Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answerが少し繰り返しが多く、自然な英語表現に改善が必要です。また、具体的な内容を加えて答えを豊かにしましょう。

例: No, I don't write a lot in my daily life. Mostly, I only write homework assignments or academic papers for my university courses.

提案: 答えが少し曖昧で、理由の説明が不十分です。より具体的に好きな理由を述べ、接続詞を使って論理的に話しましょう。

例: I prefer writing scientific papers because I enjoy researching and presenting facts clearly, unlike essays or diaries which I found difficult since childhood.

提案: 文法の誤りを直し、より自然な表現にしましょう。また、将来の変化について具体的な予想を加えると良いです。

例: Yes, I think what I write will change. For example, now I mostly write academic papers as a student, but after graduation, I might write more professional reports or emails.

提案: 答えに誤りがあり、意味が伝わりにくいです。正しい単語を使い、理由を明確に述べましょう。

例: I prefer handwriting when planning or thinking because it helps me focus better and reduces distractions compared to typing.

提案: 文の構造を整理し、繰り返しを避けて自然な英語にしましょう。具体的な期間を明確に述べると良いです。

例: I tried keeping a diary in junior high school, but I only managed to keep it for three days before I stopped.

提案: 内容は理解できますが、単語の選択と文の流れを改善し、より自然な表現にしましょう。

例: Usually, I don't record my daily life because I don't find it necessary, and I also find it hard to maintain such a habit.

× I don't write essays or other things in my everyday life except for writing those homework or papers in my university.

✓ I don't write essays or other things in my everyday life except for writing homework or papers at my university.

'Those homework' is incorrect because 'homework' is an uncountable noun and does not take 'those'. Also, the preposition 'in' should be 'at' when referring to university as a place. Use 'writing homework or papers at my university' instead.

× Well I'm not that good at writing essays or diary from my childhood so I don't like to write those and I prefer writing papers or more scientific articles.

✓ Well, I'm not that good at writing essays or diaries since my childhood, so I don't like to write those and I prefer writing papers or more scientific articles.

The word 'diary' should be plural 'diaries' because it refers to multiple entries or the habit of writing diaries. Also, 'from my childhood' is better expressed as 'since my childhood' to indicate a time period starting in the past continuing to now.

× Oh yeah, it could be changed.

✓ Oh yeah, it could change.

The phrase 'could be changed' implies passive voice, but here the meaning is that the things themselves might change, so the active form 'could change' is appropriate.

× but after I graduated from school it could be changed.

✓ but after I graduate from school it could change.

The sentence mixes past tense 'graduated' with modal 'could' referring to future possibility. Since the event is in the future, 'graduate' (present simple for future event) fits better. Also, 'could be changed' should be 'could change' as explained before.

× Oh well, I prefer riding on my hands when I'm thinking about something or planning what to write because it helps me to concentrate on my thinking and in this way I'm less likely to be distracted.

✓ Oh well, I prefer writing by hand when I'm thinking about something or planning what to write because it helps me to concentrate on my thinking and in this way I'm less likely to be distracted.

The phrase 'riding on my hands' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'writing by hand' to indicate handwriting. 'Riding' is unrelated here.

× Well, I've tried to keep Diaries when I was in junior high school, but I quit it soon after.

✓ Well, I tried to keep diaries when I was in junior high school, but I quit soon after.

The present perfect 'I've tried' is inconsistent with the past time 'when I was in junior high school'. Use simple past 'I tried'. Also, 'Diaries' should be lowercase 'diaries'. 'Quit it' is better as 'quit' because 'quit' is transitive but here the object is implied.

× I only. Keep it for three days and after that I've never tried to keep Diaries.

✓ I only kept it for three days and after that I've never tried to keep diaries.

The sentence has a period after 'only' which is incorrect. 'Keep' should be past tense 'kept' to match the past time frame. 'Diaries' should be lowercase 'diaries'.

× Well, usually I don't record my lives in my daily life because I think it's not necessary for me to keep track of my daily lives and also it's very difficult to keep this habit.

✓ Well, usually I don't record my life in my daily life because I think it's not necessary for me to keep track of my daily life and also it's very difficult to keep this habit.

The word 'lives' is plural but here it should be singular 'life' because it refers to the speaker's own life. 'Daily life' is a singular uncountable noun.