Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and could be more concise and natural. Try to avoid repeating the same phrase and use linking words to make your answer coherent. Also, provide a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details.

例: Yes, I write quite often because it is an essential part of my daily life and studies. Writing helps me learn and remember information better, so I make it a habit to write regularly.

提案: Your answer lacks clarity and is somewhat disorganized. Try to structure your response with a clear topic sentence and use linking words to connect your ideas. Avoid filler words and be specific about your reasons.

例: I enjoy writing stories and novels, mainly for personal reasons. Writing helps me relieve stress and express my thoughts, which makes me feel more relaxed and focused.

提案: It's important to answer the question directly. If you don't understand, you can ask for clarification politely, but try to attempt an answer. Also, avoid repeating phrases and be concise.

例: I'm not sure I understand the question fully, but if you mean whether my writing style changes, I think it evolves over time as I gain more experience and ideas.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains some grammatical errors. Try to give a clear preference or explain both options with reasons, using linking words to connect your ideas logically.

例: I prefer both typing and handwriting depending on the situation. For example, I type when I need to write quickly or edit easily, but I handwrite notes during lectures because it helps me remember better.

提案: Your answer is brief and could be improved by providing more explanation. Also, avoid grammatical mistakes and use linking words to make your answer coherent.

例: I don't usually keep a diary because I prefer to remember things in my mind. However, sometimes I jot down important events or thoughts when I feel the need.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains irrelevant information. Try to give a clear and specific response with correct grammar and vocabulary. Avoid unnecessary words or phrases.

例: I usually record my life by taking photos and videos. This way, I can capture important moments and memories easily.

× I write a lot because it's part of my daily life, it's part of my study, and it is very essential for me to write a lot because to learn a lot we need to write a lot.

✓ I write a lot because it's part of my daily life, it's part of my studies, and it is very essential for me to write a lot because to learn a lot we need to write a lot.

The word 'study' should be plural 'studies' here because it refers to the general activity or field of learning, which is countable in this context. Using the plural form is grammatically correct when talking about academic work or subjects collectively.

× I love to write anything like stories, novels, but I keep it personal and because I love to write because I want to, uh, relieve my burdens.

✓ I love to write anything like stories, novels, but I keep it personal because I love to write and I want to, uh, relieve my burdens.

The conjunction 'and' is used incorrectly after 'and because'. The sentence is clearer and grammatically correct by removing the extra 'and' and connecting the ideas properly.

× I want to relieve, get, I want to get relieved from my stress.

✓ I want to relieve, get, I want to get relief from my stress.

The phrase 'get relieved from' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'get relief from' when referring to reducing stress or pain. 'Relieve' is a verb, while 'relief' is the noun needed here.

× I prefer typing and and handwriting.

✓ I prefer typing and handwriting.

There is a repetition of the word 'and' which is a typographical error. Removing the extra 'and' corrects the sentence structure.

× It's always depend on the situation.

✓ It always depends on the situation.

The verb 'depend' should be in the third person singular form 'depends' to agree with the singular subject 'It'. Also, 'always' should come before the verb for correct adverb placement.

× It's always depend on the situation.

✓ It always depends on the situation.

The verb 'depend' must be conjugated as 'depends' to agree with the singular subject 'It' in the present tense.

× what situation is currently I am doing right?

✓ what situation I am currently in right now?

The original sentence has incorrect word order and pronoun placement. The corrected sentence places the pronoun 'I' properly and uses the preposition 'in' to indicate the situation.

× I don't have a habit about writing Diaries.

✓ I don't have a habit of writing diaries.

The correct preposition to use with 'habit' is 'of', not 'about'. Also, 'diaries' should not be capitalized unless it is a proper noun.

× I can everything kept on my mind.

✓ I can keep everything in my mind.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and verb form. 'Can' should be followed by the base verb 'keep', and the preposition 'in' is needed to indicate where things are kept mentally.

× I will record my life based on the clicking by clicking photos and capturing videos.

✓ I will record my life by clicking photos and capturing videos.

The phrase 'based on the clicking by clicking' is redundant and incorrect. The correct preposition to express the method is 'by' followed by the gerund forms 'clicking' and 'capturing'.