Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer clearer and more natural by correcting grammar and sentence structure. Also, avoid redundancy and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences. For example, start with a clear topic sentence and then add supporting details using linking words.

例: Yes, I write quite a lot these days because I'm preparing for an important test that requires strong writing skills. Therefore, I practise every day by completing essays and short reports to improve my grammar and vocabulary. This daily practice really helps me feel more confident about the exam.

提案: Your answer is good but could be improved by adding linking words and slightly more specific details to make it more coherent and natural. Also, avoid repeating similar ideas.

例: I enjoy keeping a diary every day because it helps me record my daily activities and thoughts. Moreover, in the future, when my memory starts to decline, I will be able to look back and remember important moments from my life.

提案: Focus on improving grammar and clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas logically and avoid awkward phrasing. Keep sentences concise and directly related to the question.

例: Yes, definitely. The things I write tend to change over time because my thoughts and experiences evolve. For example, when I write about past events or current feelings, my perspective might be different in the future, so my writing naturally develops as I grow.

提案: Your answer is clear and natural. To improve, you could add a linking word to connect your ideas smoothly and make the answer slightly more concise.

例: I prefer typing because my handwriting is quite messy. Since I didn't practise writing enough as a kid, I feel a bit embarrassed to show it. Therefore, typing is much faster and neater for me, making it my preferred way to write.

提案: Your answer is well-structured and natural. To improve, you could use a linking word to connect your ideas more smoothly and avoid starting with a conditional phrase.

例: I try to keep a diary regularly because it helps me reflect on my day and remember important events. Additionally, writing in my diary is a good habit that allows me to track my progress and clear my mind before going to bed.

提案: There seems to be a mistake in your answer ('I pray for keeping a diary'). Try to clarify your ideas and correct grammar. Use linking words to connect your points logically and be more specific about other methods you use.

例: Besides keeping a diary, I prefer writing because it allows me to record my thoughts and daily experiences, which makes me feel safe and secure. I avoid using a voice recorder since it could easily be lost, and I'm concerned that my private moments might be exposed.

× Late today I've been writing quite a lot because I'm preparing for an important test from the tasks requires strong writing skills, so I practice every day by completing essays and short a report to improve my grammar and vocabulary.

✓ Lately today I've been writing quite a lot because I'm preparing for an important test; the tasks require strong writing skills, so I practice every day by completing essays and short reports to improve my grammar and vocabulary.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'from the tasks requires' which is grammatically incorrect. It should be 'the tasks require' to match plural subject-verb agreement (Grammar Problem Type 27). Also, 'short a report' is incorrect; it should be 'short reports' to correctly use plural form (Grammar Problem Type 1). The sentence is also improved by splitting into two clauses for clarity.

× Late today I've been writing quite a lot because I'm preparing for an important test from the tasks requires strong writing skills, so I practice every day by completing essays and short a report to improve my grammar and vocabulary.

✓ Lately today I've been writing quite a lot because I'm preparing for an important test; the tasks require strong writing skills, so I practice every day by completing essays and short reports to improve my grammar and vocabulary.

The phrase 'short a report' is incorrect because 'a' is used with singular nouns, but 'reports' is plural. The correct form is 'short reports' to indicate multiple reports. This is a singular and plural issue (Grammar Problem Type 1).

× Late today I've been writing quite a lot because I'm preparing for an important test from the tasks requires strong writing skills, so I practice every day by completing essays and short a report to improve my grammar and vocabulary.

✓ Lately today I've been writing quite a lot because I'm preparing for an important test; the tasks require strong writing skills, so I practice every day by completing essays and short reports to improve my grammar and vocabulary.

The preposition 'from' is incorrectly used before 'the tasks'. The correct preposition or structure is to say 'the tasks require' without 'from'. This is an incorrect use of prepositions (Grammar Problem Type 11).

× I enjoy keeping a diary everyday because it helps me record my daily activities and thoughts.

✓ I enjoy keeping a diary every day because it helps me record my daily activities and thoughts.

The word 'everyday' is an adjective meaning 'commonplace' or 'normal', but the intended meaning here is 'each day', which should be written as two words 'every day'. This is an incorrect use of quantifiers (Grammar Problem Type 14).

× The things are right tend to change over time because my thoughts and experience involve, for example, when I write about past events or current feelings, my perspective might be different in the future, so my writing naturally develops as I grow.

✓ The things I write tend to change over time because my thoughts and experiences evolve; for example, when I write about past events or current feelings, my perspective might be different in the future, so my writing naturally develops as I grow.

'The things are right' is incorrect; it should be 'The things I write' to make sense. Also, 'experience' should be plural 'experiences' to match the plural subject 'thoughts'. The verb 'involve' is incorrect here; it should be 'evolve'. These are singular/plural issues and verb choice errors (Grammar Problem Types 1 and 6).

× The things are right tend to change over time because my thoughts and experience involve, for example, when I write about past events or current feelings, my perspective might be different in the future, so my writing naturally develops as I grow.

✓ The things I write tend to change over time because my thoughts and experiences evolve; for example, when I write about past events or current feelings, my perspective might be different in the future, so my writing naturally develops as I grow.

The phrase 'The things are right' is incorrect because 'are right' does not fit the intended meaning. It should be 'The things I write' using the correct relative pronoun 'I' to refer to the writer. This is an incorrect use of pronouns (Grammar Problem Type 12).

× When I was a kid, I didn't practice writing enough, so I feel a bit embarrassed to show my handwriting.

✓ When I was a kid, I didn't practice writing enough, so I felt a bit embarrassed to show my handwriting.

The sentence mixes past and present tense incorrectly. Since the first clause is in past tense ('was', 'didn't practice'), the second clause should also be in past tense ('felt') to maintain tense consistency. This is a past tense issue (Grammar Problem Type 5).

× I avoid using a voice recorder since it could easily be lost and I'm concerned that my private moment might be exposed.

✓ I avoid using a voice recorder since it could easily be lost and I'm concerned that my private moments might be exposed.

The phrase 'my private moment' should be plural 'moments' to refer to multiple private instances. Also, the modal verb 'might' is correctly used here to express possibility. The main correction is pluralization, but modal verb usage is appropriate. This is a singular and plural issue (Grammar Problem Type 1).