Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn cần rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi trước, sau đó giải thích lý do. Ngoài ra, cần chú ý ngữ pháp và từ vựng để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn.

例: Yes, I write quite a lot because I am an introvert. Writing gives me an indirect way to express my feelings and thoughts without speaking.

提案: Bạn nên sử dụng từ vựng chính xác hơn và câu trả lời cần rõ ràng, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp. Hãy giải thích rõ hơn về thể loại bạn thích viết và lý do tại sao bạn thích nó.

例: I like to write life stories because they are simple and relatable. Writing about daily life reminds me to appreciate happiness in small things.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tốt nhưng cần chú ý ngữ pháp và sử dụng liên từ để câu văn mạch lạc hơn. Bạn cũng nên tránh lặp từ và làm câu trả lời ngắn gọn hơn.

例: Yes, my writing changes over time as my experiences and perspectives grow. For example, during important turning points, I reflect deeply, making my writing more thoughtful.

提案: Bạn nên sửa lỗi ngữ pháp và dùng từ chính xác hơn. Câu trả lời nên rõ ràng và tránh lặp từ. Hãy sử dụng liên từ để câu văn trôi chảy hơn.

例: I prefer typing to handwriting because it is faster and more efficient. Since I often make mistakes, typing helps me correct errors quickly and neatly.

提案: Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi và sử dụng từ vựng chính xác. Ngoài ra, chú ý ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn.

例: I rarely keep diaries because my schedule is busy. Instead, I prefer to record important events on my phone or computer.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn cần rõ ràng hơn và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp. Hãy sử dụng liên từ để câu văn mạch lạc và cung cấp thêm chi tiết cụ thể.

例: I also use writing to record my life because I am sensitive and reflect deeply on my experiences. Writing helps me cherish memories and remember them vividly.

× writing give me another indirect way to express my feeling, my thoughts without saying it.

✓ writing gives me another indirect way to express my feelings, my thoughts without saying them.

The verb 'give' should be in the third person singular form 'gives' to agree with the singular subject 'writing'. Also, 'feeling' and 'thoughts' should be plural to match the context, and 'it' should be 'them' to refer to plural 'feelings' and 'thoughts'.

× The style of writing I pursue is Lifeli, it is all about daily story in life which is very reader friendly and it remind me that happiness or just all about simple pleasures.

✓ The style of writing I pursue is Lifeli; it is all about daily stories in life which are very reader-friendly and it reminds me of happiness or just all about simple pleasures.

'story' should be plural 'stories' to match 'daily'. 'reader friendly' should be hyphenated as 'reader-friendly' because it is a compound adjective. 'remind' should be 'reminds' to agree with singular subject 'it'. Also, 'reminds me that happiness' should be 'reminds me of happiness' for correct preposition usage.

× whenever I'm at a important crossroad or turning points, I tend to reflect more deeply so my writing become more thoughtful.

✓ whenever I'm at an important crossroad or turning point, I tend to reflect more deeply so my writing becomes more thoughtful.

The article 'a' should be 'an' before a vowel sound in 'important'. 'turning points' should be singular 'turning point' to match 'a crossroad'. 'become' should be 'becomes' to agree with singular subject 'my writing'.

× I prefer typing to and writing because it is much faster and more efficient.

✓ I prefer typing to writing because it is much faster and more efficient.

The phrase 'typing to and writing' is incorrect; the correct form is 'prefer typing to writing' without 'and'.

× my time schedule doesn't give me the opportunity to keep Diaries.

✓ my schedule doesn't give me the opportunity to keep diaries.

'time schedule' is better as 'schedule'. 'Diaries' should not be capitalized. Also, 'keep diaries' is correct but 'keep a diary' is more common; however, the original plural is acceptable.

× Beside, I prefer to record important events on my phone or computer instead of writing them down.

✓ Besides, I prefer to record important events on my phone or computer instead of writing them down.

'Beside' is incorrect here; the correct word is 'Besides' to mean 'in addition'.

× Writing helped me capture and cherish the memories deeply and allowing me to remember them vividly.

✓ Writing helped me capture and cherish the memories deeply and allowed me to remember them vividly.

The verb 'allowing' should be in past tense 'allowed' to maintain parallel structure with 'helped'.