Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer the question directly and stay on topic. Avoid irrelevant phrases and incorrect words. Use a clear opening sentence (e.g. "No, I don't write a lot now") and then give one or two concise reasons with correct grammar and word choice.

例: No, I don't write a lot these days. Most things I produce are typed on a computer for tests and assignments, which is faster and easier to edit than handwriting.

提案: Begin with a direct topic sentence and provide specific examples. Correct word choices (e.g. 'reading' vs 'roadshow' unclear) and use linking words like 'for example' or 'because' to explain reasons.

例: I don't write much now, but when I was in elementary school I often kept a diary and wrote stories for class. For example, I recorded my daily thoughts and practised English by writing short stories, which helped me improve my vocabulary.

提案: Provide a clear opinion and support it with specific reasons and a contrast. Use consistent tense and correct plural forms, and fewer repetitions. Include linking words like 'however' and 'because' correctly.

例: Probably yes. My writing will change as my thoughts and priorities shift with age, for example I might write more about career goals. However, some habits will remain the same because I plan to keep a diary to record events I care about.

提案: Answer directly and avoid repetition and incorrect words. Use correct singular/plural and collocations (e.g. 'move sentences', 'make text cleaner'). Provide one or two clear reasons with correct grammar.

例: I prefer typing because it's much easier to edit and organize my ideas on a computer. I can quickly delete or move sentences, and the typed text is neater, which makes it easier for others to read.

提案: Give a concise frequency statement and describe a typical routine with correct vocabulary. Avoid repetitions and choose accurate verbs (e.g. 'reflect on' instead of 'recognize').

例: I keep a diary almost every day, as long as I'm not too tired. Usually I spend about ten minutes before bed reflecting on the day's events and writing them down.

提案: Answer directly and give specific examples of methods and reasons. Correct grammar and word choice (e.g. 'save thoughts and photos' not 'saving... on earth'). Use linking words like 'for example' or 'also'.

例: Mostly I type notes on my phone while commuting because I don't have time to sit and write. For example, I use a notes app to jot quick thoughts and I take photos to record moments I want to remember.

× Actually I don't ride by him anymore because most of the tests I take have switched from paper to computer.

✓ Actually I don't ride by him anymore because most of the tests I take have been switched from paper to computer.

The sentence as written uses 'have switched' which suggests the tests themselves switched subjects performing the action; using the passive 'have been switched' correctly expresses that the tests were changed from paper to computer. Use passive when the focus is on the tests being changed rather than who changed them.

× For example, I now typing all my s s assignments on a laptop, which is faster and easier to edit.

✓ For example, I now type all my assignments on a laptop, which is faster and easier to edit.

The present progressive form 'typing' is incorrectly used without an auxiliary. The simple present 'type' is appropriate for habitual actions. Also remove extraneous characters and duplicate letters to correct the noun 'assignments'.

× I don't write very much now, but I used to when I was at elementary school.

✓ I don't write very much now, but I used to when I was in elementary school.

Use the preposition 'in' with 'school' to indicate being enrolled there in the past. The tense 'used to' correctly indicates a past habit; only the preposition was incorrect (preposition error maps to ID 11 but minimal change here is preposition).

× Back then I kept a diary and roadshow assignment and stories for class because I enjoy recording my thoughts and practicing my English.

✓ Back then I kept a diary and wrote assignments and stories for class because I enjoyed recording my thoughts and practicing my English.

'Roadshow assignment' is likely a mistake for 'wrote assignments'; the past habitual action requires past tense 'wrote' and 'enjoy' should be 'enjoyed' to match past context. Use past tense consistently when referring to past habits.

× Do you think the things you write would change?

✓ Do you think the things you write will change?

When asking about a likely future change, use 'will change' rather than 'would change' to express a real future prediction. 'Would' suggests hypothetical or conditional context which is not intended here.

× Probably yes. My writing would change as I grow and my thought and priorities shift.

✓ Probably yes. My writing will change as I grow and my thoughts and priorities shift.

'Thought' should be plural 'thoughts' to agree with 'priorities' (multiple items). Also use 'will change' for a real future prediction rather than 'would change' which implies conditionality.

× However, many things would stay the same because I always keep a diary and record the things I like and important events each year.

✓ However, many things will stay the same because I always keep a diary and record the things I like and important events each year.

Use 'will stay' for a straightforward future prediction instead of 'would stay'. The rest of the sentence is fine in present habitual tense 'keep' and 'record'.

× I prefer typing because it's much easier to to edit or organize my ideas on a computer.

✓ I prefer typing because it's much easier to edit or organize my ideas on a computer.

There is a duplicated 'to'. When using 'easier' followed by a verb, do not include 'to' after 'easier' when the infinitive is already implied; correct form is 'easier to edit' (one 'to') or simply 'easier to edit'. Here removing the duplicated word fixes the grammar.

× I can quickly delete or move sentence.

✓ I can quickly delete or move sentences.

The noun 'sentence' should be plural 'sentences' to match the general meaning of being able to delete or move any sentence; using plural is more natural. This fixes number agreement (also relates to singular/plural issue ID 1).

× Also, my handwriting isn't very legible, so typing textbook cleaner is easier for others to read.

✓ Also, my handwriting isn't very legible, so typing makes things cleaner and is easier for others to read.

'Typing textbook cleaner' is ungrammatical. We need a verb phrase: 'typing makes things cleaner' or 'typing produces cleaner text.' Adding 'makes things' and 'is easier' creates proper structure and uses correct adjectives/adverbs.

× I would say almost every day, just as as long as I'm not exhausted.

✓ I would say almost every day, as long as I'm not exhausted.

Remove the duplicated 'as' and the unnecessary 'just'. The modal 'would' is acceptable for a tentative statement. The corrected phrase 'as long as' correctly expresses the condition.

× I would have a like a long time before bed so I can recognize all my thoughts of the day into a diary.

✓ I would have a long time before bed so I can record all my thoughts of the day in a diary.

Several issues: remove extraneous 'a like a', change 'recognize' to 'record' which fits the intended meaning, and use the preposition 'in' with 'diary' rather than 'into'. These corrections fix word choice and preposition use.

× Mostly I type on my phone while I'm commuting because I don't have the time to sit down and write.

✓ Mostly I type on my phone while I'm commuting because I don't have time to sit down and write.

The phrase 'the time' is acceptable, but more natural is 'time' without 'the'. The sentence is otherwise correct; small stylistic change recommended.

× My cell phone is a very convenient device to saving thoughts and photos on earth.

✓ My cell phone is a very convenient device for saving thoughts and photos.

Use the gerund 'saving' with the preposition 'for' to express purpose: 'device for saving.' Remove 'on earth' which is unnecessary and informal. This corrects preposition and adjective/adverb usage.