Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Mejora la gramática y la fluidez usando expresiones más naturales y corrigiendo errores, por ejemplo, en lugar de "In the currently period I don't", podrías decir "I don't write much at the moment".

例: I don't write much at the moment because I am very busy with my studies.

提案: Usa una estructura más clara y vocabulario adecuado para expresar tus ideas, además de corregir errores gramaticales. Por ejemplo, en lugar de "transpire to the lecture", podrías decir "convey to the reader" y usar "characters themselves" en plural.

例: I love to write because it allows me to express my creativity and convey emotions to the reader through the characters themselves.

提案: Expande tu respuesta con detalles y usa conectores para que sea más coherente. Por ejemplo, explica por qué el factor de miedo es importante para ti y cómo influye en tu escritura.

例: No, I don't think my writing will change because I always focus on creating a scary atmosphere, which is the main aspect that defines my style.

提案: Mejora la coherencia y la gramática usando conectores y tiempos verbales correctos. Por ejemplo, en lugar de "the typing can interrupt", podrías decir "typing interrupts" y explicar por qué.

例: I prefer handwriting because typing often interrupts the flow of ideas I have in my mind, making it harder to write naturally.

提案: Da una respuesta más completa y natural, explicando con qué frecuencia y por qué. Por ejemplo, en lugar de solo "Not often", podrías decir "I don't keep diaries very often because I usually record my thoughts in other ways."

例: I don't keep diaries very often because I usually record my thoughts through voice notes or social media posts.

提案: Clarifica tu respuesta y usa vocabulario más preciso para explicar los métodos que usas para registrar tu vida. Por ejemplo, podrías mencionar grabaciones, fotos o redes sociales y explicar cómo las usas.

例: I usually record my life by writing anecdotes and tragic stories, and sometimes I use photos or social media to capture important moments.

× In the currently period I don't.

✓ In the current period I don't.

The word 'currently' is an adverb and cannot be used as an adjective to modify 'period'. The correct adjective is 'current'. Use 'current period' to describe the time frame.

× The main reason that I love to write is the whole creativity that we can transpire to the lecture and also to the characters itself.

✓ The main reason that I love to write is the whole creativity that we can convey to the reader and also to the characters themselves.

The verb 'transpire' is incorrectly used; it means 'to happen' or 'to become known', not 'to communicate'. The correct verb is 'convey'. Also, 'lecture' is incorrect in this context; it should be 'reader'. 'Characters' is plural, so the reflexive pronoun should be 'themselves'.

× The main reason that I love to write is the whole creativity that we can transpire to the lecture and also to the characters itself.

✓ The main reason that I love to write is the whole creativity that we can convey to the reader and also to the characters themselves.

The pronoun 'itself' is singular but refers to 'characters', which is plural. The correct reflexive pronoun is 'themselves'.

× Handwriting because the typing can interrupt the whole idea that I had in my mind.

✓ Handwriting because typing can interrupt the whole idea that I have in my mind.

The definite article 'the' before 'typing' is unnecessary when referring to the activity in general. Also, 'had' should be 'have' to match the present context.