Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ответ содержит грамматические ошибки и неестественные выражения, например, "I quite write a lot" и "even a physics". Следует использовать более естественные конструкции и избегать лишних слов.

例: Yes, I write quite a lot for school, especially in subjects like English, Math, and Physics.

提案: Ответ понятен, но есть небольшие ошибки и паузы, например, "uh". Следует использовать более точные выражения и избегать слов-паразитов.

例: I like to write essays because they help me organize my thoughts clearly and express my opinions on various topics.

提案: В ответе есть грамматические ошибки, например, "I use a simple words". Также стоит использовать связующие слова для логичности и более точные выражения.

例: I believe my writing will change over the years because my experience and skills improve. For example, when I was younger, I used simple words, but now I use a wider range of vocabulary.

提案: Ответ содержит ошибки и нечеткие выражения, например, "both of heat" и "it helps to you for your writing skills". Следует использовать правильные фразы и избегать противоречивых союзов.

例: I think both typing and handwriting are important, but I prefer typing because it is faster and more convenient, especially for long texts. However, I sometimes enjoy handwriting personal notes as it helps improve my writing skills.

提案: Ответ содержит много слов-паразитов и грамматических ошибок, например, "busy nowadays for exams". Следует говорить более связно и избегать лишних слов.

例: I rarely keep a diary because I am busy with exams these days, but sometimes I write in it once or twice a year to record important memories and notes.

提案: Ответ содержит грамматические ошибки и неестественные выражения, например, "it's a excited question" и "like looks". Следует использовать правильные слова и более четкую структуру.

例: This is an exciting question for me because I enjoy photography and making videos. I like to watch them again later, and my friends can watch them too.

× I quite write a lot for my school especially I write in subjects like English, math and even a physics.

✓ I quite write a lot for my school, especially I write in subjects like English, math and even physics.

The preposition 'a' before 'physics' is incorrect because 'physics' is an uncountable noun and does not require an article here. Also, a comma is needed before 'especially' to separate clauses clearly.

× I would like to write essay because it helps to organize your thoughts clearly and it helps to, uh, say your opinion about different topics.

✓ I would like to write essays because it helps to organize your thoughts clearly and it helps to, uh, express your opinion about different topics.

The word 'essay' should be plural 'essays' to match the general statement. Also, 'say your opinion' is better expressed as 'express your opinion' for clarity and correctness.

× I think that it will change because my experience and writing skills will change over years.

✓ I think that it will change because my experience and writing skills will change over the years.

The phrase 'over years' is missing the definite article 'the' to specify the time period. 'Over the years' is the correct expression.

× For example, when I was younger I use a simple words, but now I think I use a lot of vocabulary words.

✓ For example, when I was younger I used simple words, but now I think I use a lot of vocabulary words.

The verb 'use' should be in the past tense 'used' to match the past time reference 'when I was younger'. Also, 'a simple words' is incorrect; 'simple words' without 'a' is correct because 'words' is plural.

× I think both of heat are important, but I prefer typing because is it much faster and more convenient, especially for long text.

✓ I think both of them are important, but I prefer typing because it is much faster and more convenient, especially for long texts.

The pronoun 'heat' is incorrect; it should be 'them' to refer to two things. Also, the sentence structure 'because is it' is incorrect; it should be 'because it is'. 'Long text' should be plural 'long texts' to generalize.

× But however I sometimes enjoy handwriting for personal notes and it helps to you for your writing skills.

✓ However, I sometimes enjoy handwriting for personal notes, and it helps you with your writing skills.

Using both 'But' and 'however' together is redundant; only one is needed. Also, 'helps to you for your writing skills' is incorrect; it should be 'helps you with your writing skills'.

× I rarely keep Diaries because I am busy nowadays for exams, but however sometimes I use uh Diaries uh like once or twice a year for notes and uh important things for memories.

✓ I rarely keep diaries because I am busy nowadays with exams, but sometimes I use diaries like once or twice a year for notes and important things to remember.

'Diaries' should not be capitalized unless at the beginning of a sentence. 'Busy for exams' is incorrect; it should be 'busy with exams'. 'Important things for memories' is better expressed as 'important things to remember'.

× For me it's a excited question because I like to photography and to make videos like looks because I like to rewatch it and and my friends can watch it too.

✓ For me, it's an exciting question because I like photography and making videos because I like to rewatch them and my friends can watch them too.

'A excited' should be 'an exciting' because 'exciting' starts with a vowel sound. 'Like to photography' is incorrect; it should be 'like photography'. 'To make videos like looks' is unclear; corrected to 'making videos'. Also, 'it' should be 'them' to refer to plural 'videos'.