Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不够自然，如“a good scores”应为“good scores”，且句子结构重复，建议简化表达并注意单复数一致。

例: Yes, I write a lot because it helps me remember my daily experiences and emotions clearly. For example, when I get good scores in important exams, I write them down to motivate myself to improve.

提案: 回答中有语法错误，如“enjoying”应为“enjoy”，且“trip to good schools”表达不清，建议使用更准确的词汇和句子结构。

例: I enjoy writing about my daily experiences and emotions because it helps me remember important moments. For instance, after doing well in an important exam, I write about it to encourage myself to perform better.

提案: 回答中句子断裂且重复，表达不够连贯，建议使用连词使句子更流畅，并避免重复。

例: I don't think the things I write will change because I enjoy recording my daily experiences and emotions, which help me remember important moments clearly.

提案: 回答中存在拼写错误（exercise应为experience），重复使用“for example”，句子结构不够自然，建议简化并注意词汇准确性。

例: I prefer handwriting because it helps me remember important moments better. For example, when I get good scores, I write them down to motivate myself.

提案: 回答中“Diaries”不应大写，且“important exams”应为“important exam”，句子重复且有语法错误，建议注意大小写和语法，避免重复。

例: I keep a diary almost every day because writing about my experiences and emotions helps me remember important moments. For example, when I get good scores in an important exam, I write about it to motivate myself to improve.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和拼写错误，如“enjoying”应为“enjoy”，“allows”应为“allow”，“diligent”应为“diligently”，建议注意动词形式和副词使用。

例: I record my life by writing diaries because I enjoy noting my daily experiences and emotions. For example, when I get good scores, I write them down to motivate myself to study more diligently.

× For example, when I get a good scores in the important examination, I will write down the scores and which will encourage me for the better.

✓ For example, when I get good scores in an important examination, I will write down the scores which will encourage me to do better.

这里'scores'是复数，前面的冠词应为复数形式或省略，且'examination'前应使用不定冠词'an'。此外，'which will encourage me for the better'表达不自然，应改为'encourage me to do better'。

× I really enjoying writing down the daily experience and my emotions because it allows me to remember important moments more clearly.

✓ I really enjoy writing down the daily experience and my emotions because it allows me to remember important moments more clearly.

动词'enjoy'后应接动名词形式，'enjoying'是现在分词，句中应使用动词原形'enjoy'。

× For instance, when I trip to good schools in an important examination, I will write down it which can encourage me for the better performances.

✓ For instance, when I take an important examination for good schools, I will write it down which can encourage me to perform better.

'trip'用错，应为'take an examination'。'performances'复数形式不合适，改为单数形式。'write down it'语序错误，应为'write it down'。

× I don't think the things I write will change. For example, I really enjoy writing down the daily experiences and my emotion because it allows me to remember the important moments. Clearly.

✓ I don't think the things I write will change. For example, I really enjoy writing down the daily experiences and my emotions because it allows me to remember the important moments clearly.

'emotion'应为复数形式'emotions'，'clearly'应放在句末修饰整个句子。

× I prefer handwriting when I am writing. For example, I really enjoy in writing down the daily exercise and emotion which can help me to remember the important moments more clearly.

✓ I prefer handwriting when I am writing. For example, I really enjoy writing down the daily experiences and emotions which can help me remember the important moments more clearly.

'enjoy'后不加介词'in'，应直接接动名词。'exercise'应为'experiences'，'emotion'应为复数形式。

× For example, when I have the good scores, I will write down it which can allows me to motivate myself.

✓ For example, when I have good scores, I will write them down which can allow me to motivate myself.

'the good scores'中冠词'the'不合适，应去掉。'write down it'语序错误，应为'write them down'，且'allow'动词应与主语复数一致，去掉's'。

× I keep Diaries nearly every day. I really enjoy writing down my daily experience and emotions which help me to remember the important moments more clearly.

✓ I keep diaries nearly every day. I really enjoy writing down my daily experiences and emotions which help me remember the important moments more clearly.

'Diaries'不应大写。'experience'应为复数形式'experiences'。

× For example, when I get good scores in an important exams, I will write down which can motivate myself to to do better.

✓ For example, when I get good scores in an important exam, I will write them down which can motivate me to do better.

'exams'应为单数'exam'，'write down'后应有宾语，改为'write them down'。'motivate myself'应改为'motivate me'。

× I will write Diaries to record my life and I'm really enjoying writing down the daily experience and emotions which can allows me to remember the important moment more clearly.

✓ I will write diaries to record my life and I really enjoy writing down the daily experiences and emotions which can allow me to remember important moments more clearly.

'Diaries'不应大写。'enjoying'应改为'enjoy'。'experience'和'moment'应为复数形式。'allows'应改为'allow'与复数主语一致。

× For example, when I have a good score, I will write down it which can allows me to motivate myself to do better and study more diligent.

✓ For example, when I have a good score, I will write it down which can allow me to motivate myself to do better and study more diligently.

'write down it'语序错误，应为'write it down'。'allows'应改为'allow'。'diligent'是形容词，应改为副词'diligently'修饰动词'study'。