Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more clear and concise. Avoid repeating phrases like 'I write a lot' multiple times. Also, explain your ideas more clearly, for example, what do you mean by 'help negative idea'? Use simple and correct sentences to express your thoughts.

例: Yes, I write often because it makes me happy. I like to write about my life stories and personal experiences, which helps me express my feelings clearly.

提案: Focus on giving a clear and direct answer. Avoid unclear phrases like 'negative right imaginative right doodling'. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically. Also, try to complete your sentences and avoid incomplete thoughts.

例: I like to write different kinds of articles because it is my favorite activity. Writing helps me express my imagination and feelings. Sometimes, I also write letters to friends.

提案: Try to organize your answer with clear sentences and use linking words like 'because' or 'so'. Avoid short, incomplete sentences. Explain your ideas more clearly, for example, how technology changes writing.

例: Yes, I think writing will change in the future because many people use technology like laptops and keyboards. This makes writing faster and easier.

提案: Try to use correct grammar and avoid repeating the same idea. Use linking words like 'because' to explain your preference clearly. Also, keep your sentences concise and avoid redundancy.

例: I prefer typing rather than handwriting because it is more convenient and faster, especially at my workplace. It also helps me send emails easily.

提案: Make your answer clearer by explaining how often you write in your diary and why. Avoid repeating words and use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

例: I keep a diary regularly because it helps me remember important information I learn from Google or YouTube. I also write about my visits to different places.

提案: Try to use correct words and grammar. For example, 'NATO reminding call' is unclear; you might mean 'notification reminders' or 'alarm calls'. Explain your methods clearly and use linking words to make your answer coherent.

例: I use reminder calls and recording apps to keep track of important moments in my life. I also take selfies and save them as PDF files to remember special occasions.

× I write a lot because it gives me more pleasure when I write a lot, it makes me feel happy and it allows me to help negative idea.

✓ I write a lot because it gives me more pleasure when I write a lot, it makes me feel happy and it allows me to help negative ideas.

The word 'idea' should be plural 'ideas' because it refers to multiple negative thoughts or concepts, not just one. In English, countable nouns need to be plural when referring to more than one.

× Especially my life, my life stories or sometime I find one particular.

✓ Especially my life, my life stories or sometimes I find one particular.

The word 'sometime' is an adverb meaning 'at some unspecified time' and is incorrect here. The correct word is 'sometimes' to indicate 'occasionally'. Also, 'one particular' is incomplete and unclear; it should be followed by a noun, but since the sentence is incomplete, only 'sometimes' is corrected here.

× I like to write a different kind of articles because it's my favorite activities.

✓ I like to write different kinds of articles because they are my favorite activities.

'A different kind of articles' is incorrect because 'kind' should agree in number with 'articles'. It should be 'different kinds of articles'. Also, 'it's my favorite activities' is incorrect because 'activities' is plural and should be matched with 'they are'.

× Actually, when I write it really help me and to create negative right imaginative right doodling on my journal.

✓ Actually, when I write, it really helps me to create imaginative doodles in my journal.

The sentence is awkward and contains redundant words like 'negative right imaginative right'. The verb 'help' should be 'helps' to agree with singular subject 'it'. Also, 'doodling' should be 'doodles' as a noun, and 'on my journal' should be 'in my journal'.

× In contrast, sometime I write a letter write a lot for another article, so when.

✓ In contrast, sometimes I write letters or many articles.

'Sometime' should be 'sometimes' to indicate frequency. 'Write a letter write a lot for another article' is unclear and grammatically incorrect. It should be 'write letters or many articles' to make sense and correct plural usage.

× I believe that it would be a change.

✓ I believe that it will be a change.

The modal verb 'would' is used for hypothetical or conditional situations. Since the speaker is expressing a belief about the future, 'will' is more appropriate.

× Actually. A writer nowadays people rely on the technology, especially a keyboard, electronic keyboard, laptop.

✓ Actually, writers nowadays rely on technology, especially keyboards, electronic keyboards, and laptops.

'A writer nowadays people' is incorrect; it should be 'writers nowadays'. Also, 'technology' is uncountable and does not need 'the'. The items listed should be plural to match general reference.

× So in the future it would be changed.

✓ So in the future it will change.

'Would be changed' implies passive voice and conditional mood, which is not appropriate here. 'Will change' is active and expresses future certainty.

× I always prefer a typing other than handwriting when I write due to it's really convenient and pretty affordable for me especially on my workplace and I really prefer to typing because it's really easy and whenever I write sent e-mail that time I sent easily.

✓ I always prefer typing rather than handwriting when I write because it's really convenient and affordable for me, especially at my workplace. I really prefer typing because it's easy, and whenever I write, I can send emails easily.

'A typing' is incorrect; 'typing' is uncountable and does not need an article. 'Other than' should be 'rather than' for preference. 'Due to' should be followed by a noun phrase; 'because' is better here. 'On my workplace' should be 'at my workplace'. 'Prefer to typing' should be 'prefer typing'. The sentence about sending emails is awkward and corrected for clarity and grammar.

× I always keep Diaries for for with me because it's really helpful for me when I get information from the Google or YouTube.

✓ I always keep diaries with me because they're really helpful when I get information from Google or YouTube.

'Diaries' should not be capitalized unless it's a title. 'For for with me' is incorrect; 'with me' is sufficient. 'The Google' is incorrect; 'Google' is a proper noun and does not need 'the'. 'It's' should be 'they're' to agree with plural 'diaries'.

× I write a lot on the diary which keep me remember after after and when I visit anywhere.

✓ I write a lot in the diary which helps me remember things afterwards and when I visit places.

'On the diary' should be 'in the diary' because we write inside a diary. 'Keep me remember' is incorrect; it should be 'helps me remember'. 'After after' is redundant and unclear; 'afterwards' is better. 'Visit anywhere' is vague; 'visit places' is clearer.

× On particularly I use of NATO reminding call or recording apps because it's really helpful for me, especially when when it's come for my life like to a special moment that time I take a selfie and I keep this PDF file.

✓ In particular, I use note reminders or recording apps because they're really helpful for me, especially when it comes to special moments in my life. At those times, I take selfies and keep these PDF files.

'On particularly' should be 'In particular'. 'Use of NATO reminding call' is unclear and likely a mishearing; corrected to 'note reminders'. 'When when it's come for my life like to a special moment' is ungrammatical; corrected to 'when it comes to special moments in my life'. 'That time I take a selfie' should be 'At those times, I take selfies'. 'Keep this PDF file' corrected to plural 'these PDF files' to match context.