Weather— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to give a clear and concise description of the weather using correct vocabulary and sentence structure. Avoid redundancy and incomplete sentences.

例: The weather where I live is mild during the summer, which makes outdoor activities enjoyable. I especially love watching the sunset in the summer because it is very beautiful.

提案: Your answer lacks clarity and has many incomplete sentences. Use complete sentences and explain your preferences clearly with reasons. Use linking words to connect ideas.

例: I prefer hot weather because I enjoy wearing comfortable and soft clothes. Also, hot weather makes it easier to do outdoor activities, and the sunsets are very beautiful during this time.

提案: Your answer is confusing and contains many errors. Try to express your ideas clearly and use linking words to connect your points logically. Avoid unnecessary repetition and unclear phrases.

例: I prefer dry weather because it is more comfortable for walking, driving, and traveling, especially in a developing country. Wet weather often makes traveling difficult and inconvenient.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and unclear. Provide a direct response to the question with supporting details. Use complete sentences and avoid fragmented phrases.

例: Usually, I don't check the weather forecast because I work outside most of the time. However, in some cases, I do check it to prepare for bad weather.

提案: Your answer has good ideas but is not well organized and contains grammatical errors. Use linking words to connect your ideas and express them clearly with correct grammar.

例: In recent years, climate change has been caused by increased pollution from companies and industries. Additionally, population growth contributes to more pollution, which affects the climate negatively.

提案: Your answer is understandable but contains grammatical mistakes and redundancy. Use complete sentences and avoid repeating the same information. Provide clear reasons for your choice.

例: Yes, I would like to visit Korea because I want to experience playing in the snow. Korea is a popular tourist destination, and I am excited to explore its different climate.

× The weather where I live is milled and it's normal as the summer is 1 but not that hard and it makes the outdoor activities easy an.

✓ The weather where I live is mild and it's normal as the summer is warm but not that hot and it makes outdoor activities easy.

The word 'milled' is incorrect; it should be 'mild' to describe the weather. Also, 'summer is 1' is unclear and likely meant to be 'summer is warm'. 'Hard' is not appropriate to describe weather; 'hot' fits better. 'Easy an' is incorrect; it should be 'easy'. These corrections fix present tense and adjective usage errors.

× I love towards. Sunset in the summer.

✓ I love the sunset in the summer.

The preposition 'towards' is incorrectly used here. The correct phrase is 'I love the sunset'. Removing 'towards' corrects the sentence structure.

× I personally prefer hot weather because I love to wear comfort table an.

✓ I personally prefer hot weather because I love to wear comfortable clothes.

The word 'comfort table an' is a misspelling and incorrect. It should be 'comfortable' to describe clothes. This corrects the adjective usage.

× Soft clothes like. Desert sand source and it makes outdoor easy and the sunset are very good in the 1 weather.

✓ Soft clothes like desert sand colors make being outdoors easy, and the sunsets are very good in this weather.

The sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'Desert sand source' likely means 'desert sand colors'. 'Makes outdoor easy' should be 'make being outdoors easy'. 'Sunset are' should be 'sunsets are'. These corrections improve sentence structure and subject-verb agreement.

× I prefer dry weather because it makes comfort able in walking and driving and traveling anywhere in a developing country.

✓ I prefer dry weather because it makes walking, driving, and traveling comfortable anywhere in a developing country.

'Comfort able' is incorrect; it should be 'comfortable'. Also, the sentence is restructured for clarity and correct adjective use.

× Ann Usually when it's dry it makes easy an convertible and fast an As for the wait, it makes unconvertible photos to travel.

✓ Usually, when it's dry, it makes travel easy, convenient, and fast. As for the wet weather, it makes traveling difficult.

The original sentence is unclear and contains many errors. 'Convertible' is incorrect; 'convenient' is appropriate. 'Wait' should be 'wet'. 'Unconvertible photos to travel' is nonsensical and corrected to 'makes traveling difficult'. This improves sentence clarity and corrects vocabulary.

× Usually I don't. Check the weather forecast because I'm usually outside working an.

✓ Usually, I don't check the weather forecast because I'm usually working outside.

The sentence is fragmented with unnecessary periods and 'working an' is incorrect. Correcting punctuation and word order improves clarity.

× Yeah, burn some cases I used to take.

✓ Yes, in some cases, I used to take it.

'Burn' is incorrect; likely meant 'in'. The sentence is incomplete and unclear. Adding 'it' clarifies the object. Correcting past tense usage and sentence completeness improves understanding.

× The effect of climate in recent years is pollution an as different companies and industries are getting opening and there's more population growth is.

✓ The effects of climate change in recent years include pollution, as different companies and industries are opening, and there is more population growth.

'Effect' should be plural 'effects' to match the context. 'Getting opening' is incorrect; 'are opening' is correct. 'There's more population growth is' is redundant; 'there is more population growth' suffices. These corrections fix singular/plural and sentence structure errors.

× Creating more pollution and is creating. The climate change.

✓ This creates more pollution and causes climate change.

The original sentence fragments and misuses verb forms. Using present tense verbs 'creates' and 'causes' corrects the sentence and improves clarity.

× Yes, of course I like to visit Korea as I love to an one to experience playing this snow at it is known as a tourist destination and of course I would love to visit Korea.

✓ Yes, of course I would like to visit Korea because I love to experience playing in the snow. It is known as a tourist destination, and I would love to visit Korea.

The sentence is fragmented and contains unclear phrases like 'love to an one to experience playing this snow at'. Correcting to 'love to experience playing in the snow' and restructuring the sentence improves clarity and grammar.