Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more natural and concise. Avoid repeating the same idea and use correct grammar, such as 'I really enjoy writing' instead of 'I really enjoy to write'. Also, limit your answer to about 3-4 sentences for clarity.

例: Yes, I write quite often, mostly on paper. I enjoy writing because it helps me improve my speed and clarity when working on assignments.

提案: Avoid repeating the same points and improve sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific reasons why you like writing essays.

例: I enjoy writing essays the most because they allow me to express my ideas clearly. Additionally, practicing essays helps me perform better in exams by improving my writing speed and organization.

提案: Clarify your answer and avoid confusing phrases. Use linking words to explain how you revise your writing and be specific about the changes you make.

例: Yes, I often revise my essays by correcting mistakes and adding new vocabulary and adjectives. This process helps improve the quality of my writing over time.

提案: Improve grammar and sentence flow. Use linking words to explain your preference clearly and avoid repetition.

例: I prefer handwriting over typing because it allows me to enjoy the writing process more. Also, practicing handwriting has gradually increased my writing speed.

提案: Make your answer more natural by avoiding repetition and incorrect phrases like 'I really enjoy to keep Diaries'. Be specific about how often and why you keep diaries.

例: I often keep diaries to record my notes and personal experiences at school and home. This habit helps me stay organized and reflect on my daily life.

提案: Answer the question directly without asking the examiner. Use clear sentences and linking words to explain why you use cameras to record life events.

例: I like to use cameras to capture memorable moments and important events because it helps me preserve memories for a long time and store a lot of data easily.

× I really enjoy to write and it really helps me on my papers and increasing my writing speed.

✓ I really enjoy writing and it really helps me with my papers and increases my writing speed.

The verb 'enjoy' should be followed by a gerund (-ing form), not an infinitive. Also, 'helps me on my papers' should be 'helps me with my papers' for correct preposition use, and 'increasing' should be 'increases' to maintain parallel verb structure.

× Well I do like to write essays the most.

✓ Well, I do like writing essays the most.

After 'like', the gerund form 'writing' is preferred over the infinitive 'to write' when expressing general preferences.

× The reason is when I write essays I really enjoy and it really helps me on my exams and increases my writing speed and I also prefer to write essays.

✓ The reason is that when I write essays, I really enjoy it and it really helps me with my exams and increases my writing speed. I also prefer writing essays.

The verb 'enjoy' requires an object or gerund; 'enjoy it' clarifies the meaning. Also, 'helps me on my exams' should be 'helps me with my exams'. 'Prefer to write' is better as 'prefer writing' for consistency.

× Well, when I write a essay I will correct my mistakes in addition of new vocabs as well as adjectives and in results I would change my book writing.

✓ Well, when I write an essay, I will correct my mistakes and add new vocabulary as well as adjectives, and as a result, I would change my writing.

The article 'a' should be 'an' before a vowel sound. 'Vocabs' is informal and incorrect; 'vocabulary' is uncountable and preferred. 'In addition of' should be 'and add'. 'In results' should be 'as a result'. 'Book writing' is unclear; 'my writing' is more appropriate.

× And I also prefer to correct your mistakes.

✓ And I also prefer to correct my mistakes.

The pronoun 'your' is incorrect here because the student is referring to their own mistakes, not the examiner's.

× Well, I believe handwriting is more important than typing because when you you write, you really enjoy and your writing speed gradually increased.

✓ Well, I believe handwriting is more important than typing because when you write, you really enjoy it and your writing speed gradually increases.

The repeated 'you' is a typo and should be corrected. 'Enjoy' needs an object 'it' to be complete. 'Writing speed increased' should be 'increases' to maintain present tense consistency.

× And I also prefer to handwriting other than typing.

✓ And I also prefer handwriting to typing.

The verb 'prefer' is followed by a noun or gerund without 'to' before the noun. The correct structure is 'prefer handwriting to typing'.

× Well, I often keep Diaries when I make notes and my personal data at my school or home.

✓ Well, I often keep diaries when I make notes and record my personal data at school or home.

'Diaries' should not be capitalized. Also, 'keep diaries' is correct but 'personal data' is better expressed as 'record my personal data'. 'At my school' is better as 'at school'.

× It really helps me a lot and I really enjoy to keep Diaries and I also prefer to keep Diaries.

✓ It really helps me a lot and I really enjoy keeping diaries and I also prefer to keep diaries.

After 'enjoy', the gerund form 'keeping' is required, not the infinitive 'to keep'. 'Diaries' should not be capitalized.

× Well, are you open to record my memorable moments and important events on cameras?

✓ Well, I like to record my memorable moments and important events on camera.

The original sentence is a question directed at the examiner, which is inappropriate here. The student should state their own action. Also, 'on cameras' should be 'on camera' or 'with a camera'.

× The reason is it really helps me a lot and and we can store a lot of data for a long time.

✓ The reason is it really helps me a lot and we can store a lot of data for a long time.

There is a repeated conjunction 'and and' which is a typographical error and should be corrected to a single 'and'.