Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Jawaban Anda sudah cukup baik dan relevan, namun bisa lebih efektif dengan menghindari kalimat yang terlalu panjang dan mengulang kata yang sama. Cobalah untuk membuat kalimat yang lebih ringkas dan langsung ke inti jawaban.

例: Yes, I write regularly by keeping a daily journal and practicing essays, which helps me improve my skills for my scholarship application.

提案: Perhatikan pengulangan kata seperti 'which which' dan gunakan kalimat yang lebih alami dan jelas. Tambahkan detail spesifik untuk memperkaya jawaban Anda.

例: I enjoy writing in my journal about daily events because it helps me reflect on my experiences and learn from them.

提案: Hindari penggunaan kata-kata tidak formal seperti 'umm' dan 'kinda'. Gunakan kalimat yang lebih jelas dan terstruktur untuk menyampaikan pendapat Anda.

例: Yes, I believe my writing topics will change as I develop my habits and start focusing more on subjects I am passionate about.

提案: Kalimat Anda agak membingungkan terutama bagian 'more than the target'. Gunakan kalimat yang lebih jelas dan hindari kesalahan tata bahasa seperti 'prefer handwriting than' yang seharusnya 'prefer handwriting to'.

例: I prefer handwriting to typing because writing on paper gives me satisfaction and helps me think more clearly.

提案: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan gunakan kalimat yang lebih alami. Misalnya, gunakan 'write' bukan 'wrote' untuk menunjukkan kebiasaan saat ini, dan hindari pengulangan kata 'weekly'.

例: I consider my journal as my diary, and I write in it weekly to check in with myself.

提案: Kalimat Anda kurang jelas dan ada kesalahan tata bahasa. Cobalah untuk membuat kalimat yang lebih sederhana dan jelas, serta hindari penggunaan frasa yang membingungkan.

例: I don't use any specific method; I simply write down my thoughts whenever I feel like it.

× The topics are the things that happen in my daily life which which makes me reflect in my day-to-day activity.

✓ The topics are the things that happen in my daily life which make me reflect on my day-to-day activities.

The pronoun 'which' refers to 'topics' which is plural, so the verb should be 'make' not 'makes'. Also, 'reflect in' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'reflect on'. Additionally, 'activity' should be plural 'activities' to match the context.

× Actually there is no specific method that I use. I just write what is on my mind and which find me felt good about it.

✓ Actually, there is no specific method that I use. I just write what is on my mind and which makes me feel good about it.

The relative pronoun 'which' should be followed by 'makes' to agree with singular 'which'. The phrase 'find me felt good' is incorrect; it should be 'makes me feel good' to express the intended meaning properly.

× I like to write in my journal. The topics are the things that happen in my daily life which which makes me reflect in my day-to-day activity.

✓ I like to write in my journal. The topics are the things that happen in my daily life which make me reflect on my day-to-day activities.

The preposition 'reflect in' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'reflect on' when talking about thinking carefully about something.

× Umm, probably yes. Maybe when the habits are built, I kinda write about the specific topics that I love.

✓ Umm, probably yes. Maybe when the habits are built, I kind of write about the specific topics that I love.

The informal slang 'kinda' should be written as 'kind of' in formal or semi-formal contexts to improve clarity and correctness.

× I prefer handwriting than typing because it gives me the feeling of satisfaction when writing on paper and it stimulates my brain more than the target.

✓ I prefer handwriting to typing because it gives me the feeling of satisfaction when writing on paper and it stimulates my brain more than typing.

The correct preposition after 'prefer' is 'to' not 'than'. Also, 'more than the target' is unclear; it should be 'more than typing' to make sense in context.

× Basically my journal is my diary and I wrote them weekly though for a weekly check in.

✓ Basically, my journal is my diary and I write in it weekly for a weekly check-in.

The verb 'wrote' is past tense but the context suggests a habitual action, so present tense 'write' is appropriate. Also, 'them' is incorrect as it refers to plural; 'it' refers to the singular 'journal'. 'Check in' should be hyphenated as 'check-in' when used as a noun.