Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答较为自然且内容相关，但句子较长且略显重复，建议简化表达，避免冗余，同时注意语法准确性。

例: Yes, I write quite often because it helps me manage stress and calm my emotions when I feel anxious or sad.

提案: 回答内容重复，表达不完整，句子结尾不完整，建议使用完整句子并避免重复表达，同时丰富细节。

例: I usually write about my feelings and share them on social media because it helps me express myself and improves my mood.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清，且有口语填充词，建议减少口语填充词，理清句子结构，表达更清晰。

例: Yes, in the future, if I have more free time, I would like to write a short story about my hotel, which has been my dream since primary school.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和口语填充词，表达不够流畅，建议注意语法准确性，减少口语填充词，并使用连贯的连接词。

例: I prefer typing because there are many useful apps on my phone that allow me to write and edit my work quickly.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和重复词汇，且口语填充词较多，建议简洁表达，注意主谓一致，减少重复和填充词。

例: I keep a diary every night because it helps me record important things and stay focused and productive.

提案: 回答不完整且表达混乱，存在大量口语填充词，建议组织清晰句子，避免重复，表达完整具体。

例: Another way I record my life is by taking pictures, which capture impressive moments that I can easily view on my phone.

× Writing is actually a habit of mine to relieve negative feeling whenever I feel anxious, sad or stressed.

✓ Writing is actually a habit of mine to relieve negative feelings whenever I feel anxious, sad or stressed.

这里的 feeling 是可数名词，表示“感觉”，应使用复数形式 feelings，因为有多种负面情绪。

× I like to write about my feelings and post them on the social media because I think it's a good way to express my feelings and it can lift my spirits and put me in a good.

✓ I like to write about my feelings and post them on social media because I think it's a good way to express my feelings and it can lift my spirits and put me in a good mood.

“on the social media”中，social media 是不可数名词，前面不加定冠词“the”。另外，句尾缺少名词，应该是“put me in a good mood”，表示“让我心情好起来”。

× I have had this dream since I primary school.

✓ I have had this dream since I was in primary school.

“since”后面应接具体时间点或时间段，且表达过去的状态时需要使用过去时态，这里应加上“was in”表示过去的状态。

× I prefer typing when I writing, umm, for some reason.

✓ I prefer typing when I am writing, umm, for some reason.

“I writing”缺少助动词“am”，正确的现在进行时应为“I am writing”。

× Oh, I keep Diaries every night because I think it's a good way to, uh, to write down, uh, some, some important things and it always give me the energy and focus I need to stay productive.

✓ Oh, I keep diaries every night because I think it's a good way to, uh, to write down, uh, some, some important things and it always gives me the energy and focus I need to stay productive.

“Diaries”应小写且为复数形式，且“it always give”主语是单数，谓语动词应加-s，改为“gives”。

× Though it will definitely be, uh, taking a picture, umm picture is a good way to record, umm, impress. Impressive things. Umm, and I can check it on phone directly.

✓ Though it will definitely be, uh, taking a picture. Umm, a picture is a good way to record, umm, impressive things. Umm, and I can check it on my phone directly.

“check it on phone”缺少所有格，应为“on my phone”。另外，句子断句不清，需分句使表达更清晰。