Weather— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more natural and clear by using correct grammar and sentence structure. Avoid redundancy and focus on directly answering the question with a clear topic sentence, followed by specific supporting details. For example, explain why you like cloudy weather and how it affects your activities, using linking words to connect ideas.

例: I enjoy cloudy weather because it is neither too hot nor too cold. In such weather, I like to take photographs since the soft light makes the pictures look natural and beautiful.

提案: Focus on clear and grammatically correct sentences. Start with a direct answer, then provide specific reasons with linking words. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases. For example, explain why hot weather is better for your activities and contrast it with cold weather limitations.

例: I prefer hot weather because it allows me to enjoy both indoor and outdoor activities like swimming and climbing. In contrast, cold weather often forces me to stay indoors due to fog or mist, limiting my options.

提案: Improve clarity by using correct vocabulary and sentence structure. Begin with a clear preference, then give specific examples and reasons using linking words. Avoid unclear or incorrect words like 'drive either' or 'miss marries'.

例: I prefer dry weather because it is more comfortable for activities like climbing. Wet weather makes surfaces slippery and uncomfortable, which limits what I can do.

提案: Make your answer more coherent and grammatically correct. Start with a clear statement about your habit, then explain when and why you check the forecast, using linking words. Avoid incomplete or confusing sentences.

例: I usually check the weather forecast whenever I plan to go out with my friends. This helps me avoid bad weather and enjoy our day to the fullest.

提案: Provide a clearer and more detailed answer with correct grammar. Start with your observation, then explain the cause using linking words. Use specific vocabulary related to climate change.

例: I have noticed that recent years are not as hot as before, which some people say is due to the greenhouse effect. This effect contributes to climate change by trapping heat in the atmosphere.

提案: Answer more clearly and fluently by using correct grammar and linking words. Start with a direct answer, then give a specific example and explain your feelings about the experience.

例: Yes, I like to visit cities with different climates, especially in summer. For example, I visited Shimla last week to enjoy its cool and refreshing atmosphere, which was a wonderful experience.

× I like a cloudy weather, neither there too much hot or cold.

✓ I like cloudy weather; it is neither too hot nor too cold.

The article 'a' is incorrectly used with the uncountable noun 'weather'. Also, 'neither there too much hot or cold' is grammatically incorrect; it should be 'neither too hot nor too cold' to properly express the contrast.

× Well in such weather I mainly preferred to clicking on pictures because since the picture are since the photograph was very beautiful and natural because the light was was dim.

✓ Well, in such weather I mainly prefer clicking on pictures because the photographs are very beautiful and natural since the light is dim.

The verb 'prefer' should be followed by the gerund form 'clicking' without 'to'. Also, tense consistency is needed: 'preferred' changed to 'prefer' to match present tense, and 'picture are since the photograph was' is corrected to 'photographs are' for clarity and agreement.

× because since the picture are since the photograph was very beautiful and natural because the light was was dim.

✓ because the photographs are very beautiful and natural since the light is dim.

The singular 'picture' and 'photograph' are mixed incorrectly; plural 'photographs' is appropriate here. Also, 'was was' is a repetition error and 'light was' should be 'light is' to maintain present tense.

× Of course I prefer are hot weather because in such weather I can do any type of indoor or outdoor activities like swimming claiming because since enough cold weather we sometimes we have to stock in a home home due to a mist or fog outside and any type of activities we can't do weather in a horde whether we can also spend our our daily. Spell.

✓ Of course, I prefer hot weather because in such weather I can do any type of indoor or outdoor activities like swimming and climbing. In cold weather, sometimes we have to stay at home due to mist or fog outside, and we can't do any activities. In hot weather, we can also spend our daily time well.

The sentence contains multiple errors: 'are hot weather' should be 'hot weather' (no 'are'), 'claiming' is a misspelling of 'climbing', 'stock in a home home' should be 'stay at home', and the sentence structure is confusing. Pronouns and words like 'weather in a horde whether' are incorrect and replaced with clearer expressions.

× Of course I prefer drive either because in such weather I can do any type of activity like indoor or outdoor for instance.

✓ Of course, I prefer dry weather because in such weather I can do any type of activity, indoor or outdoor, for instance.

'Drive' is a misspelling of 'dry'. Also, 'prefer dry either' is incorrect; it should be 'prefer dry weather'. The preposition 'like' is better replaced with 'for instance' after a comma for clarity.

× We mean climbing, but in that weathers I did not feel account for tables and there was a some miss marries which make me uncomfortable.

✓ I mean climbing, but in that weather I did not feel comfortable, and there was some mist and mosquitoes which made me uncomfortable.

'We mean' should be 'I mean' to refer to the speaker. 'Weathers' should be singular 'weather'. 'Did not feel account for tables' is incorrect and replaced with 'did not feel comfortable'. 'Miss marries' is a mishearing or misspelling of 'mist and mosquitoes'.

× Well, whenever I had made a plan with my friends to go outside for doing any type of enjoyments, I mainly preferred to checking or weather forecast be 'cause since I did not want that the bad weather.

✓ Well, whenever I make plans with my friends to go outside for any type of enjoyment, I mainly prefer to check the weather forecast because I do not want bad weather.

The past perfect 'had made' is changed to simple present 'make' to match habitual action. 'Preferred to checking' is incorrect; it should be 'prefer to check'. 'Be 'cause since' is redundant; 'because' suffices. 'Did not want that the bad weather' is corrected to 'do not want bad weather'.

× Ryan my are beautiful day. Hi Will I usually don't I usually did and prayerful into checking the weather forecast when I.

✓ I want my day to be beautiful. I usually don't, but I usually do and am careful to check the weather forecast when I plan activities.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'Ryan my are beautiful day' is nonsensical and replaced with a clear expression. 'I usually don't I usually did and prayerful into checking' is corrected to a coherent statement about checking the weather forecast.

× Well, in my life I had observed that nowadays there are not too much hold as compared to the previous years and it was saying it was because of greenhouse effects that had mainly make a work climate change as compared to the previous year.

✓ Well, in my life I have observed that nowadays there is not too much cold compared to previous years, and it is said that this is because of the greenhouse effect, which mainly causes climate change compared to previous years.

The past perfect 'had observed' is changed to present perfect 'have observed' for recent experience. 'Hold' is a misspelling of 'cold'. 'It was saying' is incorrect; 'it is said' is appropriate. 'Had mainly make a work climate change' is corrected to 'mainly causes climate change'.

× He of course during the summer season I prefer 2 visited in at different places in order to experience our new climate.

✓ Of course, during the summer season I prefer to visit different places in order to experience new climates.

'Prefer 2 visited in at' is incorrect; it should be 'prefer to visit'. 'Our new climate' is changed to 'new climates' to match the context of different places.

× For example in Shimla last week I have visited there.

✓ For example, I visited Shimla last week.

The present perfect 'have visited' is changed to simple past 'visited' because a specific time 'last week' is mentioned. 'I have visited there' is awkward; 'I visited Shimla' is clearer.

× They are to enjoy their beautiful atmospheres and it make me or feel refreshing and I really enjoy such a precious atmosphere.

✓ I went to enjoy the beautiful atmosphere, and it made me feel refreshed. I really enjoyed such a precious atmosphere.

'They are to enjoy their beautiful atmospheres' is unclear and replaced with 'I went to enjoy the beautiful atmosphere'. 'It make me or feel refreshing' is corrected to 'it made me feel refreshed'. Verb tenses are adjusted for past events.