Weather— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally relevant but has some grammatical errors and incomplete sentences. Try to keep your response clear and complete within 5 sentences, avoid repetition, and ensure smooth flow. Use linking words like 'however' correctly and avoid sentence fragments.

例: I live in Solapur, where the weather is mostly hot and dry, especially during the summer when the sun is scorching. However, during the monsoon season, we experience significant rainfall, which cools the temperature down. Overall, the climate is quite extreme but manageable.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but contains grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing. Try to form complete sentences and use appropriate vocabulary. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: I prefer cold weather because I have spent most of the year in hot climates, which makes it difficult to go outside during the day. Due to the extreme heat and strong sunlight, cold weather feels more pleasant and comfortable to me, allowing me to enjoy outdoor activities more.

提案: Your answer has several grammatical errors and unclear phrases. Focus on clear sentence structure and correct word choice. Use linking words to connect your ideas and avoid redundancy.

例: I prefer dry and cool weather because it allows me to go outside comfortably. During the day, I enjoy playing sports with my friends and doing other outdoor activities, especially on holidays. This kind of weather makes it easier to have a good time without feeling too hot or uncomfortable.

提案: Your answer is relevant but has punctuation and sentence structure issues. Try to combine short sentences for better flow and clarity. Also, avoid unnecessary pauses and ensure your answer is complete.

例: I don't usually check the weather forecast on my mobile phone, but during the rainy season, I make it a point to check daily. This helps me decide what to wear and whether to carry an umbrella, so I can do my work more conveniently and with less stress.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and unclear. Try to complete your sentences and provide specific examples. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically and avoid fragmented sentences.

例: One of the biggest effects of climate change is the alteration of seasonal weather patterns. For instance, during the rainy season, there has been an increase in hot weather and intense summers. Additionally, summers have become hotter and more unpredictable.

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains unclear phrases and repetition. Try to express your ideas clearly and avoid repeating words. Use linking words to make your answer coherent.

例: Yes, I would like to visit other cities with different climates to experience various types of weather and seasonal patterns. Currently, I am living in a place where the climate is colder than my hometown, which I enjoy.

× However, we we also experienced a significant amount of rainfall during the monsoon season, which helps cool things down a bit.

✓ However, we also experience a significant amount of rainfall during the monsoon season, which helps cool things down a bit.

The sentence mixes past tense 'experienced' with present context indicated by 'helps'. Since the sentence describes a habitual event, present tense 'experience' is appropriate to maintain consistency.

× Overall. The climate can be quite.

✓ Overall, the climate can be quite hot.

The original sentence is incomplete and fragmented. It lacks a complete thought after 'quite'. Adding 'hot' completes the sentence and clarifies the meaning.

× I prefer cold weather because I have spent most of the time of the year in.

✓ I prefer cold weather because I have spent most of the time of the year in hot climates.

The sentence ends abruptly and is incomplete. Adding 'hot climates' completes the thought and clarifies the reason for preference.

× cold weather feels more please and convertible to me and I enjoy outdoor activities more.

✓ cold weather feels more pleasant and comfortable to me and I enjoy outdoor activities more.

The words 'please' and 'convertible' are incorrect in this context. The correct adjectives are 'pleasant' and 'comfortable' to express the intended meaning.

× I prefer dry and cool weather come becauses it allows me to go outside convertible.

✓ I prefer dry and cool weather because it allows me to go outside comfortably.

The phrase 'come becauses' is incorrect; it should be 'because'. Also, 'convertible' is incorrect here; the correct adverb is 'comfortably' to describe going outside.

× During the day. I enjoy playing sports with my friends an do doing other outdoor activities, especially on holidays.

✓ During the day, I enjoy playing sports with my friends and doing other outdoor activities, especially on holidays.

The original sentence has punctuation errors and a typo 'an do doing'. Correcting punctuation and replacing 'an do doing' with 'and doing' improves clarity and grammar.

× This kind of weather makes me easier to have good time without feeling too hot or unconfortable.

✓ This kind of weather makes it easier for me to have a good time without feeling too hot or uncomfortable.

The phrase 'makes me easier' is incorrect; it should be 'makes it easier for me'. Also, 'unconfortable' is a misspelling; correct spelling is 'uncomfortable'.

× I don't usually check the weather. Forecast on my mobile phone, but during the rainy season I make the point to check daily.

✓ I don't usually check the weather forecast on my mobile phone, but during the rainy season I make a point to check daily.

The phrase 'make the point' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'make a point'. Also, 'weather. Forecast' should be 'weather forecast' without a period.

× It helps me decide what to wear and whether I want to carry my umbrella with me to. Do my work more conveniently and less stress.

✓ It helps me decide what to wear and whether I want to carry my umbrella with me to do my work more conveniently and with less stress.

The sentence is fragmented and incorrectly capitalized. Combining the parts and correcting capitalization improves sentence flow and clarity.

× One of the biggest effects of climate change is alternation of seasonal weather patterns.

✓ One of the biggest effects of climate change is the alteration of seasonal weather patterns.

The word 'alternation' is incorrect here; the correct noun is 'alteration' meaning change. Also, 'the' is needed before 'alteration' for proper grammar.

× For instance, during the rainy season, there has been increasing certain. Hot Weathers answered. And intense. Summers Additionally in summers there has sudden increase in.

✓ For instance, during the rainy season, there has been an increase in certain hot weather patterns and intense summers. Additionally, in summers there has been a sudden increase in temperature.

The original sentences are fragmented and contain incorrect words like 'certain. Hot Weathers answered.' which is nonsensical. Correcting to coherent sentences with proper nouns and articles improves clarity.

× Yes, I like to visit other cities with different climates where I can enjoy different types of climate and seasonal patterns.

✓ Yes, I would like to visit other cities with different climates where I can enjoy different types of climate and seasonal patterns.

The sentence lacks the modal verb 'would' to express a polite or hypothetical desire, which is appropriate in this context.

× Currently want currently in the pony where I am living is like the climate because it is colder than my hometown.

✓ Currently, the place where I am living has a climate I like because it is colder than my hometown.

The original sentence is fragmented and contains unclear phrases like 'want currently in the pony'. Rewriting for clarity and correct structure is necessary.