Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在重复和语法错误，表达不够自然。建议简化句子结构，避免重复，并使用更地道的表达方式。

例: Yes, I write a lot because it helps me express my feelings clearly and share my thoughts with others effectively.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和重复，表达不够流畅。建议注意动词形式和句子连贯性，使用连接词丰富内容。

例: I like to write a diary about my studies or work because it allows me to express my emotions and helps me relieve stress after a busy day.

提案: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不清晰。建议使用更准确的时态和词汇，避免重复，增强逻辑性。

例: Yes, I think what I write changes daily because every day brings new experiences and feelings.

提案: 表达中有语法和用词错误，句子结构不够自然。建议调整句子结构，使用更准确的词汇和表达。

例: I prefer handwriting because it helps me remember things better and is a good way to relieve stress.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和用词不当，表达不够连贯。建议注意时态一致性和词汇准确性，使用连接词使句子更流畅。

例: It depends on how busy I am that week. For example, during a relaxing week, I might write a diary every day, but when I'm busy, I usually write twice a week.

提案: 回答中存在重复和语法错误，表达不够自然。建议避免重复，使用更地道的表达，并注意句子结构。

例: Besides handwriting, I often make videos to record my life because they are vivid and easy to watch on my phone before I go to sleep.

× I like write a diary about my study or my work because after after studying or working I want to express my emotion about it.

✓ I like writing a diary about my study or my work because after studying or working I want to express my emotion about it.

动词like后面应接动名词形式writing，而不是动词原形write。

× I think writing is a way that I can express my feelings on the paper and it and you can share, you can share with each other effectively.

✓ I think writing is a way that I can express my feelings on paper and you can share with each other effectively.

表达中“on the paper”应为“on paper”，因为这里指的是一般的纸张，不特指某一张纸。

× I think writing is a way that I can express my feelings on the paper and it and you can share, you can share with each other effectively.

✓ I think writing is a way that I can express my feelings on paper and you can share with each other effectively.

句中“it and you can share”重复且多余，应删除“it and”。

× I also write it because I think right can release my stress.

✓ I also write it because I think writing can release my stress.

动词think后面接动词时应使用动名词形式writing，而不是动词原形right。

× I experienced, I experienced the different and all day, so I will change it.

✓ I experienced the difference all day, so I will change it.

experienced是过去式，使用正确，但“the different”应为“the difference”，且“and all day”表达不清，应改为“all day”。

× I prefer writing because I think writing something by your hand you can strengthen your memory about it and also handwriting is a good way to release yourself out of stressful.

✓ I prefer writing because I think writing something by hand can strengthen your memory of it, and also handwriting is a good way to release stress.

“by your hand”应为“by hand”，“memory about it”应为“memory of it”，“release yourself out of stressful”表达错误，应为“release stress”。

× It depends on how busy I'm buying that week.

✓ It depends on how busy I am that week.

“I'm buying”错误，应为“I am”，表示状态而非动作。

× For example, when I was in a relaxing week, I may be write a diary every day because I have enough time to write.

✓ For example, when I was in a relaxing week, I may write a diary every day because I have enough time to write.

“may be write”错误，应为“may write”，情态动词后接动词原形。

× Usually after handwriting, maybe I will make a video to record my life, because I think video has a vivid, vivid method to record my life.

✓ Usually after handwriting, maybe I will make a video to record my life, because I think video is a vivid method to record my life.

“video has a vivid, vivid method”表达重复且错误，应为“video is a vivid method”。