Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ответ должен быть более естественным и структурированным. Избегайте повторений и уточните, что именно вы пишете в школе. Используйте связующие слова для логичности.

例: Yes, I write quite a lot, especially at school. Writing is important for many subjects like math, English, and physics because it helps me understand and remember the material better.

提案: Ответ неясен и содержит грамматические ошибки. Следует четко сформулировать причину, использовать связующие слова и избегать тавтологии.

例: I like to write essays because they help me organize my thoughts clearly. Also, writing essays improves my English skills and allows me to explore different ideas about a topic.

提案: Ответ содержит ошибки и нечеткие выражения. Следует использовать правильную грамматику, более точные слова и связующие выражения для логики.

例: Yes, I believe my writing will change over time as I gain more experience. For example, when I was younger, my writing was simple, but now I try to express my thoughts more clearly and use creative vocabulary.

提案: Ответ хороший, но можно сделать его более связным и естественным, используя больше связующих слов и разнообразную лексику.

例: I think both typing and handwriting are important. Typing is faster and more convenient, especially for long texts. However, I sometimes enjoy handwriting because it looks beautiful and helps improve my fine motor skills.

提案: Ответ содержит много повторов и нечетких выражений. Следует говорить более уверенно, избегать слов-паразитов и структурировать ответ.

例: I rarely keep diaries because I am very busy with my studies and exams. However, sometimes I write in a diary once or twice a year to record important memories.

提案: Ответ содержит грамматические ошибки и нечеткие выражения. Следует использовать правильную грамматику, более точные слова и связующие слова для ясности.

例: This is an exciting question for me because I enjoy photography and video recording. I like to make vlogs to capture memories visually, which I can easily review and share with my friends and family.

× I think yes because I write quite a lot, especially where I am in school.

✓ I think yes because I write quite a lot, especially when I am in school.

The preposition 'where' is incorrectly used to indicate time or condition. The correct preposition is 'when' to refer to the time of being in school.

× writing is a special thing in school because it helps for many of subjects for math, English or even in physics.

✓ writing is a special thing in school because it helps with many subjects like math, English, or even physics.

The preposition 'for' is incorrectly used after 'helps'. The correct preposition is 'with' to indicate assistance. Also, 'of' after 'many' is unnecessary, and 'like' is better than 'for' before listing subjects.

× I would like to write essay because it helps me to organize my thoughts on a topic.

✓ I would like to write essays because it helps me to organize my thoughts on a topic.

The noun 'essay' is countable and should be pluralized as 'essays' when speaking generally.

× It helps you to know other things to think about a general things like you know everything about a topic and you say your thoughts your English lessons for it.

✓ It helps you to know other things to think about general things, like knowing everything about a topic and expressing your thoughts in your English lessons.

The phrase 'a general things' is incorrect because 'things' is plural and should not be preceded by 'a'. Also, the sentence structure is unclear and needs rephrasing for clarity.

× For example when I was younger I write was simple but now I try to express my thoughts over a topic or do clearly and creative vocabulary.

✓ For example, when I was younger, my writing was simple but now I try to express my thoughts on a topic clearly and with creative vocabulary.

The verb 'write' is incorrectly used in present tense instead of past tense 'wrote' or the noun form 'writing'. Also, 'do clearly and creative vocabulary' is incorrect; it should be 'clearly and with creative vocabulary'.

× I try to express my thoughts over a topic or do clearly and creative vocabulary.

✓ I try to express my thoughts on a topic clearly and with creative vocabulary.

The preposition 'over' is incorrect here; the correct preposition is 'on' when referring to a topic.

× typing is much faster and is more convenient, especially for long text.

✓ typing is much faster and more convenient, especially for long texts.

The phrase 'long text' should be plural 'long texts' to refer generally to lengthy written material.

× But I sometimes enjoy handwriting because it's beautiful and it helps you to improve your skills in real life.

✓ But I sometimes enjoy handwriting because it's beautiful and it helps me to improve my skills in real life.

The pronoun 'you' is incorrectly used; it should be 'me' to refer to the speaker.

× For my experience, I rarely keep divers because I am not that person and I find it difficult to mention the habit regularly because of my busy days because I'm a student and I have exams.

✓ In my experience, I rarely keep diaries because I am not that kind of person and I find it difficult to maintain the habit regularly due to my busy days as a student and having exams.

The word 'divers' is a misspelling of 'diaries'. Also, 'mention the habit' is incorrect; 'maintain the habit' is appropriate. 'Because of' is better replaced with 'due to' for clarity.

× But uh, sometimes in a year I can uh, do Diaries for a future.

✓ But sometimes in a year, I can write diaries for the future.

The phrase 'do Diaries for a future' is incorrect. The verb 'write' is appropriate for diaries, and 'for the future' is the correct phrase.

× I am a photography and video recording person.

✓ I am a photography and video recording enthusiast.

The phrase 'photography and video recording person' is awkward. Using 'enthusiast' or 'person who enjoys photography and video recording' is clearer.

× I like to record like vlogs for a future and it's allows memories visually which I can easily release and share with friends and family because it is a very small thing that keep hard lovely.

✓ I like to record vlogs for the future and it allows me to keep memories visually, which I can easily review and share with friends and family because it is a small thing that keeps memories lovely.

The phrase 'like vlogs for a future' is incorrect; 'record vlogs for the future' is correct. 'It's allows' should be 'it allows me to'. 'Release' is incorrect; 'review' is appropriate. The last part is unclear and corrected for clarity and grammar.