Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer clearer and more natural by correcting grammar and avoiding redundancy. For example, say "I have been writing a lot recently because I am studying for IELTS, which requires a lot of writing practice."

例: Yes, I have been writing a lot recently because I am preparing for the IELTS exam, which involves a lot of writing practice and helps me improve my skills.

提案: Avoid repetition and improve sentence flow by using linking words. For example, "I prefer writing my daily routine in a diary because it helps me track my thoughts and feelings every evening."

例: I prefer writing my daily routine in a diary because it helps me keep track of my thoughts and feelings each evening.

提案: Make your answer more coherent by linking ideas and expanding slightly. For example, "Yes, I believe the things I write will change because as we grow and experience more, our thoughts and perspectives evolve."

例: Yes, I believe the things I write will change over time because as we grow and experience more in life, our thoughts and perspectives naturally evolve.

提案: Improve grammar and sentence structure for clarity and naturalness. Use linking words to connect ideas. For example, "I prefer typing because it is quicker and easier for me. Also, typing helps me write clearly, so others can understand me better, unlike handwriting which can sometimes be difficult to read."

例: I prefer typing because it is quicker and easier for me. Additionally, typing helps me write more clearly, so everyone can understand what I mean, whereas handwriting can sometimes be hard to read.

提案: Make your answer more concise and natural by avoiding redundancy and using linking words. For example, "I use a diary every day because it helps me stay organised and remember important things and moments."

例: I use a diary every day because it helps me stay organised and remember important things and special moments.

提案: Improve sentence structure and clarity by organising your ideas logically and avoiding repetition. For example, "I use various methods to record my life, such as digital cameras, handwriting, and typing. I especially enjoy making videos because they capture moments and help me reflect on myself."

例: I use different methods to record my life, including digital cameras, handwriting, and typing. I particularly like making videos because they capture moments and allow me to reflect on myself.

× Yes, I write a lot lately as I am studying for aisles and it needs lots of writing and that helps me practice.

✓ Yes, I have been writing a lot lately as I am studying for IELTS and it needs lots of writing, which helps me practice.

The original sentence uses 'write' in simple present tense with 'lately', which is incorrect. The present perfect continuous tense 'have been writing' is appropriate to express an action continuing up to now. Also, 'aisles' is a misspelling of 'IELTS'. The phrase 'that helps me practice' is better connected with 'which helps me practice' for clarity.

× I prefer to to write my routine in the diary.

✓ I prefer to write my routine in the diary.

The sentence contains a repeated word 'to to', which is a typographical error. Removing the extra 'to' corrects the sentence.

× I try to do that every evening to track my thoughts, my feelings.

✓ I try to do that every evening to track my thoughts and my feelings.

The original sentence lists 'my thoughts, my feelings' without a conjunction, which is less clear. Adding 'and' improves sentence structure and clarity.

× I believe yes.

✓ I believe so.

The phrase 'I believe yes' is unnatural in English. The correct expression is 'I believe so' to affirmatively respond to a question.

× Of course our thoughts change and we see differently now.

✓ Of course, our thoughts change and we see things differently now.

Adding a comma after 'Of course' improves readability. Also, 'see differently' is vague; adding 'things' clarifies the meaning.

× I do prefer typing, I feel more quicker and easier for me and as well it it helps me to be clear writing and everyone can understand what I'm trying to say because sometimes in handwriting can be difficult.

✓ I do prefer typing; I feel it is quicker and easier for me, and it also helps me write clearly so everyone can understand what I'm trying to say because handwriting can sometimes be difficult.

The phrase 'more quicker' is incorrect; 'quicker' alone suffices. 'Easier for me' needs a subject ('it is'). 'As well it it helps me to be clear writing' is awkward and contains a repeated 'it'. Rephrasing to 'it also helps me write clearly' is clearer. The sentence is long and benefits from punctuation to separate ideas.

× In my everyday life I use a diary.

✓ In my everyday life, I use a diary.

A comma after 'life' improves sentence clarity and flow.

× It helps me to be more organized and as well not to forget important things and important moments.

✓ It helps me to be more organized and also not to forget important things and important moments.

The phrase 'and as well' is awkward; replacing it with 'and also' is more natural in this context.

× Methods which I use to record my life are digital cameras, handwriting, typing, it really depends. Video videos.

✓ The methods I use to record my life are digital cameras, handwriting, and typing; it really depends. I also like making videos.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'Video videos' is incorrect and unclear. Rephrasing for clarity and grammatical correctness improves understanding.

× I like to make lots of videos because they just pause that moment I am finding myself.

✓ I like to make lots of videos because they capture the moment; I find myself in them.

The phrase 'they just pause that moment' is incorrect; 'capture the moment' is the correct expression. 'I am finding myself' is awkward; 'I find myself in them' is clearer.