Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear but a bit long and slightly repetitive. Try to make your response more concise and natural by avoiding redundancy and using linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: No, I don't write much because I find it time-consuming and challenging; therefore, I prefer typing or speaking instead.

提案: Your answer has some hesitation and repetition. Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and repeated phrases. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas and be more specific about your writing preferences.

例: I don't enjoy writing unless it's necessary, such as for assignments. Instead, I prefer typing and often post captions on my social media accounts.

提案: Your answer is relevant but ends abruptly and lacks linking words. Try to complete your sentences fully and use connectors to make your ideas flow logically.

例: Yes, I believe my writing will change over time because as I grow older, my perspectives and experiences will evolve, which will influence both my writing style and the topics I choose.

提案: Your answer repeats the preference twice and has a small error ('has me to enhance'). Try to avoid repetition and use correct expressions. Also, use linking words to connect your points.

例: I prefer typing because it is more convenient and time-saving. Moreover, it allows me to edit my text easily and improve my writing using various AI tools and apps.

提案: Your answer has unclear parts ('I really keep uh, Paris') and filler words. Try to clarify your meaning, avoid hesitation, and use linking words to organize your ideas clearly.

例: I rarely keep a diary because I find it difficult to write daily. Instead, I prefer vlogging and using social media to express my thoughts and capture memories.

提案: Your answer is relevant but includes informal expressions like 'yeah' and could be more concise. Try to avoid informal fillers and use linking words to make your answer more coherent.

例: I actively use social media platforms like Facebook, Instagram, and TikTok to share my activities. Whenever I visit new places, I post about them to express my thoughts and experiences.

× I keep posting captions in my social medias.

✓ I keep posting captions on my social media.

The word 'social media' is an uncountable noun and should not be pluralized as 'social medias'. Also, the correct preposition to use with 'posting' is 'on', not 'in'.

× Yes, I think the things I write will surely change over time as I grow older, my perspectives and experience will evolve, influencing my writing styles and topics and also.

✓ Yes, I think the things I write will surely change over time as I grow older; my perspectives and experiences will evolve, influencing my writing styles and topics as well.

The original sentence is a run-on sentence lacking proper punctuation and conjunctions. Adding a semicolon and rephrasing improves clarity and flow. Also, 'experience' should be plural 'experiences' to match 'perspectives'.

× Typing allows me to edit my text whenever I need and it also has me to enhance my writing by using various AIS and apps.

✓ Typing allows me to edit my text whenever I need and it also helps me enhance my writing by using various AIs and apps.

The phrase 'has me to enhance' is incorrect. The correct verb is 'helps' followed by the object pronoun 'me' and the base verb 'enhance'. Also, 'AIS' should be 'AIs' as the plural of AI (Artificial Intelligence).

× I really keep uh, Paris as I find it hard to maintain the habit of writing it daily.

✓ I really keep, uh, a diary as I find it hard to maintain the habit of writing it daily.

The word 'Paris' seems to be a mishearing or typo for 'diary'. Also, 'keep' is used with 'a diary' to indicate maintaining it. The original sentence is unclear and incorrect in context.

× I am active in social media and I like Facebook, Instagram, Tiktoks and I post my activities there.

✓ I am active on social media and I like Facebook, Instagram, TikTok, and I post my activities there.

The correct preposition is 'on' social media, not 'in'. Also, 'TikTok' is singular and the correct name of the platform, not 'Tiktoks'.

× Whenever I go to different places, I post about that place and yeah, I like to express my thoughts and days in my social media.

✓ Whenever I go to different places, I post about those places and, yeah, I like to express my thoughts and days on my social media.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect here; the correct preposition is 'on' when referring to social media platforms. Also, 'that place' should be plural 'those places' to match 'different places'.