Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Говорите более кратко и структурированно: начните с прямого ответа, затем добавьте 1–2 предложения с конкретными деталями. Уберите заполнители («uh», «um») и повторения. Например, скажите сначала «No, I don't write much», затем добавьте причину и пример.

例: No, I don't write much. I usually only write for school when teachers ask us to complete written tasks. I prefer typing or speaking because it's faster and clearer for me.

提案: Дайте чёткий топик-сентенс и конкретный пример. Избегайте неясных фраз («it's cool») и повторов. Объясните причину конкретнее (например, для учебы или практики).

例: I don't write very often, but when I do I prefer writing essays and solving math problems. For essays I practise structuring my ideas, and for math I need paper to work through calculations step by step.

提案: Уточняйте вопрос, если не поняли, и затем давайте развёрнутый ответ. Начните с фразы «If you mean...», затем выскажите мнение и приведите пример. Избегайте разговорных выражений («Not gonna lie»).

例: If you mean whether my opinions change after writing, sometimes yes. When I write an essay I often notice weak points and revise my ideas, so my final version can be different from the first draft.

提案: Начните с короткого ответа, затем приведите 2 чёткие причины с примерами. Избегайте повторов и эмоциональных выражений без объяснения («waste of time» можно уточнить).

例: I prefer typing to handwriting. Typing is faster for me and produces clear text that others can read easily. For example, when I write notes on my laptop I finish faster and can share them with classmates.

提案: Отвечайте прямо и добавляйте одну-две причины с конкретикой. Избегайте обобщений и эмоциональной речи; вместо «waste of time» объясните почему (например, нет пользы или нет привычки).

例: I have never kept a diary. I prefer to reflect in my head rather than write things down because I rarely revisit past notes. For that reason I never developed the habit.

提案: Дайте прямой ответ и затем приведите альтернативы или объяснение. Не ограничивайтесь отрицаниями; скажите, например, что используете напоминания на телефоне или фотографии, либо объясните почему не используете ничего. Уберите эмоции и повторы.

例: I don't record my life in a diary, but I sometimes take photos to remember events. I avoid detailed records because I prefer living in the moment rather than reviewing the past.

× To be honest, not really.

✓ To be honest, not really.

No correction needed; sentence is acceptable as a short response in present tense.

× I write only when people ask me, like in the school when I have to write the answers, uh, while lessons going.

✓ I write only when people ask me, for example at school when I have to write the answers while lessons are going on.

Original phrase 'while lessons going' omits the auxiliary verb 'are' and the particle 'on' required for the present continuous passive description. Use present continuous 'are going on' to show ongoing action. Also 'in the school' should be 'at school' for idiomatic use.

× But uh, myself I don't really prefer to write.

✓ But I myself don't really prefer to write.

Placement of 'myself' is incorrect. Reflexive/emphatic pronoun should follow the subject ('I myself') to emphasize the subject, not precede it.

× I like typing or something like that or talking to a person.

✓ I like typing or talking to a person or doing something similar.

Original uses repeated 'or' and awkward 'something like that'. Reorder and use 'or doing something similar' for parallel structure and clarity.

× As I said before, I don't prefer writing.

✓ As I said before, I don't prefer writing.

Sentence is grammatically acceptable; 'don't prefer writing' correctly expresses present preference.

× I do it only when I'm asked to.

✓ I do it only when I'm asked to.

No article needed; sentence is correct.

× Umm and it's cool.

✓ Well, it's fine.

'Cool' is colloquial; 'fine' fits neutral register. Not strictly grammatical error but style improvement.

× I like to write essays or or solve the math problems and write them on the paper because you can't solve the mass mass problems in your head.

✓ I like to write essays or solve math problems and write them on paper because you can't solve most math problems in your head.

Removed duplicate 'or', changed 'the math problems' to 'math problems' (no article), 'on the paper' to 'on paper' (idiomatic), and corrected 'mass mass' to 'most math'. These are word choice and article issues.

× Not gonna lie, I didn't really understand the question like.

✓ Not gonna lie, I didn't really understand the question.

Removed trailing 'like' which is colloquial filler. Sentence uses past tense 'didn't understand' correctly.

× Like if I write it, maybe I will think more about it and maybe it could change, but I don't really write about daily problems, uh, on something.

✓ If I write it, maybe I will think more about it and my opinion could change, but I don't really write about daily problems on anything.

Replaced 'Like' filler, clarified 'it could change' to 'my opinion could change', and changed 'on something' to 'on anything' for negative context. Tenses are mixed but corrected to future possibility and present habitual.

× I just do it at school and that's all.

✓ I just do it at school, and that's all.

Added comma for clarity; sentence grammatically fine.

× I prefer typing way more than handwriting because I find it a waste of time.

✓ I prefer typing much more than handwriting because I find handwriting a waste of time.

Clarified reference by repeating 'handwriting' as the object of 'find ... a waste of time'. 'Way' is colloquial; 'much' is more neutral.

× I can write, I can type way faster than handwriting and also all people can understand the thing that I typed, not the not my handwriting.

✓ I can type much faster than I can write by hand, and people can understand what I typed, but not my handwriting.

Original had repetition and incorrect comparisons. Reordered for parallelism: 'type faster than I can write by hand'. Replaced 'all people' with 'people' and 'the thing that I typed' with 'what I typed'. Removed duplicate 'not'.

× I have never kept Diaries.

✓ I have never kept a diary.

Use singular 'a diary' or plural 'diaries' with different meaning. 'Kept diaries' is possible but typical phrase is 'kept a diary' (journal). Capitalization removed.

× Maybe I had thoughts to start it, but I'm more of a thinking person.

✓ Maybe I thought about starting one, but I'm more of a reflective person.

'Had thoughts to start it' is awkward; use 'thought about starting one'. 'Thinking person' replaced with 'reflective person' for clarity.

× I don't really like to write it down.

✓ I don't really like to write things down.

'Write it down' implies a specific single item; 'things' matches general meaning. Grammar otherwise fine.

× I think I can solve the problems, keep it in my head.

✓ I think I can solve problems and keep them in my head.

Pronoun agreement: 'problems' plural requires 'them', not 'it'. Also link verbs with 'and'.

× I see Diaries as a waste of time.

✓ I see keeping a diary as a waste of time.

Use gerund phrase 'keeping a diary' to express the activity; capitalization and plural inconsistent. This corrects article and noun form.

× I don't record my life.

✓ I don't record my life.

Acceptable sentence; no change necessary.

× I see that it's, uh, it's keep it keeps you in the past and it's a really bad thing.

✓ I think it keeps you living in the past, and that's a really bad thing.

Original doubled pronouns and wrong verb forms: 'it's keep it keeps' is ungrammatical. Use 'it keeps you living in the past' and simplify. Also 'I see that' changed to 'I think' for naturalness.

× I don't really know.

✓ I don't really know.

Sentence is grammatically correct as a short response.

× I haven't tried it yet, but I don't want to try it.

✓ I haven't tried it yet, and I don't want to try it.

Use 'and' instead of 'but' to reflect continuation of thought; tense usage 'haven't tried' with 'yet' is correct.

× I see it as a waste of time and I don't I never record my life.

✓ I see it as a waste of time, and I never record my life.

Removed duplicated 'I don't I' which is ungrammatical. Use 'and' to connect clauses; present simple 'never record' is appropriate for habitual action.