Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时应避免语法错误和表达不自然的地方，例如“a lot of book”应为“a lot of books”，并且回答应更直接聚焦于写作本身，避免过多偏离主题。

例: Not really. I don't write much because I prefer reading. However, I read many books every day on various topics such as philosophy and psychology.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和冗余，如“Though I don't write often, but if I write”应简化为“Although I don't write often, if I do”。建议使用更连贯的句子并避免重复。

例: Although I don't write often, I enjoy keeping a diary to record my daily activities. It helps me remember what I did and I find it interesting to look back on.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和口语填充词，且表达不够连贯。建议使用更准确的语法结构，避免重复，并用连接词使表达更流畅。

例: Yes, definitely. What I write changes because my daily experiences and emotions vary. Therefore, my writing reflects these changes.

提案: 回答中表达不清晰，“the latter 1”不合适，应直接说“handwriting”。建议避免口语化表达，使用更准确的词汇和句式。

例: I prefer handwriting because typing often distracts me. Writing by hand helps me concentrate better.

提案: 回答中语法错误较多，如“it's bored for me”应为“it's boring for me”。建议使用正确时态和表达，避免重复和语法错误。

例: It depends on my age. When I was in primary school, I kept a diary almost every day because I had many things to share. But now, I don't write diaries often because I find it boring.

提案: 回答较好，但“using camera”应为“using a camera”，且可以增加更多细节使内容更丰富。建议注意冠词使用并丰富内容。

例: I like to use a camera or my mobile phone to record my daily life. Videos and audios can capture moments more vividly and realistically than writing.

× I read a lot of book almost every day and the contents include a variety of topics like the philosophy, psychology and so forth.

✓ I read a lot of books almost every day and the contents include a variety of topics like philosophy, psychology and so forth.

这里的book应该用复数形式books，因为表示很多书。the philosophy和the psychology前的定冠词the不需要，因为这里是泛指学科名称。

× Though I don't write often, but if I write I will love to write something about my daily life.

✓ Though I don't write often, if I do, I would love to write something about my daily life.

句子中同时使用了though和but，造成结构重复，应去掉but。并且if从句中缺少主语和助动词，需补充。

× Like I want to write down a diary.

✓ For example, I want to write a diary.

句子开头用Like不合适，应使用For example或直接表达。write down a diary不符合习惯表达，应为write a diary。

× It can record what I have done every day and I think and it will be interesting when I see it.

✓ It can record what I have done every day, and I think it will be interesting when I see it.

句子中多余的and导致结构混乱，应去掉多余的and，使句子通顺。

× the things you write down depends on the emotions, particularly for me.

✓ the things you write down depend on the emotions, particularly for me.

主语the things是复数，谓语动词depend应使用复数形式depend。

× So to focus on what I am writing, I would love to choose the latter 1.

✓ So to focus on what I am writing, I would love to choose the latter.

句末的数字1多余，应去掉。

× When I was in primary school I always have a lot to talk about, so I kept the diary almost every day.

✓ When I was in primary school I always had a lot to talk about, so I kept the diary almost every day.

描述过去的情况，动词have应使用过去式had。

× But now I don't often write it actually because it's bored for me now.

✓ But now I don't often write it actually because it's boring for me now.

bored是形容人的情绪，boring是形容事物令人感到无聊，这里应使用boring。