Weather— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答表达了天气变化多端的特点，但语法和用词不够准确，影响了表达的清晰度。建议简化句子结构，注意时态和单词拼写，避免重复和冗长。

例: The weather in Beijing is very changeable, especially in summer. Sometimes it gets very hot, but when it rains, the temperature drops quickly like a roller coaster.

提案: 回答中表达了偏好，但句子结构混乱，部分表达不清晰。建议使用连贯的句子，明确表达原因，并避免重复。

例: I prefer hot weather because I don't like freezing temperatures. Also, I enjoy wearing beautiful clothes, which is easier in warm weather.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清，影响理解。建议简化句子，注意主谓一致和时态，清晰表达观点和原因。

例: I prefer dry weather because wet weather makes me uncomfortable. In my hometown, it is often wet and hot, so when I go outside, I get soaked and feel very uncomfortable.

提案: 回答中有数字“10”无意义，句子结构混乱，表达不够自然。建议去除无关内容，使用连贯句子说明习惯和原因。

例: Yes, I check the weather forecast every day on my mobile phone using an app. This helps me prepare, especially when it is going to rain, so I remember to bring an umbrella.

提案: 回答中有多处语法和拼写错误，表达不清晰。建议使用简单句子，准确表达观点和具体影响。

例: I think global warming has caused many changes and damages worldwide. For example, some forests have caught fire, which is harmful to us.

提案: 回答表达了愿望，但句子重复且结构不够清晰。建议简化句子，避免重复，明确表达计划和理由。

例: Yes, I would like to visit cities with different climates to experience them. In the future, I want to travel to such places several times with my best friends or family for holidays.

× Where I live in Beijing on I guess the weather is so changeable's an especially in the summer sometime the temperatures might be very hot.

✓ Where I live in Beijing, I guess the weather is very changeable, especially in the summer. Sometimes the temperatures can be very hot.

句子结构混乱，缺少必要的标点和连词，导致表达不清晰。建议分句表达，使用逗号和连词使句子通顺。

× And however, if there is a ring, the temperatures will drop start knees just like the roller coaster.

✓ However, if there is rain, the temperatures will drop sharply, just like a roller coaster.

“And however”重复使用连接词，且“ring”应为“rain”，“start knees”应为“sharply”，表达不准确。建议使用单一连接词，纠正拼写错误。

× I prefer the hot weather.

✓ I prefer hot weather.

“hot weather”作为不可数名词，不需要加定冠词“the”。建议去掉“the”。

× Firstly I don't like those freezing temperatures and besides I like to dress.

✓ Firstly, I don't like freezing temperatures, and besides, I like to dress up.

缺少逗号分隔句子，且“dress”后应加“up”表示穿衣打扮。建议添加逗号和适当短语。

× Dress in some beautiful clothes is like my dressing in the customer and is so beautiful and I love this weather.

✓ Dressing in some beautiful clothes is like dressing up, and it is so beautiful. I love this weather.

句子中“my dressing in the customer”表达不清，代词使用错误。建议简化表达，使用正确的动名词短语。

× I prefer dry weather because I don't like the wet weather In my hometown is more like a wet weather.

✓ I prefer dry weather because I don't like wet weather. In my hometown, the weather is more like wet weather.

“In”应为小写且句子缺少逗号，且“a wet weather”错误，weather为不可数名词不加冠词。建议调整大小写和冠词使用。

× When you go out in a someday you'll find your whole body gets wet and it's so hot the temperatures is so high.

✓ When you go out someday, you'll find your whole body gets wet, and it's so hot; the temperatures are so high.

“a someday”错误，someday为副词不加冠词；“temperatures is”主谓不一致，应为“temperatures are”。建议去掉冠词，调整主谓一致。

× And is I will feel SoCal about.

✓ And I will feel so cold about it.

“is I”错误，且“SoCal”拼写错误，应为“so cold”，缺少宾语“it”。建议纠正拼写和代词使用。

× 10. Yes, of course I will see the weather every day in my mobile phone because I download the apps on my AP on my mobile phone.

✓ Yes, of course I check the weather every day on my mobile phone because I download apps on my phone.

“10.”无意义且多余；“see the weather”表达不准确，应为“check the weather”；“the apps on my AP”表达混乱。建议去除多余数字，使用正确短语。

× Is a good hard way for me, especially when there is a ring.

✓ It is a good and handy way for me, especially when there is rain.

“Is”缺主语，应为“It is”；“hard”应为“handy”；“ring”应为“rain”。建议补充主语，纠正拼写。

× I will remember to bring it with me.

✓ I will remember to bring it with me.

此句无语法错误，符合语境。

× I guess with the global warning, the effects of climate change.

✓ I guess with global warming, the effects of climate change have changed a lot.

“global warning”拼写错误，应为“global warming”；句子不完整，缺谓语。建议纠正拼写并补充谓语。

× Change a lot and is brings to some damage in the world wild.

✓ have changed a lot and have brought some damage to the world wild.

“Change”应为完成时态“have changed”；“is brings”错误，应为“have brought”；“world wild”应为“worldwide”。建议使用正确时态和拼写。

× Such as in somehow Zerelda might gets the forest get fired so is not a good thing for us.

✓ For example, in some areas, wildfires might occur, so it is not a good thing for us.

“somehow Zerelda”拼写错误，应为“some areas”；“gets the forest get fired”表达错误，应为“wildfires might occur”；“so is not”缺主语，应为“so it is not”。建议纠正拼写和句子结构。

× Yes, of course I know that different kind of cities had different climates and I want to experience all the climates and in future I want to I want to go to this place several times with my best friends or families to spend my holiday.

✓ Yes, of course I know that different kinds of cities have different climates, and I want to experience all the climates. In the future, I want to go to these places several times with my best friends or family to spend my holidays.

“different kind”应为复数“different kinds”；“had”时态错误，应为现在时“have”；“families”应为单数“family”；“this place”应为复数“these places”；“holiday”应为复数“holidays”。建议调整名词复数和时态。