Weather— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Jawaban Anda kurang jelas dan terdapat kesalahan tata bahasa. Cobalah untuk membuat kalimat yang lebih terstruktur dan gunakan kata penghubung untuk menjelaskan alasan dengan lebih baik.

例: Currently, the weather here is rainy, which makes it difficult for me to go back to my course by bicycle because my clothes always get wet.

提案: Jawaban Anda kurang jelas dan ada kesalahan dalam penggunaan kosakata dan tata bahasa. Cobalah untuk menyatakan preferensi Anda dengan kalimat yang lebih sederhana dan jelas.

例: I prefer cold weather rather than hot weather because hot weather makes me feel uncomfortable and affects my mood negatively.

提案: Jawaban Anda sudah cukup baik namun masih ada kesalahan tata bahasa dan pengucapan. Gunakan kalimat yang lebih lancar dan perbaiki penggunaan kata penghubung.

例: I prefer wet weather because dry weather makes me feel tired and irritable, which negatively affects my mood. For example, I find it hard to concentrate and enjoy outdoor activities when it's dry.

提案: Jawaban Anda kurang terstruktur dan sulit dipahami. Cobalah untuk menjawab dengan kalimat yang lebih jelas dan lengkap, serta hindari pengulangan yang tidak perlu.

例: Honestly, I don't usually check the weather forecast. I prefer to decide what to do based on the weather at the moment. Whether it's rainy or hot, I try to enjoy it.

提案: Jawaban Anda sangat tidak jelas dan banyak kesalahan tata bahasa. Cobalah untuk menjelaskan pendapat Anda dengan kalimat yang lengkap dan terstruktur.

例: Climate change has made things difficult, especially for the agriculture sector in Indonesia, which is very important for the country.

提案: Jawaban Anda cukup baik tetapi ada kesalahan tata bahasa dan kalimat yang kurang jelas. Cobalah untuk membuat kalimat yang lebih terstruktur dan gunakan kosakata yang tepat.

例: Of course, I like to visit other cities because I love traveling. I hope to go abroad someday and experience different seasons, especially snow.

× For now, the weather in here is.

✓ For now, the weather here is.

The phrase 'in here' is incorrect in this context; 'here' alone is sufficient to indicate location. 'There be' issues include incorrect use of 'in here' instead of 'here'.

× That's make me difficult for back to my course because I'm using bicycle and always rainy all off my clothes is wet because of rainy day.

✓ That makes it difficult for me to get back to my course because I use a bicycle and it is always rainy, so all of my clothes get wet because of the rainy days.

The verb 'make' should be 'makes' to agree with the singular subject 'That'. Also, 'I'm using bicycle' should be 'I use a bicycle' for habitual action. 'Always rainy' needs a subject and verb, so 'it is always rainy' is correct. 'All off my clothes is wet' should be 'all of my clothes get wet' to agree in number and tense.

× That's make me difficult for back to my course because I'm using bicycle and always rainy all off my clothes is wet because of rainy day.

✓ That makes it difficult for me to get back to my course because I use a bicycle and it is always rainy, so all of my clothes get wet because of the rainy days.

The phrase 'difficult for back to my course' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'to' after 'difficult' and the verb should be 'get back'. Also, 'because of rainy day' should be 'because of the rainy days'.

× I look I prefer cold then hot weather.

✓ I think I prefer cold weather rather than hot weather.

The phrase 'I look' is incorrect; 'I think' is appropriate. 'Then' should be 'than' for comparison. 'Cold then hot weather' should be 'cold weather rather than hot weather' for clarity.

× When the weather is hot I feel like I have a much of many emotion from my life, like I get away at an that's make me feel.

✓ When the weather is hot, I feel like I have many emotions in my life, like I want to get away and that makes me feel bad.

'A much of many emotion' is incorrect; 'many emotions' is correct. 'I get away at an' is unclear; 'I want to get away' is appropriate. 'That's make me feel' should be 'that makes me feel'.

× Not good.

✓ Not good.

This is a fragment and lacks context; however, as a short response, it is acceptable in spoken language but not grammatically complete.

× I prefer wet weather. Becauses. If a try.

✓ I prefer wet weather because if I try,

'Becauses' is a misspelling of 'because'. 'If a try' should be 'if I try'.

× I I feel tired and irritable which affect my mood negative negatively.

✓ I feel tired and irritable, which affects my mood negatively.

Double 'I' is a repetition error. 'Affect' should be 'affects' to agree with singular subject 'which'. 'Negative' should be 'negatively' as an adverb modifying 'affects'.

× For example, in a dry weather I find it hard to concentrate and enjoy outdoor activities.

✓ For example, in dry weather, I find it hard to concentrate and enjoy outdoor activities.

The article 'a' is unnecessary before 'dry weather' because 'weather' is uncountable here.

× Honestly, no. I don't like to check it, I like to. Suggest what do we do from today?

✓ Honestly, no. I don't like to check it; I prefer to suggest what we do today.

'I like to. Suggest what do we do from today?' is fragmented and incorrect. 'I prefer to suggest what we do today' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× If rainy I will. Enjoy it and if hot I also enjoy it.

✓ If it rains, I will enjoy it, and if it's hot, I also enjoy it.

The sentence lacks subjects and proper verb forms. 'If rainy' should be 'If it rains'. 'I will. Enjoy it' should be 'I will enjoy it'.

× So I never tried to check on my smartphone but wait.

✓ So I never try to check the weather on my smartphone, but wait.

'Tried' is past tense inconsistent with 'never' implying habitual action; 'try' is better. 'Check on my smartphone' should be 'check the weather on my smartphone'.

× The effect of climate change. Is. Difficult. Sure. Ugly culture sector.

✓ The effects of climate change are difficult for the agriculture sector.

The original is fragmented and unclear. 'Effect' should be plural 'effects'. 'Is' should be 'are' to agree with plural subject. 'Ugly culture sector' is unclear; likely intended 'agriculture sector'.

× In my country, Indonesia, agriculture sector is important.

✓ In my country, Indonesia, the agriculture sector is important.

'Agriculture sector' needs the definite article 'the' and is singular, so 'is' is correct.

× L when the comma change. Happen. It makes me feel hard.

✓ When climate change happens, it makes things difficult for me.

The original is fragmented and unclear. 'L when the comma change. Happen.' is incorrect; corrected to 'When climate change happens'.

× Of course. I like to visit other city, I love traveling a lot and I hope someday I can going abroad.

✓ Of course. I like to visit other cities, I love traveling a lot and I hope someday I can go abroad.

'Other city' should be plural 'other cities'. 'I can going' should be 'I can go'.

× And now about the season. There is five season in another country and I really want to fill how to How about snow?

✓ And now about the seasons. There are five seasons in another country and I really want to feel how it is. How about snow?

'There is five season' should be 'There are five seasons' to agree in number. 'Fill how to' is incorrect; 'feel how it is' is appropriate.