Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时语法和表达不够自然，句子结构较为简单且有重复。建议简化表达，避免冗余，并注意语法准确性。

例: Yes, I write quite often because I find it easier to remember things and organize my schedule when I write them down. For instance, during group discussions, I always take notes to keep track of tasks.

提案: 表达不够清晰，词汇使用不准确，且有语法错误。建议用更准确的词汇表达观点，并注意句子连贯性。

例: I like to write down useful sentences and vocabulary because it helps me remember them more efficiently. For example, when I come across a helpful phrase, I write it down to study later.

提案: 回答内容重复且表达不够准确，建议用更具体的例子说明，并注意语法时态和单复数。

例: Yes, I think what I write can change because I often make mistakes. For example, I sometimes forget to add punctuation or important words, so I usually revise my writing later.

提案: 表达不流畅且有语法错误，建议简化句子结构，使用更准确的词汇，并避免重复。

例: I prefer handwriting drafts because it helps me remember ideas better and organize my thoughts before typing the final version.

提案: 表达不够自然，句子结构复杂且有语法错误。建议简化表达，注意句子完整性和逻辑性。

例: I don't keep a diary often. Instead, I prefer taking photos or videos to capture moments and share them on social media with my friends and family.

提案: 回答中有重复和语法错误，建议使用更连贯的句子，避免重复，并注意语法准确性。

例: I usually use my camera to capture moments when I go out. Then, I post the pictures on social media to share with my friends and family, which helps me stay connected with them.

× I think is more convenient for me to remember something or list something or manage my schedule.

✓ I think it is more convenient for me to remember something or list something or manage my schedule.

句子中缺少主语“it”，导致结构不完整。英语中“there be”结构或类似表达需要明确主语。

× For example, when I communicate with my group of mates, I always prepare a pen and paper to write something to take up notes and list the tasks.

✓ For example, when I communicate with my group of mates, I always prepare a pen and paper to write something, take notes, and list the tasks.

动词短语“take up notes”不正确，正确表达是“take notes”，且并列动词应保持一致形式。

× I prefer to write some umm senior sentence and the useful vocabularies to help me to remember it because I think which is high efficiency UMM for me to remember many things.

✓ I prefer to write some senior sentences and useful vocabulary to help me remember them because I think it is highly efficient for me to remember many things.

“senior sentence”应为复数形式“senior sentences”，且“vocabularies”通常不可数，改为“vocabulary”。“help me to remember it”中“it”应改为复数“them”。“which is high efficiency”结构错误，应改为“it is highly efficient”。

× For example, when I find a useful sentence, I prefer write down and remember it.

✓ For example, when I find a useful sentence, I prefer to write it down and remember it.

“prefer”后面应接不定式“to write”，且“write down”需要宾语“it”。

× For me, I always miss many things.

✓ For me, I always miss many things.

此句无语法错误，保持原句。

× For example, when I write some sentence I always forgot to add the dots or any words or nouns.

✓ For example, when I write some sentences, I always forget to add the dots or any words or nouns.

“some sentence”应为复数“some sentences”。“forgot”时态应与句子时态一致，改为现在时“forget”。

× Before I writing, I prefer to write a draft on the paper because I think if I write I can remember quickly and have a instruct umm on my mind.

✓ Before I write, I prefer to write a draft on the paper because I think if I write, I can remember quickly and have an instruction in my mind.

“Before I writing”应改为“Before I write”，动词应为原形。冠词“a instruct”应为“an instruction”。

× I think it's better helping me to umm take some create creation.

✓ I think it helps me better to create something.

“helping me to take some create creation”表达不正确，应改为“helps me better to create something”，使表达更自然。

× To be honest, I don't like to write the diary because I prefer to take some video of pictures and remember this moment, then put it on my social medias to share with my friends and families, even my teachers, because I think which is more impressive?

✓ To be honest, I don't like to write a diary because I prefer to take videos or pictures to remember the moment, then put them on my social media to share with my friends and family, even my teachers, because I think it is more impressive.

“write the diary”应为“write a diary”。“take some video of pictures”表达不当，应为“take videos or pictures”。“social medias”应为不可数名词“social media”。“which is more impressive?”应为陈述句“it is more impressive”。

× I prefer use the camera to remember this moment, like when, when I go out, I prefer take off pictures then post it on my social media.

✓ I prefer to use the camera to remember this moment. For example, when I go out, I prefer to take pictures and then post them on my social media.

“prefer use”应为“prefer to use”。“prefer take off pictures”表达错误，应为“prefer to take pictures”。“post it”中的“it”应为复数“them”。

× So to share with my friends and families to let them to comment and the, because I think, which is a high connection, uh, between me and them.

✓ So I share with my friends and family to let them comment because I think it creates a strong connection between me and them.

“to let them to comment”中多余“to”，应为“let them comment”。“which is a high connection”表达不自然，应改为“it creates a strong connection”。“families”应为“family”。