Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答不够连贯，存在语法错误和重复表达，建议简化句子结构，避免重复，并确保句子完整。

例: Yes, I write often because I have many ideas and emotions that I need to express and record.

提案: 回答不完整且含有语法错误，建议完整表达观点，避免口头语，并补充原因。

例: I like to write film scripts because I study film directing, and it helps me practice my skills.

提案: 回答较好，但存在重复词汇，建议注意用词准确，避免重复。

例: Yes, I believe my writing changes over time. As I gain experience, my style evolves to include more complex vocabulary and deeper ideas.

提案: 回答不够清晰，存在语法错误和不完整表达，建议简洁明了地说明原因。

例: I prefer typing because it allows me to easily edit and improve my sentences.

提案: 回答不完整且含有语法错误，建议完整表达频率和原因，避免口头语。

例: I keep a diary about three times a week, especially when I experience strong emotions, as it helps me reflect.

提案: 回答较好，但可以更具体，增加细节使内容更丰富。

例: Besides writing, I often take pictures and record videos to capture important moments in my life.

× I must write them down to relieve my to record my.

✓ I must write them down to relieve myself and to record my thoughts.

原句结构混乱，缺少必要的连接词和完整表达，导致句意不清。应补充完整表达，使句子结构合理，意思明确。

× which requires me have.

✓ which requires me to have.

动词require后应接不定式to do，原句缺少to，导致语法错误。

× my writing was simpler simpler,

✓ my writing was simpler,

重复使用simpler是多余的，应删除重复词。

× Or increasing my ID.

✓ or increase my ideas.

句子缺少主语和谓语，且ID可能是误写，应改为ideas，且用动词原形increase连接前句。

× I keep Diaries about, uh, three times a week,

✓ I keep diaries about three times a week,

diaries应小写且不需大写，且逗号位置不当，应去掉逗号使句子更流畅。

× keep diary make makes me keep my.

✓ keeping a diary makes me keep my thoughts.

主语和谓语不一致，且缺少宾语，需改为动名词短语作主语，谓语用单数makes，补充宾语使句意完整。