Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答不够自然，表达不清晰且有语法错误，建议简化句子结构，直接回答问题，并避免重复。

例: I used to write a lot when I was in school, but now I don't write as often because I use my phone more for communication.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和表达不完整，建议使用连贯的句子，清楚表达写作内容和原因。

例: I like to write about my personal feelings and daily experiences because it helps me reflect and learn from my life.

提案: 回答较为完整，但语法和表达有待改进，建议使用更准确的时态和连接词，使表达更自然流畅。

例: Yes, I believe writing helps me review my thoughts and learn new perspectives, which can change how I understand things.

提案: 回答中有重复和语法错误，建议简洁表达偏好并给出理由，避免冗余。

例: I prefer typing because it is faster and more convenient, although handwriting was common before computers became popular.

提案: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不够清晰，建议使用正确时态并简洁说明原因。

例: I used to keep a diary almost every day at school, but now I rarely do because I am busy and have many distractions.

提案: 回答不完整且表达混乱，建议完整表达记录生活的方法并避免语法错误。

例: Nowadays, I like to take photos and videos, then share them on social media like WeChat to record my life and connect with others.

× I know you already write a lot because writing articles you only happen when I was at school studying and after that I don't write too frequent as the cell phones are more are more popular in recent days.

✓ I knew you already wrote a lot because writing articles only happened when I was at school studying, and after that I didn't write too frequently as cell phones have become more popular in recent days.

这里的时间是过去发生的事情，应该使用过去时态。"know"应改为"knew"，"write"改为"wrote"，"happen"改为"happened"，"don't write"改为"didn't write"，"too frequent"应改为副词形式"too frequently"。

× I know you already write a lot because writing articles you only happen when I was at school studying and after that I don't write too frequent as the cell phones are more are more popular in recent days.

✓ I knew you already wrote a lot because writing articles only happened when I was at school studying, and after that I didn't write too frequently as cell phones have become more popular in recent days.

"too frequent"是形容词，修饰动词时应使用副词形式"too frequently"。

× Most of the time I would like to write my personal emotions and I my daily routine and what I have felt from from our daily life.

✓ Most of the time I would like to write about my personal emotions, my daily routine, and what I have felt from our daily life.

动词"write"后面需要介词"about"来引出写作内容。

× Most of the time I would like to write my personal emotions and I my daily routine and what I have felt from from our daily life.

✓ Most of the time I would like to write about my personal emotions, my daily routine, and what I have felt from our daily life.

"from from"重复，应改为单个"from"。

× Most of the time I would like to write my personal emotions and I my daily routine and what I have felt from from our daily life. In that kind of case I can learn from. 8 when I'm doing the writing.

✓ Most of the time I would like to write about my personal emotions, my daily routine, and what I have felt from our daily life. In that kind of case, I can learn when I'm doing the writing.

句子中"and I my daily routine"结构不完整，应去掉多余的"I"。"I can learn from."句子不完整，去掉"from"。

× Yeah, of course if we don't write down, we wouldn't have the chance to review it and see where we can actually learn from that.

✓ Yeah, of course if we don't write it down, we won't have the chance to review it and see where we can actually learn from that.

条件句中使用真实条件时，主句应使用一般将来时，不能用"wouldn't"，应改为"won't"。

× But if we write it down, that give us a chance to see it in another way as if we are thinking outside the box.

✓ But if we write it down, that gives us a chance to see it in another way, as if we are thinking outside the box.

主语"that"是第三人称单数，谓语动词应加-s，改为"gives"。

× I'd prefer typing nowadays because the computer is really making our life easier and it's more efficient using using this kind of way to write down articles.

✓ I'd prefer typing nowadays because computers are really making our lives easier and it's more efficient to use this kind of method to write articles.

"the computer"泛指电脑，应使用复数"computers"。"life"应改为复数"lives"。"using using"重复，应改为"to use"。

× But in the past when we don't have computers when we usually do the writing and that is also a good way.

✓ But in the past, when we didn't have computers, we usually did the writing, and that was also a good way.

描述过去的情况，动词应使用过去时态，"don't have"改为"didn't have"，"do"改为"did"，"is"改为"was"。

× Well, when I was at school I keep Diaries like almost every day, but nowadays I don't do that.

✓ Well, when I was at school I kept diaries almost every day, but nowadays I don't do that.

描述过去的习惯，动词应使用过去时态，"keep"改为"kept"。

× Maybe it's because I'm getting older and too many things, getting distraught, too many distractions from my daily life or busy doing.

✓ Maybe it's because I'm getting older and there are too many things distracting me, too many distractions from my daily life, or I'm busy doing other things.

"too many things"后缺少谓语，应补充"there are"。句子结构不完整，需调整使表达完整。

× Well, recently we snap pictures or shoot videos and edit it, then post on our WeChat or write notes.

✓ Well, recently we snap pictures or shoot videos and edit them, then post them on our WeChat or write notes.

"edit it"和"post on our WeChat"中"it"应与前面的复数名词一致，改为"them"。

× We use this kind of way to get attractions from other people and that can.

✓ We use this kind of way to get attention from other people, and that works.

"attractions"用错，应为不可数名词"attention"。句子末尾不完整，补充"that works"使句子完整。