Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more concise and structured. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific details without hesitation or filler words like 'uh' or 'umm'. Also, use correct tense and grammar for clarity.

例: Yes, I write quite a lot. When I was a child, I used to write with pen and paper, but now I mostly write on my laptop because it's more convenient and faster.

提案: Avoid hesitation and filler words. Give a direct answer with a clear opinion and support it with reasons or examples. This will make your response more natural and effective.

例: I mainly write assignments and homework for my university and school. Besides that, I don't usually write much because I prefer other activities in my free time.

提案: Focus on using correct grammar and clearer sentence structure. Avoid repetition and filler words. Use linking words to connect ideas logically.

例: Yes, my writing has changed over time. In the past, it was informal, but now I try to write more professionally. In the future, I expect my writing to become even more polished as I work in a professional environment.

提案: Try to express your preferences clearly and avoid hesitation. Use linking words to compare your thoughts and provide specific reasons.

例: I find it confusing to choose between handwriting and typing. When I want to remember something, I prefer writing it down by hand. However, typing is easier and faster for most tasks.

提案: Use correct grammar and avoid double negatives. Be more concise and clear. Explain your answer with specific details and avoid filler words.

例: I don't usually keep a diary. The last time I had one was during my school days when it was popular to pass diaries around and write messages to friends.

提案: Try to make your sentences more fluent and natural by using linking words and correct prepositions. Also, avoid redundancy and be specific.

例: Instead of writing diaries, I prefer to record my life by uploading photos and videos on Instagram, adding short captions to share my experiences.

× I have been writing since my childhood until now, uh, since many of the methods are changed during my school time, I used to write it umm, in the pen and paper, uh.

✓ I have been writing since my childhood until now. Since many of the methods changed during my school time, I used to write it, umm, with pen and paper.

The phrase 'are changed' is incorrect here; the simple past 'changed' should be used to indicate completed actions in the past. Also, 'in the pen and paper' should be 'with pen and paper' as we use 'with' to indicate the instrument used for writing.

× Yeah, it will definitely changed.

✓ Yeah, it will definitely change.

After the modal verb 'will', the base form of the verb should be used, not the past tense. Therefore, 'changed' should be 'change'.

× By the time I have realized my writing happy, it's had changed and my writing style have changed a lot, uh, from the past days.

✓ By the time I realised my writing habit, it had changed and my writing style had changed a lot from the past days.

The phrase 'have changed' should be 'had changed' to maintain past perfect tense consistency. Also, 'writing happy' seems to be a mishearing or typo and should be 'writing habit'. 'It's had changed' is incorrect; it should be 'it had changed'.

× And in the new future, I would definitely be more professional as I will be working in a professional setting.

✓ And in the near future, I will definitely be more professional as I will be working in a professional setting.

'Would' is conditional and does not fit here; 'will' is appropriate for future certainty. Also, 'new future' is not idiomatic; 'near future' is the correct phrase.

× Uh, well, actually I'm not usually not keeps a diary.

✓ Uh, well, actually I don't usually keep a diary.

The phrase 'I'm not usually not keeps' is incorrect. The correct form is 'I don't usually keep' to express habitual action in the present.

× The last time I used to had a diary was during my uh, school days because umm, at that time we used to have a trend like umm, passing a Diaries and writing something for someone.

✓ The last time I had a diary was during my school days because at that time we used to have a trend of passing diaries and writing something for someone.

'Used to had' is incorrect; it should be 'had'. Also, 'passing a Diaries' is incorrect; it should be 'passing diaries' (plural, no article).

× Rather than writing or making a diary, I prefer to update my photos and videos and Instagram and just to store my life story and with the short captions of those moments.

✓ Rather than writing or keeping a diary, I prefer to update my photos and videos on Instagram to store my life story with short captions of those moments.

The phrase 'making a diary' is incorrect; 'keeping a diary' is the correct collocation. Also, 'update my photos and videos and Instagram' is awkward; it should be 'update my photos and videos on Instagram'. The phrase 'and just to store' is unnecessary and awkward; 'to store' suffices.