Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Tu respuesta es clara pero contiene repeticiones y errores gramaticales que afectan la naturalidad. Intenta evitar repetir palabras y usa estructuras más simples y directas para mejorar la fluidez.

例: I don't write much compared to most people. I usually type on my laptop or phone, and I rarely use pen and paper.

提案: La respuesta es un poco confusa y repetitiva. Trata de estructurar mejor tus ideas y evitar repetir palabras. Además, completa las oraciones para que sean claras y coherentes.

例: I don't enjoy writing much. I usually type emails and develop specifications at work because it's necessary for my job.

提案: Hay muchas pausas y repeticiones que dificultan la comprensión. Practica responder con oraciones completas y claras, evitando muletillas para sonar más natural y seguro.

例: Honestly, I don't think the things I write will change because I work in a company that develops technical specifications, and the industry hasn't changed much recently.

提案: Tu respuesta tiene errores gramaticales y repeticiones. Intenta usar vocabulario adecuado y estructuras correctas para expresar tus ideas con claridad y naturalidad.

例: I prefer typing because I am much faster. I also use apps to help me write more efficiently.

提案: La respuesta es confusa y contiene errores de vocabulario y gramática. Trabaja en usar palabras correctas y en construir oraciones claras y coherentes.

例: I rarely keep a diary, maybe once a year. It's hard for me to maintain the habit and be consistent with writing.

提案: Hay errores gramaticales y repeticiones que afectan la claridad. Practica formar oraciones completas y usa vocabulario adecuado para explicar tus ideas claramente.

例: To record my life and organize my daily activities, I use AI applications like ChatGPT. I record my voice, and the app transcribes and saves it.

× I I try to to type on my computer, on my laptop or on my phone, but I never write down with a pen or pencil.

✓ I try to type on my computer, on my laptop, or on my phone, but I never write with a pen or pencil.

The phrase 'write down with a pen or pencil' is incorrect because 'write down' is typically used for recording information, but here it is unnecessary and awkward. The correct form is 'write with a pen or pencil.' Also, repeated words like 'I I' and 'to to' are errors and should be removed.

× Honestly I don't like to write. I I type or write down by necessity for work or study and when I was at work.

✓ Honestly, I don't like to write. I type or write down out of necessity for work or study, and when I am at work.

The phrase 'write down by necessity' is awkward; 'write down out of necessity' is more natural. Also, tense inconsistency: 'when I was at work' should be 'when I am at work' to match the present context.

× When I am at work I have to write emails and and develop specifications.

✓ When I am at work, I have to write emails and develop specifications.

Repeated word 'and and' is an error and should be corrected. The sentence is otherwise correct in present tense.

× So I I need to type but I.

✓ So I need to type, but I don't always want to.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks a main verb or object after 'but I.' It needs completion to be grammatically correct.

× Umm, honestly, I doubt it. Uh, I, I work in a company with, uh, develop technical specification and the, the industry uh, have, have, uh, not uh, change over the, the past one.

✓ Umm, honestly, I doubt it. I work in a company that develops technical specifications, and the industry has not changed over the past year.

Incorrect verb forms and missing articles: 'develop' should be 'develops' to agree with 'company' (third person singular). 'Specification' should be plural 'specifications.' 'Have' should be 'has' to agree with 'industry.' 'Change' should be 'changed' (past participle) after 'has.' 'Past one' is unclear; 'past year' is more natural.

× I prefer typing to handwriting because I am much faster and I always use AA for develop the the writing.

✓ I prefer typing to handwriting because I am much faster, and I always use AI to develop the writing.

'AA' is likely a typo for 'AI.' 'For develop' is incorrect; it should be 'to develop.' Repeated 'the the' is an error. Also, a comma is needed before 'and' to separate clauses.

× So I I use the the app to to fast the job.

✓ So I use the app to do the job faster.

'To to fast the job' is incorrect. 'Fast' is an adjective/adverb, not a verb. The correct phrase is 'to do the job faster.' Repeated words 'I I' and 'the the' and 'to to' are errors.

× I rarely keep digest, maybe, uh, sometimes a year.

✓ I rarely keep a diary, maybe sometimes once a year.

'Digest' is incorrect here; likely the intended word is 'diary.' Also, 'sometimes a year' is unclear; 'sometimes once a year' is clearer.

× It's difficult to maintain the habit to write a diary. So, uh, you know, and the, the consistency of writing down a Diaries too difficult for me.

✓ It's difficult to maintain the habit of writing a diary. So, you know, the consistency of writing diaries is too difficult for me.

'Habit to write' should be 'habit of writing.' 'Writing down a Diaries' is incorrect; 'diaries' is plural and should not have 'a.' Also, 'too difficult' needs a verb: 'is too difficult.' Repeated 'the the' is an error.

× For record my life and help to ordinate my my day by day.

✓ To record my life and help organize my day-to-day activities.

'For record' should be 'to record.' 'Help to ordinate' is incorrect; 'ordinate' is not commonly used in this context; 'organize' is correct. 'My my' is repeated. 'Day by day' is better expressed as 'day-to-day activities.'

× I use IA applications in particular use ChatGPT.

✓ I use AI applications, in particular ChatGPT.

'IA' is likely a typo for 'AI.' The phrase 'in particular use ChatGPT' is awkward; better is 'in particular ChatGPT.'

× I I record a a voice uh, and then the the application transcript and uh achieve it.

✓ I record a voice message, and then the application transcribes and saves it.

Repeated words 'I I' and 'a a' and 'the the' are errors. 'Application transcript' should be 'application transcribes' (verb). 'Achieve it' is incorrect; likely intended 'archive it' or 'save it.'