Weather— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear but can be more natural and concise. Avoid starting with filler words like 'OK' and try to combine sentences for better flow. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: The weather where I live is moderate, neither too hot nor too cold, mainly because the city is situated at a higher altitude.

提案: Your answer is fragmented and lacks coherence. Try to form complete sentences and use linking words to connect your ideas. Also, avoid repetition and clarify your preferences clearly.

例: I don't prefer extreme cold or hot weather. During my childhood, I lived in a hot and humid city, but now I live in a place with a moderate climate, which I find more comfortable.

提案: Your answer conveys your preference but is broken into short, choppy sentences. Try to combine sentences and use linking words to make your response more natural and fluent.

例: I prefer dry weather because it doesn't make me feel uncomfortable or sweaty. When I sweat, I often feel tired and exhausted, so dry weather suits me better.

提案: Your answer is understandable but fragmented. Use complete sentences and linking words to improve coherence. Also, clarify the frequency and reason more smoothly.

例: I check the weather forecast every day before traveling to my office by public transport because it often rains here, and I need to be prepared.

提案: Your answer lacks clarity and has grammatical errors. Try to express your ideas in complete sentences with clear reasons and examples. Use linking words to connect your points logically.

例: Climate change has had adverse effects in recent years, mainly due to deforestation and loss of biodiversity. I believe this has significantly impacted our lives, and therefore, reforestation is necessary.

提案: Your answer is positive but can be more fluent and natural. Avoid unnecessary pauses and use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I would love to visit cities with different climates. Recently, I visited a city that was extremely cold compared to where I live, and I really enjoyed staying there for a while.

× And the city that we live is at a higher altitude.

✓ And the city where we live is at a higher altitude.

The pronoun 'that' is incorrectly used to refer to a place. The correct relative pronoun for places is 'where'. Hence, 'the city where we live' is correct.

× Extreme cold weather's.

✓ Extreme cold weather.

The phrase 'weather's' is incorrect because 'weather' is an uncountable noun and should not be pluralized or possessive here. The correct form is 'extreme cold weather'.

× Nor extreme hot weathers.

✓ Nor extreme hot weather.

Similar to the previous sentence, 'weather' is uncountable and should not be pluralized. The correct phrase is 'extreme hot weather'.

× In my childhood, I used to live.

✓ In my childhood, I used to live there.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks an object or place. Adding 'there' completes the sentence and clarifies the meaning.

× Where the city was.

✓ Where the city was more hot and humid.

This fragment is incomplete and should be combined with the next sentence to form a complete thought.

× More hot and humid.

✓ Hotter and more humid.

The comparative form 'hotter' should be used instead of 'more hot' for correct adjective comparison. Also, 'more humid' is correct.

× An the in the place where I'm living now.

✓ And the place where I'm living now.

'An' is a typo and should be corrected to 'And' to properly connect the sentence.

× Does not fall under any of the categories.

✓ It does not fall under any of the categories.

The sentence lacks a subject. Adding 'It' makes the sentence complete and grammatically correct.

× It has a very moderate climb.

✓ It has a very moderate climate.

The word 'climb' is incorrect in this context; the intended word is 'climate'.

× Because. It doesn't make me. Feel uncomfortable and it doesn't sweat.

✓ Because it doesn't make me feel uncomfortable and I don't sweat.

The sentence is fragmented and lacks proper subject-verb agreement. Combining the fragments and correcting the pronoun usage improves clarity.

× When I sweat, I feel very tired and exhausted, hence I prefer dry weather.

✓ When I sweat, I feel very tired and exhausted; hence, I prefer dry weather.

Adding punctuation improves sentence flow and clarity; the pronouns are correct.

× I checked the weather forecast every day as I traveled to my office.

✓ I check the weather forecast every day as I travel to my office.

The question is about habitual action, so present tense is appropriate. Using present tense 'check' and 'travel' reflects habitual behavior.

× Because the place where I'm staying.

✓ Because the place where I'm staying has chances of rain at certain times,

The sentence is incomplete and needs to be connected to the next part for clarity.

× There are chances. Of raining.

✓ There are chances of rain.

The noun form 'rain' should be used after 'chances of' instead of the gerund 'raining'.

× Then I've been adverse effects on the climatic changes in recent years because of.

✓ There have been adverse effects of climate change in recent years because of

The sentence is grammatically incorrect and incomplete. Correcting the subject-verb agreement and sentence structure improves clarity.

× The biodiversity, deforestation and so on, and I feel this has impacted our lives.

✓ Biodiversity loss, deforestation, and so on, and I feel this has impacted our lives.

'The biodiversity' is incorrect; 'biodiversity loss' is the intended meaning. Also, the list should be clear and parallel.

× More and there needs to be a reforestation.

✓ more, and there needs to be reforestation.

The sentence fragment 'More and' is incomplete and should be connected properly with a comma and corrected phrase.

× Yes, certainly I would love to visit the other cities which has.

✓ Yes, certainly I would love to visit other cities which have

'Cities' is plural, so the verb should be 'have' not 'has'. Also, 'the other cities' is better as 'other cities'.

× Different climates and recently I did visit a city which was extremely cold from the one which I live,

✓ different climates, and recently I visited a city which was extremely cold compared to the one where I live,

'Did visit' is less natural than 'visited' here. Also, 'cold from' should be 'cold compared to'. 'Which I live' should be 'where I live'.

× but yet it was very good and I love to stay there for awhile.

✓ but it was very nice, and I loved staying there for a while.

'But yet' is redundant; 'very good' is better as 'very nice'. 'I love to stay' should be past tense 'I loved staying' to match past context. 'Awhile' should be two words 'a while'.