Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Good start, but you need to make the answer clearer and more natural. In English (Cambodia): “Try to give a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (use singular/plural and verb forms), avoid fillers like ‘umm’, and keep it within 3–4 sentences.” Specifically, say directly whether you write often, give one brief reason, and finish with a short example.

例: I don't write a lot in my free time. However, when I have school assignments I do write essays and reports. For example, I usually write an essay once a week when I have homework.

提案: Your content is relevant but needs clearer structure and better linking. In English (Cambodia): “Start with a topic sentence (what you like to write), then use a linking word (because/for example) and give one specific example and one clear reason. Use plural/singular correctly and avoid repetition.”

例: I like writing essays, especially descriptions of people or places. For example, I enjoy describing my hometown because it helps me practise vocabulary. I also find writing improves my thinking and helps me organise ideas more quickly.

提案: Good idea but reduce repetition and make sentences logical. In English (Cambodia): “Give a direct answer, then explain how and give one or two specific ways change will happen. Use linking words like ‘if’ and ‘as’ to connect ideas.”

例: Yes, I believe my writing will improve if I practise regularly. If I write every week and read more, I will learn new vocabulary and write more fluently. This practice will also help me organise thoughts faster.

提案: Content is understandable but there are grammar and word-choice errors. In English (Cambodia): “Give a clear preference, provide one clear reason, avoid incorrect phrases (‘writing with pain by my hand’). Use correct comparative forms and simple explanations.”

例: I prefer handwriting because I am not very fast at typing. Writing by hand feels quicker for me and helps me think as I write. For example, I finish notes faster when I use a pen and paper.

提案: Answer is confusing and has grammar mistakes. In English (Cambodia): “State frequency clearly (never/rarely/often), then explain exceptions. Use correct verbs and plural forms, and avoid mixing diary with assignment writing.”

例: I don't keep a diary very often. I only write more when I have school assignments, which might be three to five times a week. Otherwise, I rarely write personal diary entries.

提案: Good, clear idea but refine grammar and add one specific example. In English (Cambodia): “Start with the main method, then give a specific example and a brief reason. Use correct adjective/adverb forms and singular/plural forms.”

例: I usually use my smartphone to record my life, mainly by taking photos and short videos. For example, I often film short clips of meals or outings and save them in a gallery. It is quick and convenient because I always carry my phone.

× Not really, I don't write a lot during my free time but if I have to works all assignment assignment like umm writing an essay or something I do.

✓ Not really, I don't write a lot in my free time, but if I have to work on assignments like writing an essay, I do.

The sentence has multiple issues: incorrect verb form 'works' should be 'work' (subject-verb agreement and infinitive after 'have to'), wrong preposition 'during' is better as 'in' for 'free time', repeated word 'assignment assignment', and awkward structure. Suggestion: Use 'work on assignments' for clear collocation, remove repetitions, and split clauses with a comma. ID:27

× I like writing essay for example like describing about a person or a place or things because it helps me develop my writing skill.

✓ I like writing essays, for example describing a person, a place, or things, because it helps me develop my writing skills.

Use plural 'essays' for general activities (quantifier/number), remove unnecessary preposition 'about' after 'describing', and use 'writing skills' plural. Also 'for example' doesn't need 'like'. Suggestion: Use plural nouns for general statements and correct verb noun collocations. ID:11

× Also my thinking skill to make me think more quickly and clearly.

✓ It also improves my thinking skills and helps me think more quickly and clearly.

Fragment lacking clear subject and verb. Replace with complete clause 'It also improves...' Use plural 'skills'. Suggestion: Combine with previous sentence or make it a complete sentence with subject 'It'. ID:12

× I think my writing skill will change if I practice more and gain more experience. Depends on practice more.

✓ I think my writing skills will improve if I practice more and gain more experience. It depends on how much I practice.

Second part 'Depends on practice more' is a sentence fragment and ungrammatical. Use 'It depends on how much I practice.' Also 'writing skills' plural and 'improve' is more natural than 'change'. Suggestion: Avoid fragments; use full subject-verb clauses. ID:26

× It trains me to develop my vocabulary and become a faster thinker.

✓ It helps me develop my vocabulary and become a faster thinker.

'Trains me to develop' is awkward; 'helps me develop' is more natural collocation. Preposition issue minor but choose correct verb collocation. Suggestion: Use common verbs like 'helps' with 'develop'. ID:11

× I would prefer handwriting because I'm not really good at typing on computer or something and I think writing with pain by my hand is more faster and I can save my time during that.

✓ I prefer handwriting because I'm not very good at typing on a computer, and I think writing by hand is faster and saves me time.

'Would prefer' is unnecessary modal here; simple present 'prefer' suits habit. 'Typing on computer' needs article 'a computer'. 'Writing with pain by my hand' is ungrammatical; correct phrase is 'writing by hand'. 'More faster' is a double comparative; use 'faster'. 'I can save my time during that' is awkward; use 'saves me time'. Suggestions: Use correct collocations, articles, and avoid double comparatives. ID:2

× I don't keep a dairy very often, but I do writing five or three time a week depends on my assignments that my teacher gave me that so I have to prepare and writing them for him.

✓ I don't keep a diary very often, but I do write three to five times a week depending on the assignments my teacher gives me, so I have to prepare and write them for him.

Spelling 'dairy' should be 'diary' (word choice). Use 'write' instead of 'writing' after 'do'. Use plural 'times' and correct order 'three to five times'. 'Depends on' should be 'depending on'. Verb tense consistency: 'gives me' present simple for habitual. Remove extra 'that'. Suggestion: Use correct word forms and maintain consistent verb forms. ID:22

× I use my smartphone to record my daily moment such as taking photo or short videos about daily life because it quick and I always use smartphone during my free time so it is the one choice.

✓ I use my smartphone to record daily moments, such as taking photos or short videos of daily life, because it's quick and I always use my smartphone in my free time, so it's my preferred choice.

Use plural 'moments' and 'photos'. 'About daily life' better as 'of daily life'. 'It quick' should be 'it's quick'. Include article 'my smartphone'. 'During my free time' better as 'in my free time'. Suggestion: Pluralize countable nouns and use correct prepositions and contractions. ID:11