 'Becauses' is misspelled 'because'. 'Suddenly change' should be 'sudden change'. 'Stressed my view' should be 'stresses my mind'. The sentence is corrected for grammar and clarity.