Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is natural and well-structured with clear reasons. To improve, try to use more varied vocabulary and add a linking phrase to enhance coherence.

例: Yes, I write quite a lot because writing makes me happy and helps me express my thoughts freely. Moreover, I often use writing as a way to record my daily experiences and reflect on my routine. It's a relaxing activity that allows me to organize my ideas clearly.

提案: Good use of examples and clear explanation. To improve, try to use linking words to connect your ideas more smoothly and vary your vocabulary.

例: I like to write about my daily experiences because it helps me preserve memorable moments. For instance, when I write about what happened during the day, I can look back later and remember the details more clearly. Additionally, writing allows me to reflect on my feelings and learn from my experiences.

提案: Your answer is clear and well-structured with good use of examples. To improve, you could add a linking phrase to make the contrast more explicit.

例: It depends on what I'm writing. For instance, if I write about my daily experiences, those things cannot be changed because they are based on real events. On the other hand, if I am writing a novel or some imaginative story, the content can be easily changed or edited as it is fiction.

提案: Your answer is natural and includes examples. To improve, try to use more precise vocabulary and add linking words to enhance coherence.

例: I prefer handwriting because it feels more natural and allows me to express my emotions better. For example, when I write by hand, I can add some personal touches like doodles or different types of writing, which makes the process more meaningful.

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant. To improve, avoid repetition and use linking words to connect your ideas more smoothly.

例: I keep a diary about twice a week because I'm usually quite busy and don't have time to write every day. Nevertheless, I really enjoy recording my thoughts and experiences, so I make sure to set aside some time twice a week to write in it.

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains some grammatical errors and could be more concise. To improve, focus on correct grammar and use linking words for coherence.

例: I like to take photos with my phone because they can capture exactly what happened in the moment. Moreover, it's easy to look back at these pictures after a long time and remember special memories. Therefore, taking photos is a simple and effective way for me to record my life.

× I often use writing as a way to record my daily experiences and reflect on my routine.

✓ I often use writing as a way to record my daily experiences and reflect on my routines.

The word 'routine' is countable and usually refers to a set of regular activities. Since the student likely refers to multiple routines or aspects of their daily life, the plural form 'routines' is more appropriate here.

× For example, when I write about what happened during the day, I can look back up later and remember the details more clearly.

✓ For example, when I write about what happened during the day, I can look back later and remember the details more clearly.

The phrase 'look back up' is incorrect. The correct phrasal verb is 'look back,' which means to reflect on past events. The word 'up' is unnecessary and incorrect in this context.

× I prefer handwriting because it feels more natural and allows me to express my emotions better. For example, when I write by hand, I can add some personal touch like doodles or different type of writing which makes the process more meaningful.

✓ I prefer handwriting because it feels more natural and allows me to express my emotions better. For example, when I write by hand, I can add some personal touches like doodles or different types of writing which make the process more meaningful.

The phrase 'some personal touch' should be pluralized to 'some personal touches' because it refers to multiple kinds of additions. Similarly, 'different type of writing' should be 'different types of writing' to correctly indicate variety. Also, the verb 'makes' should be 'make' to agree with the plural subject.

× I like to take photos with my phone because they can capture actually what happened in the moment.

✓ I like to take photos with my phone because they can actually capture what happened in the moment.

The adverb 'actually' is misplaced. It should come before the verb 'capture' to correctly modify it. The original placement after 'capture' is incorrect.

× It also easy to look back at this picture after a long time and remember special memories.

✓ It is also easy to look back at these pictures after a long time and remember special memories.

The sentence is missing the verb 'is' after 'It,' which is necessary for correct sentence structure. Also, 'this picture' should be plural 'these pictures' to agree with the context of multiple photos.